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JackBarz
Groupie Joined: 30 November 2015 Location: Eestern Cape Status: Offline Points: 214 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 0-3-1 Form: LLNL |
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Posted: 22 February 2017 at 10:43am |
Keep Ya nose in my busness get
Stuffed in a trunk no elephant Snout, Dry snitching that's an eminent Drought, My punches land like I'm dumping Boxing gloves out an aeroplane South paw brawler I don't peekaboo, That's an intelligent Bout, These rookies I watched'em grow Like farmer to seeds,how the fuck They supose to be harder Than me, Bark me up the wrong way my dogs Wild out and show You the apple Don't fall far from The tree/ I could get ahead on my own Don't need advice,don't need no Opinion, JB homie keep it stack when the kilos Missin, Clark kent I bet these bullets won't bounce off Ya chest,my 40 a grimreaper get a soul on Hero Risen, When I let loose ima need there to be zero women Zero children, Listen son(sun)I spit the sort heat that permanently damges the Ecosystem-/out |
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Crimson Juice
Site Moderator Joined: 20 December 2015 Location: U.K. Status: Offline Points: 3258 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LLWLW |
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OK JB,interesting piece from you here in many ways,firstly I was liking this as a self
hype verse,and in parts you had some good angles working,the vocab was good too,your flow for the most part was working alright up until the end,then it got a little shaky and lost,the plays weren't bad either,quite tidy in structure also, I liked the direct route you took with this verse,it had a no messing about just straight to the point vibe i thought,easy on the eye to read also,all in all a good piece from you,good to see you dropping aswell,a good quick read..peace. |
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"You need to learn how to make an exit,
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Sammy
Site Moderator Beacon of Light Joined: 24 October 2015 Status: Offline Points: 2222 Crew: Elision Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-1-1 Form: LNW |
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Jackbarz this was enjoyable bro. Good to see u dropping again. The apple bar was my favorite. Dope setup and satisfying punch. Overall, nice remindex of a familiar name. Drop more!
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JackBarz
Groupie Joined: 30 November 2015 Location: Eestern Cape Status: Offline Points: 214 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 0-3-1 Form: LLNL |
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Word CJ bro Sam wordup to You too man,still more to come peace!
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Amgin
Groupie Joined: 31 January 2017 Status: Offline Points: 140 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 0-3-0 Form: LLL |
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Had some really good lines. The second verse IMO was best
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