Heat Wave: HW Text (Rd 2): Law v Axy |
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Cuba
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Topic: HW Text (Rd 2): Law v Axy Posted: 10 August 2015 at 9:14pm |
Quarter Final: MARVELLOUS MAYHEM
Alias battle Law = Hulk marvel.com/characters/25/hulk Axy = Ultron marvel.com/characters/61/ultron 16 lines max Best of three votes from nominated JUDGES Deadline = midnight, 23rd August Edited by Cuba - 24 August 2015 at 10:21pm |
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AxyRocker
Standard Member Joined: 16 November 2014 Status: Offline Points: 1297 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 23-40-1 Form: LLLLWL |
Posted: 23 August 2015 at 6:55pm |
Ayo Sad n Angry Gamma Bomb, traumatized Asshole, gonna defeat me lad? My punches will feel the same as when your mom got stabbed by your psycho dad When people call your wits incredible that shit is funny Damn! cuz It was me who hacked your brain and got you beaten by Iron Man Thank Stan for when he introduced you there finally was a green funny guy like Green Mask as No-ones gonna take a Broccoli Man serious when he tears his pants before every task My Bars are breaking his limbs and choking his throat while I screw metallic dick in his ass So How's he gonna battle me when his cock-gulping voice can only scream HULK SMASH I mean I can fill the rest of my bars with my laugh but First up to cut Banner to half This battle is gonna be one sided with you going down the same as your sales graph Stop calling yourself a hero, you're a monster, a dumb one perhaps Cuz how are you gonna blow fire when after every word you take hundred gasps I wouldn't see 'bruise' (bruce) like I hate banners Is there a reason why before battles you always need to man up? Ain't it embarrassing enough for you to say that you just can't become a parent (avengers 2) Haha I wont expect a guy to 'come hard'(cum hard) when his dick ain't even apparent
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The Law
Site Moderator God of the Minions Joined: 15 June 2013 Status: Offline Points: 5504 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 64-8-8 Form: LNWWWW |
Posted: 30 August 2015 at 10:13pm |
AHHH... This alloy garbage wants to start wars? But I've seen transformers that are more hardcore Look at this sad sap, filled with hatred for humans Talking about evolution, but he couldn't make an improvement. It's ironic, he boasted and tooted about his ruthless specs Yet, was working hard just to get booted into human flesh But me? I'm a calm genius unless my temperaments pressed and I'm pissed off, ready to bend and rip this metal to shreds! You fuckin' decadent wreck... A retard and his future is blown He travels the internet in seconds and controls his dubious clones Yet this dumbass couldn't figure out the US's Nuclear codes?? Shit.. Our best hacker could release a virus and have ya nucleus blown. The big bad ultron with access to the worlds vital information Was out smarted and beat by every rival that went against him Pst.. Even my genius and super strength is way ahead of his class cause he picked up a whole city and caused less damage than the nine eleven attacks. |
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JBrenn
Superior Member Joined: 03 May 2006 Status: Offline Points: 3754 Crew: Tha Syndicate Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 40-26-0 Form: WWLWWW |
Posted: 02 September 2015 at 3:38pm |
These are like ERB of history... not my favorite styles to do battles.....
however you both created pretty good personals and came with some raw shit... Rutter your opening was raw and rugged but fell off from there.. you could have saved that for the middle or even the end it would have made the whole verse flow better as an attack. Law i feel like you picked his characters flaws out fundamentally and exposed the insanity behind the marvel character i think you had more polished Jabs and set up the closer nicely. mvgt- Law from the style in which he set up his big punch..
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Nigma
Site Moderator Joined: 25 March 2013 Location: Canada Status: Offline Points: 4077 Crew: Elision |
Posted: 03 September 2015 at 2:55am |
Axy did well making the most of his bars by forming punches and limiting the filler. The opener was nicely executed, probably my fav bar. From there I feel a lot of your shots lacked sting needed. You had some attempts at wordplay that sort of flopped, the bruce/bruise one for example. Good attempts, on the right track, just not very good angles.
Law, strong verse overall. Your wording was crips as fuck 'But me? I'm a calm genius unless my temperaments pressed and I'm pissed off, ready to bend and rip this metal to shreds!" This for example, dope. Highlight of the verse tho was the closer. Bam. Clinched it. +1 Law
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Cuba
Senior Moderator Legendary Assassin Joined: 14 June 2004 Location: England Status: Offline Points: 12327 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 47-22-0 Form: WWWWLW |
Posted: 03 September 2015 at 7:29am |
Law advances
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