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    Posted: 30 April 2017 at 2:24am

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Since youth, he understood the true meaning of influence

Astute in his sense, dude’s truly intelligent

he was smooth with his word

he moved with elegant

but his true intent was to be the new president

a slave to the trade? nah, he mastered the art

A natural; it was a gift he acquired from start

and he would smile when he meet you, but hollow and dark

A born leader, that’s why he never followed his heart

Some used gun, but his ears were his deadliest weapon;

he can hear you’re deepest fear from your opening sentence.

calm, cool collect he was a patient beast.

Never heads over heel so he can’t face defeat

he would often dream of being corporate chief

but life was harsh, you see? and he was forced to cheat

He planned his success rather than pause and dream

cause in every success story there's a plot and scheme


he never had any short cut, just long hard road

and as a shorty, he would endure a broken home

pops was violent. and mom suffered broken nose

thats when he realized: this was a fucked world!

innocence crushed, by the darkest social rapport

And then a cycle of psychological distort

when he was young he felt the pain; the bruise and scar

he would pray but no answer..... THERE WAS NO GOD!!

CONSCIENCE twisted....into the SCIENCE of CON

innocence shift, as the wickedness an vile was born

it was vile and wrong, he wants that winning catch

and he was sly. A serpent hide behind those eyes

and when their life is on the line, that’s when there’s strings attach

yeah, he was sly, a serpent exist behind those eyes

inside every frIEndLy smILE, theres twice the LIES

Beware the nicest guy who tell you life is great

cause when you sell your soul, there's always hell to pay, my brutha


Whether fast or slow, fuck the cash and gold

the true prize in his eyes: To have control

running laps past his foes as his status showed

Winning’s the only thing that matter as his passion grows

backstabbing his close friends cause they're weights to him

he refuse to be taken down; his place was King

it’s a race for success you gotta take some breath

nice guys finish last a DICK is always A-HEAD

then it was known, a kingdom...all to his own

Plotting and planning for this moment, as precious as gold

He looked back at his subjects, a gleams in their eyes

And saw himself back then when he was dreaming the sky

and then a chill ran his spine

sunthin was wrong,

he knew the sign...becuz he wrote the song

then a smile cracked his face;

a hole in his heart

life’s a mountain climb....heheh....it gets cold at the top...





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This was heat bro i loved the story telling and the hook was great. You also had some really nice one liners in there. Solid stuff and I like the creativity you put into this, made for a great listen.
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bro this is getting slept on.
 
this is a great story teling track, no doubt. good job, and this is as close as you can get from being an open mic and an audio (the way its written and what not).
 
solid job, this was dope as fuck
 
on the constructive critism id say on some of your accent phrases I didn't care for how they sounded as I think they should have had a deeper accent to add a bit of a darker effect. make it more somber.
 
regardless this was dope, and im happy to see you continue making these fire drops.
 
this was a diff type of audio than what ive seen while ive been here so props to that, and it was greatly written.
 
one other thing id work on is adding some flavor to the delivery maybe to some rhyme words, just say them differently. maybe do a couple small snippets of a fast pace rap that slows back down after half a bar but you do it a few times. just add some "sounds" that make your track different.
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@mish good loox, bruhva

@L don't make me kick u in the crotch, hoe! 'Preciate it though <3


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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Elite Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 01 May 2017 at 2:02am
ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh shitttttttttttttttttttttttttttt

cant wait to peep this. be back later to listen and feed.

ps fuck you
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Link no work amigo
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Did you take this down? Soundcloud says "This track was not found. Maybe it has been removed."
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my bad yall, its back up now.


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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Neek Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 03 May 2017 at 7:21pm
well well well... its this motherfucker.


fuck you tho. your delivery is too raw. I like that echo on the hook.

haha, reading along.. I noticed you switched the order, I used to do that shit all the time lol.

you memorize huh sammy.

this was ill tho, your story telling skills are pretty fucking potent.

mix is what it is, some of the layers couldve used some editing.. but who gives a fuck really.

lyrically? shit was nice, even without the spelled out text version, the twice the lies was dope as fuck.

overall, dope.
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Very nice bro,i don't on the norm like hooks,(i prefer straight out rhyming),but this was
nice,the beat was solid too,the piano sounded haunting at the start and remained that
way although the track,you also did a real nice job with the delivery and staying on the
beat,your contents and pitch/tone was Slick also,whilst on listening i had thoughts of
Cypress Hill mixed with Prince Paul via beat and content,very impressive here friend,in
fact it was RIPE...peace.
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The way you bend words is second is to none. Also the best storytelling ability I've heard on this site. The beat reminds me of the late 90s underground hip-hop. The lyrics unquestionably placed well. The hook was simple but did the job imo. The story was interesting. The only thing I'll critique is delivery, while it was very good i feel like i can kind of tell you were reading of a page. Once you get away from that you'll be complete. The content you're dropping in audio has all been classic material. I fuck with your work and like that you stand your ground on the type of beats you pick rather than settle for today's trash beats like i do lol good work
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Dope asf! You already know the rest!
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@neek, i was feeling some way when u didn't feed me the first time i had lol. im buggin, thanks for the feed bro. you already

@Crimson, u stay being one of the backbone of LA. thanks a lot my dude

@Doom - haha u def pick up on the delivery. this was like 4 years ago but i have been tyring to play with beats and delivery lately. but good looks, bro. alway appreciated.

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This was amazing. A very mature sounding track. The flow is great, the topic matches the beat, and the skill with which you tell a coherent, gripping story seems effortless. Best I've heard here in a while.
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Nothing much I can add that hasn't been said already. This was incredible. The narrative was very well delivered. The unconventional scheme was impressive, per usual. Many highlights in this, like the entire first and third stanza, just to name a few. Your voice has this authentic, 'unique' factor which makes this composition that much better. The hook was also really nice. And this is 4 years old..damn. Hope you share more of your work. 
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