Urban Legends: [R2-B2] Exoduzt vs Kiki Spirez |
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Scotty32
Site Owner Speaker of Wisdom & Truth Joined: 18 October 2003 Location: North West, UK Status: Offline Points: 10489 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-4-0 Form: WLLWLL |
Topic: [R2-B2] Exoduzt vs Kiki Spirez Posted: 04 June 2014 at 7:16pm |
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Rules 22-30 Lines 3 KO or First to 5 Deadline: 11th June 2014 at 8:00pm BST (GMT + 1) No extensions will be given - Late Entry = DQ Crew Votes Allowed Participant Voting Allowed Topic Futuristic |
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Exoduzt
Superior Member NaCl Joined: 08 April 2006 Location: Long Island Status: Offline Points: 5331 Crew: Elision Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 41-7-5 Form: WWWWWW |
Posted: 11 June 2014 at 1:42am | |
"What the future holds" Scaled trees and scraped knees lunchboxes and momma's food... Any problem that followed you we would laugh till all your trauma's thru... no hand me downs twins always win we always copped it new... and if anyone had to talk shit yeah we dropped a few... I remember being younger with my twin brother who ment the most to me... Just coastin' free thru the ocean breeze given me the closest squeeze... All our life thats how it was supposed to be... now i live with regret, god should have chosen me... but instead he ferociously, let the locust breathe so I hope & plead... and choke to breathe for him to reverse it, I provoke the need... but he never heard it, so I soak & bleed this life has turned so cold to me... My brother just received the news that he has terminal cancer... a few days to live whats to give as we both are searchin for answers... There's never any new news in the air but the same people who are choosin' to stare.... in the hospital, at my brother loosin' his hair, isn't probable, he's abused and declared... That I should rock you unless you choose to be aware, that its possible... If you ever get your ass unglued from the chair, you could find a cure & not a popcicle... Unstoppable was my brothers heart untill it shut down completely... He said I'll see you at the top never underground to meet me... What the future holds... After my brothers death I have become an activist... to fight this classless act of men who make money practicin' cancer sins... with all the money they receive why deceive the publics acts of bliss... charitable applicants who dont deserve sanctions with... these ass's in glasses who, use the money and attributes... for actin crude attackin you but use ya money for attractive boobs... So how can there be a future when you have no fight in you... government is making progress on nonsense despite the news... so to be perfectly honest I really dont know what life to choose... A few years later they declare the cure was discovered in 92'... so much for futuristic... |
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Kiki Spirez
Superior Member Joined: 30 December 2008 Location: Chesterfield Status: Offline Points: 4374 Crew: Kratos Kind Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 68-26-0 Form: WWWWLW |
Posted: 11 June 2014 at 1:45pm | |
It's '75, no credit and my debit has dried, Year the Stooges died and my youth had cried, They verified my low merit, medics had tried- To revive my wife.. Dude said, 'It's useless guys'.. So here I am- No home, no girl.. On the street, Just a ceiling fan- I zone, it whirls.. Ron's defeat, Gone's my seat, as I kick it and the rope tightens, Once it beats, now I live it and my scope brightens, Those ghost titans just broke in, my hope lightens, Like my dopes spiked, and my cokes whitened.. Dude standing there, looking fresh.. A mighty scare, A trilby and white tee, wearing something called 'Nike Air', 'Right, prepare..' said the figure, 'They seldom come bigger', Forget Minelli's figure, a rapper will name his Album 'N***er'.. Ron hangs bemused, so dude calms his friends fears, 'You must think i'm on crack.. You'll know that one in 10 years', The men hear a banging, 'They rang in to boot it through', 'I assume you're confused.. So imma prove i'm the future you', 'When you grove to your tunes, Jackson's can make a hit, Fun shit.. But say 'fuck it' if the youngest wants to babysit..' 'Maybe quit with those old sneaks, no way OJ misses, OJ slippers are dope, you're a die hard fan- So was OJ's missus'. 'Ok, diss this.. But you've still got Bill's mistress, end of 'Lost'- Video games with an ending boss, so don't end it cos- You won't know if in Friends, Rachel ends with Ross!' I've been sent to end your loss.. You'll be saved from danger by a stranger, And what's stranger is that you'll limit hurt- By living.. The futures fucked, but you really have to live it first. The door just burst. |
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SwordedStylez
Superior Member Joined: 16 August 2007 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 4921 Audio Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-0-1 Form: WWWN |
Posted: 12 June 2014 at 3:53am | |
OK this is a fucking tough one to judge. Firstly I do have a little bit of a problem with the way y'all used the topic. This seemed more like both of you were writing the topic of "future" not futuristic.
