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J504
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Posted: 05 August 2011 at 3:10pm |
Tomorrow is yesterday-
especially when you keep making mistakes cause change is hard to make when you keep sayin it's "fate" But if it is meant to be, am I the best and who's testin me And should a pawn in the game ever really question his destiny? See, I mean, I'd like to find out or at least die trying... And ignore the critiques by blindin' the eyes spying Blocked the outside world continued on strong with all ports shut Hit the road with folded map - took Ophelia Todd's Shortcut Focused on beating the system - resisting the empire- fully engaged to rage against the machine Passed up the stage to learn from sages, some of the best you've ever seen But It's all the same as rich goes - Dressed nice or in ripped clothes Unwilling to drift slow -learned life's lessons through cliff notes The knowledge I earn is in trial and error, it's all from there Paid dues but still somehow I owe.... somebody...somewhere Slayed dukes and fucked dutchessess and thought that made me King Wore a crown made of shit, somehow I thought that made me bling Once thought wisdom was bought but nobody would pay me Once felt like love was on the right road - a 2-way street until I faced intersections where the lines became blurred and I was forced to think and extinguish my spoken word Then I lost my way- I now watch as others lose their way Ignorant as I once was as they casually choose their fates Yet, I remain silent and impotent within this silence Fists clinched as they attempt to solve it through violence I move quiet - ill-equipped to make a change with only my voice Unimportant and ineffective....but only by choice They bathe in their ignorance as I reserve my retort Sworn to duty - but intent just to observe & report A crossing guard with no arms or legs or a mouth to shout from Patronizing from sarcastic hands from which I sprout thumbs Learned through their anguish - another one of my experiments Cause I can't save them from this pain, it must be experienced Are you experienced? |
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CHAIN
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infinite jewels, meng! |
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Manc
Superior Member Joined: 02 April 2010 Status: Offline Points: 7032 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 82-4-2 Form: WWWWNW |
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Uh oh - he's back at it again hahaha
this bit ere J >>>> See, I mean, I'd like to find out or at least die trying... And ignore the critiques by blindin' the eyes spying............. flow was perfect! The 'blinding the eyes spying' bit had a very tightened bouncy flow to it - loved it. This drop had a really 'deep & meaningful' style to it. Some clever shit in there. Sometimes, your plays connect so effortlessley, I'm not always 100% sure if I'm gettin the plays blatantly, or making em up as I'm reading - sorta like when ya look at a cloud and make a picture out of it cuz of how ya perceive the look of it ............. confused myself to fuck there lol. The example in mind is the Rage Against The Machine bit - to me, I got the connection with the name and the Empire (evil empire) bit. Was I right or was I just making that from it? hahaha I loved this bar too ............ "The knowledge I earn is in trial and error, it's all from there Paid dues but still somehow I owe.... somebody...somewhere" Great comeback drop J |
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$n00z
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Good shit mane. Love these bars
And ignore the critiques by blindin' the eyes spying
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Unwilling to drift slow -learned life's lessons through cliff notes<<thats a quotable
i was getting like a "Lose Yaself" feelin wit this one. That goosebump type stuff. Good shit
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U already know...
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Dynamic
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very nice u got skill
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spume corrupt
Superior Member Joined: 27 April 2011 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 3163 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 20-7-1 Form: WLWLLL |
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First of J this was a real good read (enjoyed it a few times)
Love the way yo played around with the format to create this The opening 6 wa among my fave along with the ones Chain picked up on Had a deep feel to it like some life education shit or sumin Superior drop J good ups my man |
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TURTLE
Standard Member Joined: 10 September 2009 Location: Kansas City Status: Offline Points: 1508 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 12-17-1 Form: WNWWLL |
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Shyt J5 I gained experience reading this! Immaculent drop bro! Nice flow easy on the eyes and a nice closing line.. |
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