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    Posted: 22 February 2017 at 10:43am
Keep Ya nose in my busness get
Stuffed in a trunk no elephant
Snout,
Dry snitching that's an eminent
Drought,
My punches land like I'm dumping
Boxing gloves out an aeroplane
South paw brawler I don't peekaboo,
That's an intelligent
Bout,
These rookies I watched'em grow
Like farmer to seeds,how the fuck
They supose to be harder
Than me,
Bark me up the wrong way my dogs
Wild out and show You the apple
Don't fall far from
The tree/


I could get ahead on my own
Don't need advice,don't need no
Opinion,
JB homie keep it stack when the kilos
Missin,
Clark kent I bet these bullets won't bounce off Ya chest,my 40 a grimreaper get a soul on
Hero Risen,
When I let loose ima need there to be zero women
Zero children,
Listen son(sun)I spit the sort heat that permanently damges the
Ecosystem-/out    











    













































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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Crimson Juice Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 22 February 2017 at 2:39pm
OK JB,interesting piece from you here in many ways,firstly I was liking this as a self
hype verse,and in parts you had some good angles working,the vocab was good
too,your flow for the most part was working alright up until the end,then it got a little
shaky and lost,the plays weren't bad either,quite tidy in structure also, I liked the direct
route you took with this verse,it had a no messing about just straight to the point vibe
i thought,easy on the eye to read also,all in all a good piece from you,good to see
you dropping aswell,a good quick read..peace.
"You need to learn how to make an exit,
before you can dare make an entrance".
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Sammy Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 22 February 2017 at 9:14pm
Jackbarz this was enjoyable bro. Good to see u dropping again. The apple bar was my favorite. Dope setup and satisfying punch. Overall, nice remindex of a familiar name. Drop more!


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Word CJ bro Sam wordup to You too man,still more to come peace!
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Amgin Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 26 February 2017 at 9:27pm
Had some really good lines. The second verse IMO was best
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