Topical Tyranny: Round 1 - Battle 3 : Votes

Please vote for your 2 favourite verses from this battle
Voting will end on the Monday 14th April
The 2 verses with the most votes will advance.
Please don't fuck around with the poll, and only explained votes will count

Maybe it's just me, but as far as I can see, there are no verses posted in the link you gave us.

this is weird...earlier, i saw the verses posted in the battle...there were only 3 of em...what happened?...

Verse 1 Was a real nice verse vocab was dope and the direction taken was really nice, only problem i had was the flow, seemed a few lines were stretched to shit but than others flowed perfect, loved the opening and closing bars, story really had me hooked, not the best verse by this person (and yeah i know who wrote it) but definetly a good one...nice verse

Verse 2 This verse was ok, story didnt really surprise me and for that reason didnt really have me gripped enough for me to feel it, vocab was ok and had some nice lines but as a whole i wasnt really feeling the general idea behind the story.

Verse 3 Was also a real nice verse, story was dope and vocab was great only thing i didnt like was the ending it just seemed so unreal it had a interesting twist but didnt really pull it off well enough imo, idea was nice but needed a diffrent way around it to come off doper, that was the only fault imo though rest was dope

Two dope verses one ok verse...clear winners

Verse 1 & 3

Verse 1

I like the way u start ur story, situation, shows reader what is about to happen, tells about ur feeling.. ur start and ending was good... Also I like some metaphoric concept.. this was a good read.. but still I would say u need a strong start and a strong ending.. lyrically the rhyme scheme was balance.. flow was ok..

Verse 2

This was ok.. but kinda started of weak but end it up weak. I jus didn't enjoy your concepts, child cry thats a usual thing always happen.. time with ladies? doesn't sound good..

Verse 3
This was pretty dope story.. very clear points, easy read, nice flow.. starting was every good and strong ending.. cool stuff..

Overall: pretty easy to predict..
Vote... Verse 1 and 3

Verse 1
Lyrically...good vocabulary...very nice imagery and emotion...only thing wrong, there wasnt a real flow to it...when i read it, it only turned out like i was just talkin...i cudnt find the rhymthm...the rhyme scheme was well used though...

Story...real nice story...had a cool concept and went along with it real nice...you progressed real well and told it very descriptive...good stuff...

Verse 2
Lyrically...it was a bit plain and basic...hardly a flow and vocabulary wasnt very advance...too straightfoward of a verse...

Story...the story wasn't very well written...i think there was more focus on something else then really, CLEARLY, depicting the hijacking...didn't really like the approach u took for the plot...didnt real progress very well either...

Verse 3
Lyrically...still on the basic side, but it wasnt to the point where it got me bored...u took the approach to clearly tell it...vocab wasnt advance, but the imagery was pretty good...

Story...i like the story...began wit a lil prelude, then got to plot without it sounding rush...i liked the quick sequence...and it ended well...it was told well thrughout, and i was able to enjoy it...

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Verse 1 and Verse 3 GMV...