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Scotty32 
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 Topic: Point Blank Vs. DalinquentPosted: 24 September 2007 at 2:37pm |
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Venomous: Point Blank
Asylum: Dalinquent 26 Lines Each Deadline = 7th October Be There Or Be Square Like Spongebobs Pants Blind Drops to me Topic: House Fire |
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dalinquent
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Posted: 07 October 2007 at 10:38pm |
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Finishing up now!!!
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Fatal
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Posted: 07 October 2007 at 10:42pm |
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Vote: Point Blank
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dalinquent
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Posted: 07 October 2007 at 10:45pm |
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there you go, hating again
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Kay B
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Posted: 08 October 2007 at 9:45am |
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you ALL miss the deadline....N's for all...Dynasty wins
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dalinquent
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Posted: 08 October 2007 at 9:45am |
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Blind drops dumbass
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Posted: 08 October 2007 at 11:37am |
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Me, Lynxx AND UNLM Got Our Verses In....Unfortunately Hollow Didnt.
An Apparently None Of Your Verses Are In (I Think)....So Ya'll Are No-Showin Fags.... |
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Posted: 08 October 2007 at 11:39am |
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LOL...APOLOGIES...I Read AM Instead Of PM...
 ...*Backs Out Awkwardly*
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Kay B
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Posted: 08 October 2007 at 11:56am |
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Deadline = 7th October
*Checks his calender*..8th?....verse's? No-shows...dynasty wins! |
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Point Blank
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Posted: 08 October 2007 at 12:08pm |
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Fuck Dynasty...Its Upto Scotty To Post The Verses...
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Kay B
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Posted: 08 October 2007 at 12:14pm |
Yawn ...no show hoes |
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Scotty32
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Posted: 08 October 2007 at 1:36pm |
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Point Blank:
The Doorbell Rings, It's Hannah, I've Invited Over
I Open The Door With A Smile, And Tightly I Hold Her I Can't Believe How Hot She Is...This Is Absurd Take Off Her Coat And Tell Her That Our "Dinner Is Served" She Runs To The Bathroom, An I Light The Candles Before I Forget I Nip To The Kitchen...But The Sudden Heat Has Brought Up A Sweat SHIT! I Smell Smoke,I've Inhaled It Deep Im Shakin An Weak, Walk Back Into The Room An I'm Failin' To See WHAT THE FUCK's HAPPENIN? I'm Franticly Thinkin I Guess I Musta Knocked A Candle When I Ran To The Kitchen Hannah Comes Back 'Dean I Can Smell...' Then Stops..Like Her Heart Did As She Passes Out And With A Loud Thud She Dropped To Carpet I Go The Kitchen For A Bucket Of Water, And Chuck It All Over The Place Some Goes In The TV By Hannah...And EXPLODES IN HER FACE!! Im Hopeless And Dazed, As The Flames Spread To The Floor Im Staring At The Place Were Hannah's Head Was Before I Take A Last Look At Her Body, So Pretty An Curvy It Was Then That It Hit Me... An Really It Hurt Me I Begin To Cry, My Heart Feel's Like A Block Of Ice An It's Slowly Melting Away As The Fire Start's To Rise I Try To Flee, Thinkin To Myself 'Where's The Door'? As I Step Over My Potential Wife's Burning Corpse I Dont Care No More, Jump Through The Window As It Breaks An Shatters I Stand Up..And Jus To Make Me Madder I See All My Neighbours Gather Fall To My Knees On The Front Lawn, Knowing Hannah's Laying In There So... I Cry All I Can Hoping That My Tears Will Somehow Tame The Inferno...  Dalinquent: This lady mothered my kid, And still we argued back and forth
The fucking whore, Took half of my shit after we got divorced Was away for the weekend, To distance this man from the nuisance Plus it was mandatory, A major part of the plan that was brewing Couldn't stand what I'd lose if that bitch came out on top in the courts 'I'll stop her for sure', She can't take my shit if I ain't got it no more Created a plot for the score, Started by asking some friends to lend a hand Two showed up...I guess the rest of them men didn't give a damn Set aside time in which we intend'd to plan, Get everything in order Met up at McDonalds, My phone rung while enterin', It was my teenage daughter Ignored the phone call, She must want money fa the store in the mall Luv her to death, But at this moment, It's hard enduring it all I wasn't sure about how, Just that me and my holmes were enraged We could fake a robbery, Cause an explosion or send my home up in flames ... After discussing abit, We decided to burn my home to the ground I'd leave the town, So it could happen while no one was around After the sun would go down, They'd show up as crooks an... Rob me blind, Then burn the house so I wouldn't know what was tooken When I returned, I'd Show up all shooken, Then here comes the pain Screaming out shit like, Everythings gone, How could one maintain Then of course I'd ask fa them insurance paper and come up...Well here is what happened next *You Have 1 New Voice Message* ... I arrived to my home, There was a circus where it formerly stood Desperately trying to find word to describe it, If only I could Go back in time, I would, To this day it still makes me hurl To know I basically cause the murder of my one and only baby girl *You Have 1 Saved Voice Message* "Hey Dad, I miss you, We haven't been speaking since you and mom split man" "Anyways, I'm visiting you this weekend, Guess I'll just use my key to get in" My daughter spoke to me from beyond the grave |
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Point Blank
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Posted: 08 October 2007 at 1:40pm |
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First Bar Should Say ...Ive Invited HER Over...And .... Dropped To Carpet Should Be Dropped To THE Carpet....My Bad.
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Posted: 10 October 2007 at 12:02pm |
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Dalinquent GMV... Point had a polished verse... was actually very well done, good job man... but as i told you on msn, the fire just kind of is there an' out of control... no real story behind it (other than knocking over a candle)... the story itself was done very well tho, otherwise...
Dal, while not having quite the same lyrical quality as far as elements go, had an incredible story... you kind of pre-empted it in the begining but the way it came about was real, real nice... i guess i just felt the way you did the topic more, had a better story feel to it...
very nice battle guys...
1-0 Dal
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Posted: 10 October 2007 at 12:34pm |
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I gotta agree with smooth on this, though point lyrically had dope verse and it was a enjoyable read, the whole piece lacked the dope story aspect to keep me hooked and reading, You had the basic outline of the story but didn't go into enough depth as previous topicals you've written. Where as dal had a dope story, verse lacked lyrically but in a topical it aint necessarily gotta be lyrical if you have a story which grips the reader. So for that reason i enjoyed reading dals more he really surprised me here....
Dope battle tho...Dal gmv |
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Posted: 14 October 2007 at 12:24pm |
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2-0 Dal
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