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    Posted: 04 July 2011 at 10:13pm
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DOPE THEME........

Burnin down a scalene shaped cone’a haze an squintin thru da refor – mist
A pathological dope smoker, that’s been stoned fa days an can’t see fa shit
All a dis Exuberant consumption straight sends me-ta-physical ascension,
And constant deliberation bout shit that just isn’t worth the mention,
Wit dem outta body experiences like me sliding out ma exoskeleton
Mans spaced out like lunar but decides ta just keep King’ L’in .....em
Ta keep it blazin like my man Marley, who never shot that deputy
Show some respect fa B! (One love) then drop a 10/10  in here fa equity  

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hahaha Clap

If yad of missed out "cone" from the first line - and "dope" from the second line, the opener would have flowed a lot nicer. It's not worth a mark-down though cuz the wordplay was well worded.

Show some respect for B? hmmmmm

I give you a 9.5 for this one Spume. Good shit
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Actually - if I can change my score - I'd like to give this a 10 cuz I dint realize it was done in 8 lines when I first read it

so yea - its a 10/10 from me
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straight...flow was choppy
that metaphysical line was dope

9/10
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