Rebirth 2012: rd1: Point Blank vs Rameez

RULES

• 16 LINES EACH
• CREW VOTES WILL BE ALLOWED DUE TO LACK OF VOTERS
• ALL VOTES MUST BE FULLY BROKEN DOWN AND EXPLAINED
• BLIND DROPS WILL BE SENT TO MY INBOX
• YOU WILL BE GIVEN 2WEEKS AFTER CHECK IN TO COME UP WITH YOUR VERSE
• NO EXTENSIONS NO EXCUSES.
• IF YOU DO NOT CHECK IN WITHIN 3DAYS OF THIS POST. YOUR OUT VIA NO SHOW

BEST OF LUCK TO YOU FELLAS.

check

PB-
Suprised your wins have reached double figures coz you struggle to trouble niggas
This kids been taken down more times than his mothers knickers
lol funny...ok
I'm fuckin vicious, theres no way this faggot is testin me
My verse is 'more graphic' than the manga porn to which he's wankin relentlessly
lol
Ram's the wackest we'll ever see, it takes nothing to snuff him
It's clear why he's always postin in here (why?) coz EVERYBODY's above him!
cool
I'm a titan, everyone knew I'd win before this shit began
No doubt Rameez will die in this match like he's an Egyptian fan
lol
Man, you should have learned to speak before learning to spit
You've struggled tackling English in your battles more than Germany did
lmao
So prepare to be ripped, coz everything you drop is worthless
I can't think of nothing worse than your homo-erotic verses
cool personal
And we all know this guy is a pussy so he'll die in a hurry
This indian only drops 'hot shit' after binging on fiery curries
naw
Not even in your wildest dreams is there a chance rameez could beat me
So y'all about to see a knockout in rebirth without buying a Weezy CD
ok

Rameez
Yer a weak kid, too skinny to go first dood
Fact is,my avatar got harder punches than ya verse do
nice flow...but no hit.
Leave blank mad contemplatin his shit flows
cos ram'll get to the point faster than cliff notes
nice line and awsome concept but mostly self hype rather than a punch
You aint mean dean you just crazy with mania
How he gone clown me for manga his avatars castlevania*
lol
I’ll shred PB like im that bad guy dressed In purple
Im  into anime but this kid obsessed with Turtles?
ehh
I’ll burn PB like volcanos givin Hawaiians a Rough time
This weasel is #1 as long as Orion is OFFLINE
LOL
Ya crew were all shit coz they were all spittin like ‘junkie’ (junk key)
I’ll take this Venom snake out of this battle faster than guy with pungi
nope
I ain't feelin point in ya line, in my mind ya whole spit looks curled up
I'm above ya 'English' like pak knockin england in cricket world cup***
naw
PB lookin desperately for fake personals but in the end... 
Old age made u dumb coz u call me Paki before and now I'm Indian?
nope

Just to clarify my position...it was only fair to give a solid breakdown. Still I enjoyed reading those few punches Ram. Good job PB....nasty drop.

Only just read about the full explanations...........


Ram - First bar was jokes, and a decent humorous way to open up. The rest from then was decent and although the punches werent huge hitters - they still had that humour element and had me laughin away - right upto the bar about the Turtles - but then the Orion line, although a clever little dig - didn't seem as hard as some of ur previous hits, so it kinda made it fizzle a bit from there in. The closer, I felt, coulda been worded better in order to ave the reader focus more on the punch, as opposed to making it fit properly with the flow, as you read along.
All in all - a pretty decent verse, and definetly looks like ur improving more n more as you write.

PB - The opener was funny as fuck hahaha - great way to start the verse. The punchline in the next bar was a bit too stretched for my liking - but the wordplay was decent so it made me overlook the line length. The Egyptian fan bar was clever too - again, good wordplay to keep the sting in the hit. The football line will be better received by the English, so ya gotta be careful with lines like that usually - but again, a good play, and evidently, a clever reference. The curry punch was a bit hmmmm - and the fact he's not Indian sorta ruined that one for me. Closer was dope n probably half made up for the curry bar. All in all, a well rounded verse.

Rameez imoressed me with his verse - as did PB - so neither were a shit read - which makes for a good battle. Thanks for the good read lads but.......

MVGT - PB