The definition of futuristic: " futuristic fjuːtʃəˈrɪstɪk/Submit adjective 1. having or involving very modern technology or design. "a swimming pool and futuristic dome" "his blackly comic futuristic fantasy" 2. dated of or characteristic of Futurism. "Futuristic embroidery""
You see where I have my issue. Future, and futuristic are not interchangeable unfortunately. As neither of you actually hit the topic, I'm going to ignore that part of the voting and focus instead on the merits of your two verses in terms of concept, story development, flow and technique. If you wish to dis-allow my vote because of this feel free. But both of you are off topic if the topic is "futuristic." Exo - Firstly, you have a very poetic voice when you do verses like these and a beautiful turn of phrase. Your concept is a deep one, and the emotion shines through in the verse. I'm assuming this is written in the abstract as opposed to by personal experience, but this feels like it WAS a personal experience with the way you wrote it. You paint such a picture with your words that when combined with your top-notch flow really pulls me in, and I enjoy this about reading your verses. Your story was well developed, well thought out and you emoted well. Technique was flawless as I expected. Kiki - This was like a summary of the last few decades, which I found quite fun to read actually. You're a clever one, I'll give you that. Every pop-culture and historical reference that popped up instantly makes a connection with the memories of said events that I have, you've got a perfect "hook" to bait your audience on, that's very very well done. Concept-wise this was top-notch, and you delivered it like a pro. Again technique is bloody flawless, and you didn't sacrifice any content for rhymes, props. This has got to be the best battle I've read since my return, both of you guys have talent and skill that I respect to a high degree. Kiki's verse draws you in with a nostalgic slant and gives you instant connection, Exo pulls your heart strings and makes you feel for the character. Both of you have flawless technique, incredible rhymes and flow for days. I can honestly say that voting on this shit is very very hard, trying to find a way to separate these verses is a pain in the arse, and it makes me wish one of you had actually hit the topic so I wouldn't be put in this position haha. Ok, I'm going to go with the verse that pulled me in the most. Kiki, you had me smiling from the start, that trip of nostalgia was incredibly well thought out and delivered like a pro, but I'm going to have to give this one to Exo. The imagery you used Exo, the beautiful poetic turn of phrase, the emotional connection. I know you struggled to write this, but you managed to get an emotional response, for that, you win this to me. |
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The Law
Site Moderator God of the Minions Joined: 15 June 2013 Status: Offline Points: 5504 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 64-8-8 Form: LNWWWW |
Posted: 12 June 2014 at 9:35pm | |
Exo - Imagery and topic (story) was dope and on point from bringing and end. Love the way the title repeated and then those last bars after that closed it perfectly. However, being it a piece about your brother getting terminal cancer and dying, I thought you could have added a bit more emotion to it. Yes, I read it and I knew the emotion was there from what was going on, but I didn't actually "feel it, feel it" while I was reading it. Hopefully, you understand what I am trying to say lmao. Anyways as far as rhyme scheme, flow, and technique was outstanding as always. It was a good piece, a bit different on the "futuristic" side of things as you went with the more immediate future, than the long run future. Dope piece none the less, you definitely know how to word your topicals to perfection.
Kiki - Like the approach you took on this as well, which is good to see. Both of you came unique in that aspect. I did think at the beginning it took a minute to build up and really draw me in. The technique and flow was flawless. I thought you could have added a bit more into the descriptive imagery department. Your references were mad on point though, and a few of them had me rolling. The OJ/die hard line was probably one of the best lines that I have seen used in a topical like that. Not very often you can take a bar in a topical and say that it was a standout bar, but I definitely thought that was. Overall this was a dope verse as well. MGVT: Exo - I felt that his verse was easier to follow from a topical/story type of stand point which made it a more enjoyable verse as a whole. As Kiki's was progressive with events that occurred, but didn't really bring the natural flow of "storytelling" to it. I know you don't have to tell a story in a topical battle, but many times that can really make a topical verse stand out and I thought it did that in this case with Exo's topical. Although, I thought he could have delved a bit deeper emotionally in this one, his picture of what was taking place was painted better in my mind. Both of you had unique approaches and did your thing though definitely. Would have been the battle of the round, even if their wasn't any no shows. Great battle here.
