Rebirth 2012: rd1: Chain vs Spume Corrupt

Checked

Fairly clear victory for Chain here in my view...

Spume, you came pretty formulaic...a lot of 'Chain' plays, I'd say you kept it to a decent standard, became weaker as you went on...you should stick to one's more like "drag Chain into deep waters" which include a diss...and less to one's like "Chain mail" and "Chain reaction", which are decent ideas in themselves but there isn't a diss there...in terms of rhyme scheme, it was again, decent...things like "rebirth read worse" are nice but you could do with a 'less is more' approach generally...it's a bit too formulaic & simplistic (i.e. longer multis & less of them)...mix it up with some complexity but more times than not it read like it was there for the sake of it rather than to add anything...you could also do with varying your attack & being more creative in your disses...you essentially came at him on one level, tried to mix it up with the dick riders line @ the end but it wasn't done well at all...more of a jab

Chain, much more sophisticated of a verse...you can see there's more 'shape' to it straight away...you're using less words but you're actually saying more. I didn't think it was a great verse in terms of hitting him hard consistently, but you landed a few hefty hits in there...loved the first line, showed your class & the follow up on that was awesome...Freudian Slips is pretty hard material, scurred to reply pretty much bodied him...closed it out nice as well with ship/reject/cheerlead hits...rest of it was take it or leave it really, except that "gay bars mean" line...ouch!!

So yeah, pretty comprehensive win for Chain...when you compare quality of hits & the overall approach to flow/structure/verse as a whole, Chain's above Spume here. Therefore vote goes to Chain.

Doesn't look good here Spume....heres why....

Spume

You the type’a shit wanker an fag my game’ll keep slaughtered

I drop Hooks like ship anchors, an drag CHAIN inta deep waters

Cool

My beefs awkward - ta step to! He’s not dissing with cracked shins

Ya’ll about ta see the CHAIN gone missing like snatched bling

Or hatchlings! Defenceless against this predation, blind an too lame

That 8 year 2 Win records pathetic! Got you pointless inside the food CHAIN

This set of Chain plays reduced the nameplay effect...no doubt tho they were kinda cool

This dudes brains smashed in! My spit clean rhymes hit ya sixteen times

I see the CHAIN do a series of LOOPS, locked down just protecting LINES

Again...CHAIN Name play

Perfecting mine, cold freezing fraud CHAINS wit no Gold Carrots

Smack the black clean out this fake sheikh! Expose an Arab!!!!!!!!(u know)

More Chain plays...kinda hammering the nameplay a bit much...all other content is clean...just the concepts need to be swapped and opted out for new personals and direction.

My flows a Hazard! You Hitt’ n U bend, how to explain that action

Spit an you end up flushed shit on paper, call it my CHAIN reaction

This was cool....would have been monsterous with a deadly personal behind it...but again...CHAIN nameplay is really repetitive.

Insanely crushing the ribcage of this bitch made, make him a plain fail

It’s clear to see this non warrior’s weakness is all in his CHAIN mail

Now this one was the best and should have followed the opener...the rest of the Chain plays could be erased and more different content could have been injected

My games how I bust ya rusty faggot links, my toxic spits blind ya

His verse in Rebirth will read worse, but will it stop the dick riders?

Oh shit! This....if reworded would have smashed...still an ok punch

CHAIN

aight, rookie...
I don’t hear no blip ‘cause ur greener than a radar screen
Going ‘brown’ on the ‘wood’, yousa fucking late fall scene
ok
Me and my peers don’t get what half of your gay bars mean
lol
On some weirdo shit, ur just another Based God meme
Don’t be mad at me when this comes out in the open
Bitch, I’m mad at YOU for letting it come out in ya Opens
The shit is too blatant, no Freudian slips there
I bet ‘shifting sticks’ put the boy in 5th gear

borderline  cool
Me, I hit the brakes, that’s definitely a red light
And this fag’s greener than some shit I almost said twice
Cool reference
I shitted on his name, he was too scurrrred to reply
Even them ‘If I Ever’ dudes weren't that 'Shai'
LMAO! Thing is I remeber that group and that song....good personal.
If J was Zapp Brannigan guess who would be Kif? …
You rode the Inc hard and they ain’t let you on the ship????!!
ok
You was never down, you’re just a re-ject, bitch
The first queer to cheerlead on some free lance shit
ok


Overall.....Spume....you're better than this. You already know it....You're crafty, you do well at linking concepts to punches. I seen you fuckin create some crazy shit with some of the freshest concepts. I just didn't understand why you chose practically ALL CHAIN NP's. I think you relied on the CHAIN nameplay and basicly shut out the tons of stuff you could and should have said about him.That Chain mail hit was nasty tho..lol...so was the opener. With that being said the rest was just more CHAIN names.I think you fared actually well tho considering the repetitiveness.

Overall
CHAIN....Wasn't one of your great scripts. I mean....I was expecting that "Kings Of Speech" tone you done when you dissed me. That was powerful open mic and almost every line was sick. But you kinda just held back IMO.It was that Shai bar that hit the most...had me crackin up when I remembered the song...the rest were between cool and ok.

I think both could have done better but I have to be honest this all boiled down to one bar and the rest purely creativity.Came down to consistency.CHAIN takes this.

V-CHAIN