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NepentheZ 
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... { 26 } ... Joined: 11 October 2004 Location: Yea..Cake. Man Status: Offline Points: 7727 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 40-32-1 Form: WWLWLW |
 Topic: LA MMX RD1 - Lucky D v HANGINGPosted: 27 January 2010 at 3:25pm |
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 I'm so fucking intelligent, half the time I don't even know what I'm saying... |
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Lucky D
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Joined: 17 November 2008 Location: Canada Status: Offline Points: 1528 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 17-21-0 Form: WWLLLL |
Posted: 29 January 2010 at 1:29am |
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Come outta retirement...only to get picked off Believe you ain't Ali..this Chemical kicked soft Listen Miss Boss...really ya can't lead shit Should call ya Doctor..ya need a pre-script You just D's bitch...like ya crew ya mod half up Even prostitutes say....this Jon can't fuck Now ya try and stand up...so listen and watch this Cancel your comeback...get dropped like rock bitch Take tha piss and pot kid... off ya meds ya own self How many more dudes is Scoot gonna have to get to help... ***Brett Favre came outta retirement and through a pick in tha final seconds Chemincal Ali hung recently Doctor-Prescript-pre written Rockbitch promotions-Myspace Canceled
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hanGing
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Not to be Fucked With. Joined: 28 October 2003 Status: Offline Points: 5008 Text Rank: #8 Stats: 30-10-6 Form: NNWLNL |
Posted: 30 January 2010 at 2:07pm |
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*breathes*
Lucky D? Lucky Me - how the fuck you gonna win this I'm not going to lose to someone who speaks broken english! However you spin this shit - there's no way I'm fearing ya How can you be a leader of lyricists when you don't fit the criteria Your crews batting with averages? An average that you bring down! The kid that wanted to be a ringleader - but always the class clown Let this farse drown! Though give him is due - this kid's precocious Begged Stalin to join his crew - fool, you can't get talent through osmosis For the fallen victim, a final preminition, now that this cunts killed Your calling? Destroyed, Drooling - holding a sign - saying welcome to huntsville! Explanation... Broken english - check the crew page - reads like a japanese translation.. "To lay tha ground work for tha unification of supreme lyricist" Rest is obvious - his IP points to Huntsville... |
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Calibra
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Joined: 28 March 2008 Location: Newcastle, UK Status: Offline Points: 2969 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 20-3-1 Form: WWWWWN |
Posted: 30 January 2010 at 2:18pm |
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Ok...
Lucky D - To start with I think your lines were a little short, like if you added an extra few words you could get ya point across better and the punch would come off harder. That being said, I though some of the concepts were abit weak, prescript was ok but could have been worked better. You seemed to be letting your multis dictate how the punch would turn out rather than the other way round. Just a lot of little jabs with nothing really hard hitting.
hanGing - Not a bad verse, I was feeling the criteria bar most, some tame hits in there aswell though. I think you could have improved your rhyming with more multis to make the verse flow smoother but it's not an essential. Stalin bar was cool too.
Overall - I expected a bit more from this tbh I think there were a lot of weak hits here but my vote goes to hanGing for just hitting harder than Lucky.
hanGing GMV
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NepentheZ
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... { 26 } ... Joined: 11 October 2004 Location: Yea..Cake. Man Status: Offline Points: 7727 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 40-32-1 Form: WWLWLW |
Posted: 30 January 2010 at 4:14pm |
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Lucky D - what Cal said, really. I mean, there just isn't enough content period, for there to be any real decent content in the mix there. You got some ideas, sure, but you've seemingly put no effort into this verse. I thought you'd be better than not giving yourself a real shot, in a winnable tourny. Really indirect, run of the mill fillerish kind of verse.
hanGman - not a great verse, but some direct punches in there. Wording is pretty poor, verse could flow better, but you had some better concepts, and better punches than Luck D. Pretty 1 sided battle. hanGing GMV. |
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Mackie
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Posted: 30 January 2010 at 4:30pm |
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lol at hangin doin a IP related punch, i like the abuse of power lol.
anyways, lucky felt that the lines were too short for you to explain shit properly, and the flow was too monotone like blah blah rhyme etc. not tryna be harsh but this was never a winning verse. n yh hang, jus more direct an landed punched, opener n stalin bar were cool. hang gmv |
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NepentheZ
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Posted: 30 January 2010 at 9:10pm |
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hanGman advances.
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