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spume corrupt
Superior Member Joined: 27 April 2011 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 3162 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 20-7-1 Form: WLWLLL |
Posted: 13 June 2014 at 11:28pm | |
"What the future holds" Scaled trees and scraped knees lunchboxes and momma's food... Any problem that followed you we would laugh till all your trauma's thru... no hand me downs twins always win we always copped it new... and if anyone had to talk shit yeah we dropped a few... I remember being younger with my twin brother who ment the most to me... Just coastin' free thru the ocean breeze given me the closest squeeze... All our life thats how it was supposed to be... now i live with regret, god should have chosen me... but instead he ferociously, let the locust breathe so I hope & plead... and choke to breathe for him to reverse it, I provoke the need... but he never heard it, so I soak & bleed this life has turned so cold to me... My brother just received the news that he has terminal cancer... a few days to live whats to give as we both are searchin for answers... "The subject matter of this topical really just hit home.......the future as in just a few days....thats profound deep shitt.........That trip down memory lane to start off just brought it home more.........Rhyming was just perfec thru most of this section......Skill set was off the scale overall" There's never any new news in the air but the same people who are choosin' to stare.... in the hospital, at my brother loosin' his hair, isn't probable, he's abused and declared... That I should rock you unless you choose to be aware, that its possible... If you ever get your ass unglued from the chair, you could find a cure & not a popcicle... Unstoppable was my brothers heart untill it shut down completely... He said I'll see you at the top never underground to meet me... What the future holds... After my brothers death I have become an activist... to fight this classless act of men who make money practicin' cancer sins... with all the money they receive why deceive the publics acts of bliss... charitable applicants who dont deserve sanctions with... these ass's in glasses who, use the money and attributes... for actin crude attackin you but use ya money for attractive boobs... So how can there be a future when you have no fight in you... government is making progress on nonsense despite the news... so to be perfectly honest I really dont know what life to choose... A few years later they declare the cure was discovered in 92'... so much for futuristic... "Loved the whole piece fam, as a Topical writer you already know I rate you second to none...Real talk...........The mechanics you use to put a piece together would never be in question....................My only real problem with this is.........Am just not feeling like you kept the thing on topic.........Obscure angle at best and to be honest I would have rather seen you do something more <Futuristic> with the topic" ......................................................................................................................................... It's '75, no credit and my debit has dried, Year the Stooges died and my youth had cried, They verified my low merit, medics had tried- To revive my wife.. Dude said, 'It's useless guys'.. So here I am- No home, no girl.. On the street, Just a ceiling fan- I zone, it whirls.. Ron's defeat, Gone's my seat, as I kick it and the rope tightens, Once it beats, now I live it and my scope brightens, Those ghost titans just broke in, my hope lightens, Like my dopes spiked, and my cokes whitened.. "Kiks you are a straight monster when it comes to rhyming.....FACT....When you bring this style OM not many can fuxk with it......Nother FACT.........Just thinking to myself this is topical writing and ..........am not sure it works in the same way...............its loose and I feel like I should be drawn more by this stage" Dude standing there, looking fresh.. A mighty scare, A trilby and white tee, wearing something called 'Nike Air', 'Right, prepare..' said the figure, 'They seldom come bigger', Forget Minelli's figure, a rapper will name his Album 'N***er'.. Ron hangs bemused, so dude calms his friends fears, 'You must think i'm on crack.. You'll know that one in 10 years', The men hear a banging, 'They rang in to boot it through', 'I assume you're confused.. So imma prove i'm the future you', 'When you grove to your tunes, Jackson's can make a hit, Fun shit.. But say 'fuck it' if the youngest wants to babysit..' 'Maybe quit with those old sneaks, no way OJ misses, OJ slippers are dope, you're a die hard fan- So was OJ's missus'. 'Ok, diss this.. But you've still got Bill's mistress, end of 'Lost'- Video games with an ending boss, so don't end it cos- You won't know if in Friends, Rachel ends with Ross!' I've been sent to end your loss.. You'll be saved from danger by a stranger, And what's stranger is that you'll limit hurt- By living.. The futures fucked, but you really have to live it first. The door just burst. " Gotta say fam cos you knowI never just read some shitt once... but you just nailed the fuck out of this topic ...........Same goes for you as goes for Exo..........Rhyme/verse mechanics are never in question with guys like you two.........everything about this delivery was nice..........Topic wise I feel you could have slowed things down a bit and brought a better version of this............" Gotta throw Kiki a lifeline here..........I got Massive respect for both my brothers here but at the end of the day I feel Brother Kiks had a better take on this topic than Brother Exo Vote Kiks |
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Kiki Spirez
Superior Member Joined: 30 December 2008 Location: Chesterfield Status: Offline Points: 4374 Crew: Kratos Kind Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 68-26-0 Form: WWWWLW |
Posted: 14 June 2014 at 11:45am | |
2-1.
