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    Posted: 05 August 2011 at 3:10pm
 
 
 
 
 
Tomorrow is yesterday-
especially when you keep making mistakes
cause change is hard to make when you keep sayin it's "fate"
But if it is meant to be, am I the best and who's testin me
And should a pawn in the game ever really question his destiny?
See, I mean, I'd like to find out or at least die trying...
And ignore the critiques by blindin' the eyes spying
Blocked the outside world continued on strong with all ports shut
Hit the road with folded map - took Ophelia Todd's Shortcut
Focused on beating the system - resisting the empire-
fully engaged to rage against the machine
Passed up the stage to learn from sages, some of the best you've ever seen
But It's all the same as rich goes - Dressed nice or in ripped clothes
Unwilling to drift slow -learned life's lessons through cliff notes
The knowledge I earn is in trial and error, it's all from there
Paid dues but still somehow I owe.... somebody...somewhere
Slayed dukes and fucked dutchessess and thought that made me King
Wore a crown made of shit, somehow I thought that made me bling
Once thought wisdom was bought but nobody would pay me
Once felt like love was on the right road - a 2-way street
until I faced intersections where the lines became blurred
and I was forced to think and extinguish my spoken word  
Then I lost my way- I now watch as others lose their way
Ignorant as I once was as they casually choose their fates
Yet, I remain silent and impotent within this silence
Fists clinched as they attempt to solve it through violence
I move quiet - ill-equipped to make a change with only my voice
Unimportant and ineffective....but only by choice
They bathe in their ignorance as I reserve my retort
Sworn to duty - but intent just to observe & report   
A crossing guard with no arms or legs or a mouth to shout from
Patronizing from sarcastic hands from which I sprout thumbs
Learned through their anguish - another one of my experiments
Cause I can't save them from this pain, it must be experienced

Are you experienced?

 
 
 
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Originally posted by J504 J504 wrote:

 until I faced intersections where the lines became blurred
and I was forced to think and extinguish my spoken word  
Then I lost my way-

poetry in motion


They bathe in their ignorance as I reserve my retort
Sworn to duty - but intent just to observe & report  

life's a bitch, verbal intercourse, take it in blood type quotable
....beautiful
 
 


infinite jewels, meng! Clap
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Uh oh - he's back at it again hahaha

this bit ere J >>>> See, I mean, I'd like to find out or at least die trying...
And ignore the critiques by blindin' the eyes spying............. flow was perfect! The 'blinding the eyes spying' bit had a very tightened bouncy flow to it - loved it.
This drop had a really 'deep & meaningful' style to it. Some clever shit in there. Sometimes, your plays connect so effortlessley, I'm not always 100% sure if I'm gettin the plays blatantly, or making em up as I'm reading - sorta like when ya look at a cloud and make a picture out of it cuz of how ya perceive the look of it ConfusedConfused ............. confused myself to fuck there lol.
The example in mind is the Rage Against The Machine bit - to me, I got the connection with the name and the Empire (evil empire) bit. Was I right or was I just making that from it? hahaha

I loved this bar too ............
"The knowledge I earn is in trial and error, it's all from there
Paid dues but still somehow I owe.... somebody...somewhere"

Clap Great comeback drop J

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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote $n00z Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 07 August 2011 at 3:58am
Good shit mane. Love these bars
 
And ignore the critiques by blindin' the eyes spying
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Unwilling to drift slow -learned life's lessons through cliff notes<<thats a quotable
 
i was getting like a "Lose Yaself" feelin wit this one. That goosebump type stuff. Good shit

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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Dynamic Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 07 August 2011 at 5:06am
very nice u got skill
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote spume corrupt Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 07 August 2011 at 10:58pm
First of J this was a real good read (enjoyed it a few times)
Love the way yo played around with the format to create this
The opening 6 wa among my fave along with the ones Chain picked up on
Had a deep feel to it like some life education shit or sumin
Superior drop J good ups my man

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Shyt J5 I gained experience reading this! Immaculent drop bro! Nice flow easy on the eyes and a nice closing line..
                     
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