Topic ClosedHeat Wave: HW Text (Rd 2): Law v Axy

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    Posted: 10 August 2015 at 9:14pm
Quarter Final: MARVELLOUS MAYHEM

Alias battle

Law = Hulk
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Axy = Ultron
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Best of three votes from nominated JUDGES
Deadline = midnight, 23rd August

Edited by Cuba - 24 August 2015 at 10:21pm
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 23 August 2015 at 6:55pm
Ayo Sad n Angry Gamma Bomb, traumatized Asshole, gonna defeat me lad?
My punches will feel the same as when your mom got stabbed by your psycho dad
When people call your wits incredible that shit is funny Damn!
cuz It was me who hacked your brain and got you beaten by Iron Man
Thank Stan for when he introduced you there finally was a green funny guy like Green Mask
as No-ones gonna take a Broccoli Man serious when he tears his pants before every task
My Bars are breaking his limbs and choking his throat while I screw metallic dick in his ass
So How's he gonna battle me when his cock-gulping voice can only scream HULK SMASH
I mean I can fill the rest of my bars with my laugh but First up to cut Banner to half
This battle is gonna be one sided with you going down the same as your sales graph
Stop calling yourself a hero, you're a monster, a dumb one perhaps
Cuz how are you gonna blow fire when after every word you take hundred gasps 
I wouldn't see 'bruise' (bruce) like I hate banners
Is there a reason why before battles you always need to man up?
Ain't it embarrassing enough for you to say that you just can't become a parent (avengers 2)
Haha I wont expect a guy to 'come hard'(cum hard) when his dick ain't even apparent 
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 30 August 2015 at 10:13pm
AHHH... This alloy garbage wants to start wars?
But I've seen transformers that are more hardcore
Look at this sad sap, filled with hatred for humans
Talking about evolution, but he couldn't make an improvement. 
It's ironic, he boasted and tooted about his ruthless specs
Yet, was working hard just to get booted into human flesh
But me? I'm a calm genius unless my temperaments pressed
and I'm pissed off, ready to bend and rip this metal to shreds!
You fuckin' decadent wreck... A retard and his future is blown
He travels the internet in seconds and controls his dubious clones
Yet this dumbass couldn't figure out the US's Nuclear codes?? 
Shit.. Our best hacker could release a virus and have ya nucleus blown.
The big bad ultron with access to the worlds vital information
Was out smarted and beat by every rival that went against him
Pst.. Even my genius and super strength is way ahead of his class
cause he picked up a whole city and caused less damage than the nine eleven attacks.



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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 02 September 2015 at 3:38pm
These are like ERB of history... not my favorite styles to do battles.....
however you both created pretty good personals and came with some raw shit...

Rutter your opening was raw and rugged but fell off from there.. you could have saved that for the middle or even the end it would have made the whole verse flow better as an attack.

Law i feel like you picked his characters flaws out fundamentally and exposed the insanity behind the marvel character i think you had more polished Jabs and set up the closer nicely.

mvgt- Law from the style in which he set up his big punch..
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 03 September 2015 at 2:55am
Axy did well making the most of his bars by forming punches and limiting the filler. The opener was nicely executed, probably my fav bar. From there I feel a lot of your shots lacked sting needed. You had some attempts at wordplay that sort of flopped, the bruce/bruise one for example. Good attempts, on the right track, just not very good angles. 

Law, strong verse overall. Your wording was crips as fuck

'But me? I'm a calm genius unless my temperaments pressed
and I'm pissed off, ready to bend and rip this metal to shreds!"

This for example, dope. Highlight of the verse tho was the closer. Bam. Clinched it.

+1 Law
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 03 September 2015 at 7:29am
Law advances
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