Open Mic: Five Kings ft Chain, Nigma, Exo, Ill Scripturez |
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This was sick for sure.
Nigma - Crazzzy rhymes. Your rhymeschemes are so intricate and probably the most complex on the site. Ridiculous Chain - Brought that swag as always. Your ability to maintain one rhymescheme for a whole verse is second to none. Crazy metaphors with a lot of references as always. I.S - Definitely one of the best new members in Open Mic. The fact that you've slipped in with these established writers for a collab and dropped a verse on par with them is the best compliment I can pay you. In fact, I probably enjoyed your verse the most in this collab. Exo - Classic Exo verse, sick as always. That opener set the tone nicely and I don't know why but I got a real Wu-Tang kinda vibe from this SS - The flow in this was smooth as silk and it was just packed with internals which made it a really enjoyable read. I loved the 'dieting on deities' phrase but I must admit the pronunciation caught me out on first viewing so I had to go back over it aha Dope line-up and it didn't disappoint.
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iLL ScriptureZ
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Thanks PB, appreciate the feed
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SwordedStylez
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Yeah good Looks PB
BTW everyone needs to put the phrase in bold in their signature PB for Vet!!! get it done peoples. |
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Ink - Always remembered, never forgotten (as a fake as fuck piece of shit who tried to steal 2 persona's) |
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CHAIN
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im just going to highlight my favorite bars
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SwordedStylez
Superior Member Joined: 16 August 2007 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 4921 Audio Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-0-1 Form: WWWN |
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Haha is it me or is it a little frustrating that some of the best feed on this piece was given by its respective artists? Good looks bro, I'm really glad everyone came through so damn hard on this, I may well make a habit of these "monster collabos." A good wealth of talent here I've yet to collabo with and I'm always down to hit them.
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Ink - Always remembered, never forgotten (as a fake as fuck piece of shit who tried to steal 2 persona's) |
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iLL ScriptureZ
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This was a blast, everyone knew they had to come correct and we all did. Best collab I've been apart of... Definitely down for more
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SwordedStylez
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In the same vain as Law, and because I know my homies aren't as brazen as me yet deserve more than just a few bits of feed then great feed from the people involved, I'm bumpin this in hopes of some more feedback.
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Ink - Always remembered, never forgotten (as a fake as fuck piece of shit who tried to steal 2 persona's) |
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Freeda5thDawg
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Ehhhhh...
*just walks out* No, but really...it's for my own safety. Being in this thread any longer will just kill me. Reminds me of the great days of great emcees collaborating for some classic tracks like Beasts from the East by Lost Boyz, John Blaze when Fat Joe was getting Pun to write his shit, that Fantastic Four ish with Canibus and Pun and a nice Camron...or just underground classics. You guys laid down the law on this on your respective thrones. Nigma - One of the top at using your unique wording techniques to deliver some of the most intriguing flows on the site. Sometimes it flows so smoothly, other times it flows jumpy but not in a bad way, but in an aggressive how-the-hell-does-it-flow-so-well type of way. At one moment your mixing it with internal rhymes that challenges the reader into switching up their pace, at another moment you have the reader spitting a steady barrage of one multi rhyme throughout a couple of bars. Always keep my mind working with your great ideas and visuals. You amateurs gets massacred, the plays I make will break your brain Praise my name, the paper plane assassin from the day parade, you JFK Age of snakes creating fame from blastin all ya bastards to reclaim my faith Like praying to a pastor in a way to wish for ashes, this my saving grace YES! Chain - No surprise that you end it just as effective as you started it. I know I said this before, but you're basically the AZ of this joint. Always seem to have a lowkey but powerful confidence in your verses and when the rest seem like they NEED to be aggressive and toss in all they can, you keep it smooth and still just as strong. ...totalling the bars, so he told me I'd need Cochran I hollered at Pandora and told her "open up the box then" Them pussies up in Hades who were folding Satan's stockings Are looking at me crazy like my scrotum's made of cotton Haha. Skill. Scripturez - Greetings, fellow Jersey neighbor! I don't believe I've ever stumbled upon your work here but seeing the company you were with in this collaboration, I had no doubt that you were a part of it for a good reason. You just rhymed your ass off like the Pun of the pack. Or the Termanology or Crooked I or Esoteric. Very killer with the multis without just only rhyming either. Had plenty of substance that simply made for such an awesome verse. Real ill. Since the umbilical cord I made syllables morph with invincible force Leave rhythms a corpse destroying delivery and flow from any visible source Deliberately blow the wick from the torch your pitiful scorch gets simple retorts These criminal lords want minimal wars when I spit on the boards Hell yes! Duzt - Pssh...what can I say? When the objective is to come hard and just drop some "in your face" ish, you never fail at doing it your way and doing it beyond the right way. BUT! I will say, might it be that you actually held back a little from your sick side? Cause the verse after yours actually out-sick'd you. Haha, but I'm not mad at that at all. I liked that you kept it at a much more battle rap style rather than horrorcore because it shows you're a much more diverse writer as I know so. Sick verse. I swear I'll convert you guys to dirt you die & the way I interpret highs.. is smoke until it hurts ya eyes and you are trippin under purple skies... My rhymes will make the moon & earth collide & Raise the tide... And with a razor slice is how my flow develops... Really loved this, especially the last line. That's that thirst for blood. SS - You go from some kings who seem to have control to that one king who is bound to just lose his mind, haha. Such a crazy way to close the whole piece out. You didn't allow any reader to catch their breath and gather themselves before you just went on a rampage. And that War Cry closer pretty much summed up everything perfectly. Definitely gave me chills as I read on and got closer to finishing your verse up. Just took it to a sicker level, but as disturbing as some of that stuff was, your technique and skill was always appreciated the most on my part. You killed it. Jesus? I'll abuse the bitch, you'd think that he'd be used to it Obliterate his features with the splinters of the Crucifix Dismembered'n I juiced the bits, I'm dieting on deities All of y'all dillusional to think that you as great as me Too damn crazy. Loved the "dieting on deities" part. Great work, everyone.
