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Sammy
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Posted: 30 April 2017 at 2:24am |
https://soundcloud.com/sammydaemcee/puppet-master Since youth, he understood the true meaning of influence Astute in his sense, dude’s truly intelligent he was smooth with his word he moved with elegant but his true intent was to be the new president a slave to the trade? nah, he mastered the art A natural; it was a gift he acquired from start and he would smile when he meet you, but hollow and dark A born leader, that’s why he never followed his heart Some used gun, but his ears were his deadliest weapon; he can hear you’re deepest fear from your opening sentence. calm, cool collect he was a patient beast. Never heads over heel so he can’t face defeat he would often dream of being corporate chief but life was harsh, you see? and he was forced to cheat He planned his success rather than pause and dream cause in every success story there's a plot and scheme he never had any short cut, just long hard road and as a shorty, he would endure a broken home pops was violent. and mom suffered broken nose thats when he realized: this was a fucked world! innocence crushed, by the darkest social rapport And then a cycle of psychological distort when he was young he felt the pain; the bruise and scar he would pray but no answer..... THERE WAS NO GOD!! CONSCIENCE twisted....into the SCIENCE of CON innocence shift, as the wickedness an vile was born it was vile and wrong, he wants that winning catch and he was sly. A serpent hide behind those eyes and when their life is on the line, that’s when there’s strings attach yeah, he was sly, a serpent exist behind those eyes inside every frIEndLy smILE, theres twice the LIES Beware the nicest guy who tell you life is great cause when you sell your soul, there's always hell to pay, my brutha Whether fast or slow, fuck the cash and gold the true prize in his eyes: To have control running laps past his foes as his status showed Winning’s the only thing that matter as his passion grows backstabbing his close friends cause they're weights to him he refuse to be taken down; his place was King it’s a race for success you gotta take some breath nice guys finish last a DICK is always A-HEAD then it was known, a kingdom...all to his own Plotting and planning for this moment, as precious as gold He looked back at his subjects, a gleams in their eyes And saw himself back then when he was dreaming the sky and then a chill ran his spine sunthin was wrong, he knew the sign...becuz he wrote the song then a smile cracked his face; a hole in his heart life’s a mountain climb....heheh....it gets cold at the top... |
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Mission
Standard Member Joined: 13 September 2014 Location: Madison. MS Status: Offline Points: 2291 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 8-9-1 Form: LWLLLN |
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This was heat bro i loved the story telling and the hook was great. You also had some really nice one liners in there. Solid stuff and I like the creativity you put into this, made for a great listen.
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Lord Puente
Newbie Final Boss Joined: 05 July 2016 Location: Florida Status: Offline Points: 1814 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 4-2-0 Form: LWWWLW |
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bro this is getting slept on.
this is a great story teling track, no doubt. good job, and this is as close as you can get from being an open mic and an audio (the way its written and what not). solid job, this was dope as fuck on the constructive critism id say on some of your accent phrases I didn't care for how they sounded as I think they should have had a deeper accent to add a bit of a darker effect. make it more somber. regardless this was dope, and im happy to see you continue making these fire drops. this was a diff type of audio than what ive seen while ive been here so props to that, and it was greatly written. one other thing id work on is adding some flavor to the delivery maybe to some rhyme words, just say them differently. maybe do a couple small snippets of a fast pace rap that slows back down after half a bar but you do it a few times. just add some "sounds" that make your track different.
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Sammy
Site Moderator Beacon of Light Joined: 24 October 2015 Status: Offline Points: 2222 Crew: Elision Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-1-1 Form: LNW |
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@mish good loox, bruhva
@L don't make me kick u in the crotch, hoe! 'Preciate it though <3
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Elite
Superior Member Joined: 16 February 2014 Location: US Status: Offline Points: 3340 Crew: eNtiTy Audio Rank: #4 Stats: 5-0-0 Form: WWWW |
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ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh shitttttttttttttttttttttttttttt
cant wait to peep this. be back later to listen and feed. ps fuck you
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SELF ACTIVATE
Standard Member Joined: 05 February 2016 Location: Kemet Status: Offline Points: 1380 Crew: Elision Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-1-0 Form: WL |
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Link no work amigo
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King Jehu
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Did you take this down? Soundcloud says "This track was not found. Maybe it has been removed."
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Insert something rappy here
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Sammy
Site Moderator Beacon of Light Joined: 24 October 2015 Status: Offline Points: 2222 Crew: Elision Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-1-1 Form: LNW |
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my bad yall, its back up now.
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Neek
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well well well... its this motherfucker.
fuck you tho. your delivery is too raw. I like that echo on the hook. haha, reading along.. I noticed you switched the order, I used to do that shit all the time lol. you memorize huh sammy. this was ill tho, your story telling skills are pretty fucking potent. mix is what it is, some of the layers couldve used some editing.. but who gives a fuck really. lyrically? shit was nice, even without the spelled out text version, the twice the lies was dope as fuck. overall, dope. |
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#Bananas
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Crimson Juice
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Very nice bro,i don't on the norm like hooks,(i prefer straight out rhyming),but this was
nice,the beat was solid too,the piano sounded haunting at the start and remained that way although the track,you also did a real nice job with the delivery and staying on the beat,your contents and pitch/tone was Slick also,whilst on listening i had thoughts of Cypress Hill mixed with Prince Paul via beat and content,very impressive here friend,in fact it was RIPE...peace. |
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"You need to learn how to make an exit,
before you can dare make an entrance". |
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D.Von Doom
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The way you bend words is second is to none. Also the best storytelling ability I've heard on this site. The beat reminds me of the late 90s underground hip-hop. The lyrics unquestionably placed well. The hook was simple but did the job imo. The story was interesting. The only thing I'll critique is delivery, while it was very good i feel like i can kind of tell you were reading of a page. Once you get away from that you'll be complete. The content you're dropping in audio has all been classic material. I fuck with your work and like that you stand your ground on the type of beats you pick rather than settle for today's trash beats like i do lol good work
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SELF ACTIVATE
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Dope asf! You already know the rest!
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Sammy
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@neek, i was feeling some way when u didn't feed me the first time i had lol. im buggin, thanks for the feed bro. you already
@Crimson, u stay being one of the backbone of LA. thanks a lot my dude @Doom - haha u def pick up on the delivery. this was like 4 years ago but i have been tyring to play with beats and delivery lately. but good looks, bro. alway appreciated. @self - "Self Hype" son....i gotchu!!
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King Jehu
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This was amazing. A very mature sounding track. The flow is great, the topic matches the beat, and the skill with which you tell a coherent, gripping story seems effortless. Best I've heard here in a while.
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Insert something rappy here
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alicewonder
Standard Member Joined: 09 May 2015 Location: uk Status: Offline Points: 653 Crew: Kratos Kind Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 2-1-2 Form: WWLNN |
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Nothing much I can add that hasn't been said already. This was incredible. The narrative was very well delivered. The unconventional scheme was impressive, per usual. Many highlights in this, like the entire first and third stanza, just to name a few. Your voice has this authentic, 'unique' factor which makes this composition that much better. The hook was also really nice. And this is 4 years old..damn. Hope you share more of your work.
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