Whilst me and Exo will always go, 'appreciate your votes, blah blah blah..' I'm sure we both mean it this time. Some good, indepth and honest votes, with a lot of respect. This is a quality battle, and I don't know who i'd vote for tbh. So thanks for taking the leap. I've been busy with work, but i'm gonna try and get a couple of votes down.
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Exoduzt
Superior Member NaCl Joined: 08 April 2006 Location: Long Island Status: Offline Points: 5331 Crew: Elision Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 41-7-5 Form: WWWWWW |
Posted: 15 June 2014 at 3:22am | |
^^^ seriously best detailed votes i have seen in a long time and ki big ups to you...you never let me down...whether topical or heads up...all the respect to you homie
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Rapper T
Suspended Joined: 25 November 2013 Location: NZ Status: Offline Points: 1423 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 22-27-0 Form: LLLWLW |
Posted: 18 June 2014 at 11:07am | |
Although I was expecting some spaceship futuristic Jestons-like Bill Gates shit, this was a dope and close battle, you both brought a really conceptualized, descriptive and creative drop, the structure went to Kiki, the punctuation was random but it sort of worked. Exo took the imagery and brought an emotional take to the topic to add that element and the twist at the end of the verse compared to Kiki Spirez who brought that random 4 word line ending, structurally you were cleaner but the 4 word line didn't really add a killer flip or punch as the closer which is still important in a topical rap battle of this caliber
You both have dope multies and inners, they can't be faulted and Kiki brought a more cryptic stylistic verse in this drop, Exo did tell a better story but as for being topically on, both only kind of hit the topic in that Exo brought a snapshot of the past to then close his verse in the present which was sort of future after the past and Kiki brought time travel which is futuristic also in '75 which was in the past too, was random you both set it in the past but I guess from there it's an easy place to get futuristic from. Both of you have obviously put a lot of effort into your verses, Exoduzt rhyme looks like he wrote it faster and Kiki rhyme looks like he spent more time chiselling it to the structure it's in but potentially too much which was still really creative but could have had more depth to the imagery with more descriptiveness and an emotional connection with the reader or something for that x-factor. Don't get me wrong, each verse was a dope verse and this battle was hard to vote on, I read each verse numerous times but in this battle having won by edging out Kiki only marginally MVGT Exoduzt
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The Law
Site Moderator God of the Minions Joined: 15 June 2013 Status: Offline Points: 5504 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 64-8-8 Form: LNWWWW |
Posted: 21 June 2014 at 10:12pm | |
Bump this up for them.. Let's go guys.
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Shankley
Superior Member Joined: 03 September 2013 Location: Leeds, England Status: Offline Points: 3369 Crew: Kratos Kind Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 37-43-1 Form: WNLWWL |
Posted: 22 June 2014 at 5:48pm | |
No idea why this is being slept on like it is.
Exo: Firstly dope verse man, always comes with dope shit. Not really on topic in the true definition of the word, but you flirted wih it. It ain't like it's totally unrelated. Now to the verse itself, I liked your story I hought it was a fresh take and well thought out. It had dark connotations with the death of the twin. You brought it to life with emotions and the anger that god had let him get cancer and die. You really got into the mind of a cancer patients relative let alone a twin. You had nice internal rhymes to help your flow and great multis to help with the complexity of this. The last stanza finished it off nicely, how you became an activist for this sort of thing. A dope verse with a great story. Keeks: Sick verse, again an interesting takeon the topic. You went with a dark undertone as well but it had a "light at the end of the tunnel" feel to it. I liked your rhyme scheme it was very nice with some insane multis. Your opening 4 lines had an unbelievable flow and it set the tone very well. But them last 4 of the first stanza was crazy smooth and the imagery was off the chain. The middle bit was awesome drove home the story, in the beginning I was "hmmm this is quite good" and by the end on the middle, I was like "Whoah, this is fucking awesome." The twist of a vision of his future self was mental and the way you closed it basically saying "yeah the futures shite, but you got to live it to find out!" was great. Awesome job. A real tough one to call Exo did a great job on the story twin brother dies of cancer but Kiki with the suicide case hanging himself then seein him in the future was just awesome. MVGT Kiki Spirez |
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Cuba
Senior Moderator Legendary Assassin Joined: 14 June 2004 Location: England Status: Offline Points: 12327 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 47-22-0 Form: WWWWLW |
