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DressToKill
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Posted: 08 April 2017 at 3:59pm |
https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=INtNZmUnaXY I uploaded it, I'm still working on memorizing the closing bars. Obviously I'll be more animated during the cypher but lmk what you think so far. Edit : sorry but I'm having a hard time embedding on my phone Edited by DressToKill - 08 April 2017 at 4:09pm |
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The original comeback kid
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Lord Puente
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DressToKill
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Cheers fam
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The original comeback kid
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Lord Puente
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The lyrics are there, but like you said, got to work on emotions and delivery. I can tell you barely have it memorized by the speed you spitting (imo).
Personally writing to beats makes it easier to memorize for me. Regardless if you do to a beat or not, record it on the computer, get a really good recording of it, post it on SoundCloud as private and then just listen to it a bunch of times everyday. This is posted in wrong section I think, mod will prob move |
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Titu
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the lyrics are a fuck yes from me.
it felt like you werent spitting anyway? i mean... put in some random beat and record this shit over it with full emotions and energy. i would love to hear that. |
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Fuck That Fat smelly cunt Donald Trump, a racist asshole who is fucked in the head.
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DressToKill
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I imagined doing it accapella right off the jump..I mean a cypher usually is just lyrics no beat. As per emotion I can easily add some as I was just going through the motions. I do need to practice this about another 1000 times though to feel more natural when dropping it.
Thanks for the feedback guys |
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Titu
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not necessarily, bro. anyways im loving the fact that you are getting into audio game. im sure you will enjoy this cypher enough to start getting full tracks out.
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Fuck That Fat smelly cunt Donald Trump, a racist asshole who is fucked in the head.
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Cuba
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Rhyme scheme is vile...that should get you a lot of attention. Beyond the delivery (which we know we don't need to talk about because you said yourself this wasn't about the performance element) the only real critique I'd have is it feels like you've brought down the complexity of your concepts. I'm assuming that's because you want to broaden out the appeal, which is fair enough, but I'd suggest thinking about reworking it so you put in maybe 1 or 2 concepts throughout the whole thing that are gonna excite people...like get those guys who really understand their stuff to be like OHHHHHHHHHH, think that'll help you get the overall vibe up from the audience which will make you stand out.
I know you have those type of wow factor concepts in your locker because I've seen you drop em time and time again over the years. You just gotta find 1 or 2 more of them now and you'll be killer. |
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Sammy
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i actually like this alot. lyrical content was dope to me. the delivery had a very conversational tone about it that made want to keep listening lol. this is good shit, Dress!
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DressToKill
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Thanks for all the feedback guys. As per the content it's a different beast than text obviously since your focusing on flow and rhyme schemes but trying to add a bit of complexity in it vs text where concepts can go deeper with brief expos.
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Beans
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props... thought the lyrics were dope... a few spots you could lose a word here and there but keep workin at it
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