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SwordedStylez
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Firstly, anyone who hasn't take fucking notice. THAT'S how you drop feedback. You should get an award or something for the way you've blown open the OM section tonight bro, I mean that. Secondly, I really appreciate the effort you put into feeding a piece that I personally am very proud to have been a part of, I'm certain my "colleagues" will feel the same. Great feedback, thank you very very much.
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Ink - Always remembered, never forgotten (as a fake as fuck piece of shit who tried to steal 2 persona's) |
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Freeda5thDawg
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Hey, it's nothing, man. I've come to enjoy reading and feeding more than posting my own stuff nowadays, honestly, so I always try to be as productive in that regard when I'm on. You guys murdered it, simple as that.
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iLL ScriptureZ
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Appreciate it Free, awesome feed
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Vellum
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Holy Fuck!!!!
^ that's my entire feedback.
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Exoduzt
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thanks sooo much for the feed on this...im very proud to be a part of this
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JBrenn
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This was a perfect mesh.. a low down dirty trick to try and get a verse in hof!!!!
Cause thats what this is this is HALL OF FAME caliber this should be instantly inducted! Everyone hit their piece to make this a smooth interesting read from the first line to the last! Bravo guys.... Exo might have been my fav! But everyone shined on this!!!
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The Law
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Nigma - The multi's and internals really made this and it takes a lot of skill to pull it off as well as you did. "pacifism, simpson, and JFK" line were the dopest of your verse. Way to start off this collab and really do a good job at making want to read the following verses.
Chain - This verse was literally "off the chain". The flow was crisp. The rhyme scheme and multi's were out of this world at points throughout your verse. There were way too many standout lines in there for me to list all of them but my favorites were the "pandora, hades, and procreative" lines. When you write, you really produce magic for the readers ears man. It's like that one harry potter spell that binds us in place while reading your verse. Ill scriptures - Your verse took until about half way to really catch on fire. I felt the opening bars doesn't really catch the readers attention, but when it did catch of fire it was dope. Best bars were the "pharmacy tech, Vuvuzela, and retorts bar". Felt if those opening bars were probably shortened up a beat it would have melded with the rest of the verse better. From there on the multi's and flow got better and really picked up. Exo - Your style in this verse resembled nigs in a way. Felt your multi's and internals paved the way for your verse was well. I also got an lol out of the Pyramids line. Purple sky bar was also crack as well. The "descriptiveness" that you always use in your verses work so damn well like the "Razor" line or the "chinchilla" line. The way you describe anything from punches in a normal verse, or to the bars in your topic really paint that perfect picture for us readers. SS - To start off, I really liked the little bar you put to introduce each writer into there verse. It was a good idea and you did a good job of doing so. Dope ass verse here. From Jesus line to the close the flow was so immaculate and the multi's so on point it was crazy. Not that the rest of your verse didn't have a sick flow, but from that point on was my favorite of it. It was executed to a Tee. lol at some of your bars though, you got a little violent w/ the rape, and fuck your mother bars haha. Good shit SS and the "war cry" bar was a perfect way to finish off your verse as well. Very dope collab right here with a great group of collaborators. I thought you all held this down well. Classic OM in time, IMO. |
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SwordedStylez
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good looks on the feed guys i think verses of this length always have more impact because once you actually sit down and read them an idea gets a couple of minutes to sink in instead of 30 seconds, it's why I love long drops. :D
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Ink - Always remembered, never forgotten (as a fake as fuck piece of shit who tried to steal 2 persona's) |
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barrybondz
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You guys killed it. This was one monster piece forsure. I like how you guys tied your names into your openers it was pretty cool. One word: beast.
I could give each and everyone of you guys feed, but I look at it like this; You guys are each individually talented writers and you all do exactly what you need to do. Flow well, be fluent and just wow the reader. Honestly it was a strong piece and I feel you each brought your "A" game and this was fun to read and I think you guys synergized together like some next level shit, too much whit bros. Keep it up and we're all hungry to see more. Edited by barrybondz - 28 June 2014 at 6:47pm |
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PsychOh
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Damn... My jaw is on the floor! Mad props to you guys for putting this together!
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SwordedStylez
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Haha barry those bars in red were me ;). Good looks on the feed peeps.
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Ink - Always remembered, never forgotten (as a fake as fuck piece of shit who tried to steal 2 persona's) |
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