Posted: 22 June 2014 at 7:33pm | |
Tough one...neither verse really covered "futuristic" but more like "future", even then I don't really think Exo did "future" since 2/3rds of his verse was kind of like a setup to the future really. So I don't really know how to judge this as I usually go for a combination of:
Did they stay on topic? How good was the interpretation of the topic? How good was the verse in its own right? Problem is, do I take the vote on the basis of the "future" as the topic and then say "I thought Keeks was more on that topic" or do I write that off completely and just try and base on which verse I liked the best? And how do I even really decide that?! Oh well... Exo What I liked...what I come to expect from you in terms of really smooth and progressive rhyme scheme, at points it came off a little bit fillerish but overall you maintained a really high standard despite a barrage of rhymes. I kind of liked the idea of writing a verse about losing a relative and the bitterness you then feel, especially if a cure comes too late... What I thought could've been done better...I think you could've been more compelling with your character, I dunno if it was because of the 'in your face' rhyming approach but as a reader I didn't really feel connected to him & wasn't that kind of bothered by his plight in a way...I think you maybe when into a bit too much depth about everything that happened in the story and could've focused a bit more on the characterisation rather than plot details, effectively...so yeah, in terms of a verse I think you had the basis of a good idea (even if you didn't tie it particularly to the topic) but I think you needed to be more focused on the best way to execute that idea as a concept rather than how you were going to execute the verse technically (which you were really good at and is always a strength in your drops) All in all, I really enjoyed your verse from a kind of linguistic point of view, but I didn't think you kind of captured me as a reader like you can do when you're at your best. Keeks What I liked...what always stands out for me is you have style for days, almost like a chameleon how you can change your approach, that adaptability is something that not that many people have in their arsenal in a way. You might just want to be careful about selecting when you go full throttle and when you tone it down a bit, it's tough to convey complex ideas in that form. That said, I really liked this verse, I kind of liked the idea of someone going to top themselves and being stopped by a future them (although I think maybe you could've had something more interesting to say than the stuff your future version of the character did say!!) but the concept was really cool because it's simple to get & you can have some fun with it like you did. What I thought could've been improved...this is a tough one, because in a way I like that you have details in there that don't really make sense (I.e. There's more to the story, details the listener doesn't understand, makes it feel a bit gritty) but equally it makes it a bit confusing too...like you talked about Rons defeat, didn't know if that was your character or some obscure reference...as I alluded to before, I thought it was a bit off conceptually that you have a guy about to kill himself and a future version of himself comes back to tell him about a Nas album, trainers & Lost!! And actually thinking about it, not sure it's that plausible that someone from basically our current era has the ability to go back....but anyway, that's science fiction!!! So yeah, I liked your approach, liked your concept but it's a bit difficult to follow really & I think it could've been more plausible/cohesive, but at same time I kinda liked the freshness of it & it's really a verse that only you could write in terms of the overall package. In the end, it's really a tough one...I think in a way your focus on form hurts you both a bit & I think you both really failed to deliver on the topic in hand, which obviously needs to be improved upon whoever progresses...that said, you both have that quality in terms of style that makes whatever you drop engaging to read. For me, in this one Keeks was that bit more unique which made his verse stand out for me more & ultimately I think I just found his more engaging and therefore my vote has to go to him... Vote = Kiki |
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Scotty32
Site Owner Speaker of Wisdom & Truth Joined: 18 October 2003 Location: North West, UK Status: Offline Points: 10489 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-4-0 Form: WLLWLL |
Posted: 22 June 2014 at 10:28pm | |
Awesome, 3-3. That means I can't close this as expected and the whole thing drags on even longer.
To keep it fair, it won't be next vote wins. It will have to keep going 'first to 5'. |
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U.N.L.M.
Standard Member Joined: 19 December 2006 Location: USA Status: Offline Points: 1955 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 23-15-0 Form: WWWWWW |
Posted: 22 June 2014 at 10:28pm | |
Very good battle.
