Open Mic: Agitated

Yo - I'm sorry... Just-- just...

I'm an agitated soul, aggravation animates this hole
Which I'm falling into feeling like I don't belong like antiquated clothes
Wearing all this lost hope, seen all my aspirations go
Try to advocate a show but I can't move like I've been allocated bones
To support me that are amputated, no way can I carry weights n loads
Yin n Yang mind but both know I'm useless like amalgamated codes
Mind so sharp but so sad and lost I feel decapitated bro
And what I spit is true... ldn't be validated as safe but I'm made to sadly stay controlled
By this, in life, feel like I have to sway to go
But man, I'm glad you try it's probably for the best but I feel barricaded
Call me a depressed hater but I can't help damn debating
Leaving this world to be free from this, so how can I be grand, elated?
When I've been fed with so much bullshit I'm sated and become brash and sadist?
Dictated by the madness, man, Weighted-inflated-frustrated, just need to crash-vacate this yo.

It's not your fault - though... That's not what I mean. I'm just fed up... With everything... The way I am... Time for change... Big time - it's needed... Done.

Because I'm bleeding floods, of emotion yo I'm pleading bruv
Losing myself to the outside, polluted freedom cuz
We've all been cheated, and with me it leaves me sunk
In depths of extreme need and heated desperation conceding love
Just to live, what's the thesis? The reason for this treatment?
I don't see it, this shit is needless like yielding guns
As a piece of protection! It shows how our lives are maltreated some
How disquieted we are, and how we've lost ourselves to power: Defeated
And screw treason, they're the ones who are guilty of this recent bust
Uneven cohesion, barely stable 'coz equal's meaning fuck,
All... At first I thought I was insane but realised I felt isolated
Because of the rise of facelifts! I mean fakeness ruling what we become
And I'm just a realist bruv, stuck in fantasies 'coz this secretion sucks
How we are separated and made misunderstood 'coz of the governed need for buck
I've had e-freakin-nough, I'd beg for this piece to show some light
But how will it when the beacon's broken right down and our lime: Seized and sucked.

Yo - I'm sorry... Just-- just...

I'm an agitated soul, aggravation animates this hole
Which I'm falling into feeling like I don't belong like antiquated clothes
Wearing all this lost hope, seen all my aspirations go
Try to advocate a show but I can't move like I've been allocated bones
To support me that are amputated, no way can I carry weights n loads
Yin n Yang mind but both know I'm useless like amalgamated codes
Mind so sharp but so sad and lost I feel decapitated bro
And what I spit is true... ldn't be validated as safe but I'm made to sadly stay controlled
By this, in life, feel like I have to sway to go

(yeah i think you've captured the emotion of torment well here,i also like how you've blended the similes which fit real well within the contents,so much so,that they could
easily be missed on reading,the tempo has some gusto too,the wording is also good,
opening a verse with some sprite is never a bad thing to do,I'm liking this segment..)

But man, I'm glad you try it's probably for the best but I feel barricaded
Call me a depressed hater but I can't help damn debating
Leaving this world to be free from this, so how can I be grand, elated?
When I've been fed with so much bullshit I'm sated and become brash and sadist?
Dictated by the madness, man, Weighted-inflated-frustrated, just need to crash-vacate this yo.

It's not your fault - though... That's not what I mean. I'm just fed up... With everything... The way I am... Time for change... Big time - it's needed... Done.

Because I'm bleeding floods, of emotion yo I'm pleading bruv
Losing myself to the outside, polluted freedom cuz
We've all been cheated, and with me it leaves me sunk
In depths of extreme need and heated desperation conceding love
Just to live, what's the thesis? The reason for this treatment?

(for me the character seems more restricted,and the agitation is the side effect emotion to the cause,i also sense a feeling of being put in a place or a confinement
as such by his own means,and not by anyone else,or maybe the environment is the
reason,this piece has a certain quality to it that it sort of becomes interactive for the
reader,nice inclusion that,participation on any level is good,so props there,yeah I'm
enjoying the read thus far..)

I don't see it, this shit is needless like yielding guns
As a piece of protection! It shows how our lives are maltreated some
How disquieted we are, and how we've lost ourselves to power: Defeated
And screw treason, they're the ones who are guilty of this recent bust
Uneven cohesion, barely stable 'coz equal's meaning fuck,
All... At first I thought I was insane but realised I felt isolated
Because of the rise of facelifts! I mean fakeness ruling what we become
And I'm just a realist bruv, stuck in fantasies 'coz this secretion sucks
How we are separated and made misunderstood 'coz of the governed need for buck
I've had e-freakin-nough, I'd beg for this piece to show some light
But how will it when the beacon's broken right down and our lime: Seized and sucked.

(again the similes here in this segment are not taking centre stage,which is good as
their actually not breaking the tempo/vibe,sometimes a simile can be like WOW,and
within that time of thinking about it a natural pause happens to flow,which has then
got to be picked back up by the reader,i must say i've quite enjoyed this read,and I
believe it's the 1st piece I've given you feed on,i'm impressed really,good solid read,
where the enjoyment was mine,look forward to reading more from you..).peace.