The topic was interesting. Someone pointed out that futuristic and future are not really interchangeable and I think that really stood out. Luckily, I'd say both of you kind of missed the topic (with maybe Kiki more on topic than Exo) so it's not too difficult to look past that and judge the verses as is... Exo: I don't know how you always manage to capture an emotional story so well. There were certain parts that read so smoothly to me and your story always progresses quickly while hitting the right beats. It's like a quick ride through an emotional rollercoaster. I really liked your second set that delved into the after effects of the death. I'll admit, though, it felt like you may have needed some more lines to really flesh out the story or at least more lines focusing on what you went into with the second set. I did feel you did a good job balancing progressing the story quickly while also bringing about a deeper emotional aspect, but I can't just help but feel you would've benefited from another set of lines because the first verse seemed a bit long-winded to set up the future which is technically the focus (or IMO the more intriguing part) of the drop. Still, a great verse with your usual great flow and fitting title. Kiki: I thought your angle was a little more complicated and it ended up being a more interesting read because of it. I think sometimes your wording gets a bit jumbled to sacrifice for your structure/rhymes, but I think that has more to do with me trying to read it in a different way than you as a writer. I really liked the references and just the situation you were able to set up. I thought your last 4 lines were dope as fuck. Really liked the poetic nature of the wording and the whole stranger thing. Left a nice impression too. Obviously, the lack of a general story or real set up with the character was a little different. Tbh, I'd say it'd be a negative but I really think this angle on the topic really worked for you. Made me reread it because I wasn't quite sure I caught all the references/lines in the verse. Sometimes, that's a bad thing - but in this case it was more of a curious reread as opposed to a reread because the drop had inconsistencies or anything wrong with it. So props on that. Overall: Both came correct with their style. Quality drops. Glad I could read this one. I think what it comes down to is which one left more of an impression. I just feel that Kiki took more of a risk with his topical and it paid off in that it left a bigger impression on me after reading it. Exo's definitely had the more human/emotional aspect to it, but I think Kiki's future/past angle created a more dynamic verse. Props to both. V/Kiki
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Scotty32
Site Owner Speaker of Wisdom & Truth Joined: 18 October 2003 Location: North West, UK Status: Offline Points: 10489 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-4-0 Form: WLLWLL |
Posted: 22 June 2014 at 10:38pm | |
Thanks for the vote Unlm
I would just like to make it clear, despite how much I would love to move on to the next round, I obviously don't want someone to come along and vote kiki just for that reason. If you are voting to vote, it should be a fair and honest vote and should not be swayed by the events of the tournament so far. *edit* Since Round 3 is now up, Trizzy won't be allowed to vote on this battle. Edited by Scotty32 - 23 June 2014 at 11:10am |
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Beans
Superior Member Joined: 12 October 2013 Location: MA Status: Offline Points: 6718 Crew: EMPIRE Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 95-24-5 Form: WWWWWW |
Posted: 23 June 2014 at 5:30pm | |
ok this is a tough one with two completely different verse
Exo - you have a wild imagination man. the story was crazy. your flow n multis were on point. the imagery was wild as always. diffrent aproach topic wise and i felt you stayed on point. i always enjoy your storys.
^^ this shit was fire. had a great feel to it Ki's - i felt your verse was was a recap. your rhyming and flow is out of control sick. but it took me a bit to get into this then towards the middle i was hooked. but tbh i more of a story line aproach...
liked this part of your verse. again your flow and rhyming is off the wall. Overall this was a tough one to come down to, i enjoyed both verses but i felt kiki too me a bit to get into it where as exo's had me hooked beginning to end. i felt exo had a better imagery and his story was killer where ki's verse was mostly just a recap summery of the past tbh. Good battle fellas Vote Exo |
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Kay B
Superior Member Joined: 28 June 2005 Location: Watford Status: Offline Points: 9428 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 58-32-0 Form: LLWWWW |
Posted: 24 June 2014 at 2:51pm | |
Dope battle and two great verses in different styles, though i agree with SS that it seemed more future than futuristic both made a really nice read, firstly sorry this vote won't be as long as others im viewing on my ps3 so takes ages Exo - Real nice descriptive verse as expected before even reading tbh, though it looked like some lines may not flow it come off almost perfectly when read, was alot of emotion in the verse n thats what i personaly love reading in topicals, really enjoyed it Kiki - Arguably the most improved writer on the site n once again proved u can go with some of the best, loved the angle taken, different to exo's but still delivered just as nicely with perfect flow throughout, loved the vocab and general rhyming used to piece it all together, great verse Not an easy decision since i enjoyed both in different ways, but just think exo showed his experience more and the angle he took and the fact his verse felt as though it had a personal feel to it, for those reasons mvgt exo
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Scotty32
Site Owner Speaker of Wisdom & Truth Joined: 18 October 2003 Location: North West, UK Status: Offline Points: 10489 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-4-0 Form: WLLWLL |
Posted: 24 June 2014 at 2:56pm | |
5-4 to Exo, he's through to the next round.
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