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Jimmy2Dope
Newbie Joined: 17 May 2017 Status: Offline Points: 4 |
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Posted: 17 May 2017 at 7:50am |
You can tell from the title, Jimmy be too dope
And he just like to talk shit, rap and smoke I got more lyrics and I can roll a fatter blunt than most folk After you read it you wanna hear it and have some fun but I'll make you choke Make you slow, saw you pick a penny up off the floor, but I fucking know you ain't never had to take no mo' Cause I been through struggle even though I'm white I used to wonder why words would hit my brain at night Until I learned I could spit and I did alright And shit, now that I know I'm good I see I gotta fight I smoke by the ounce, anybody got a light? Top of the rap charts, I know it sounds ignant But when I close my eyes I see it as my mission Cause I know for a fact I could get there just by dissin' Make a couple bucks over a video of Beyonce and Rhianna kissin' Give a couple fucks when Rhianna give B a pussy licking And I'll still have a better sound than Uzi when I'm shittin' I rap like a hand grenade that's full of AIDS Cause once it hits you it leaves you with your ankle sprained Wait a minute, it's late today And I fucking hate your face Ever single one of y'all fake ass rappers got the same fucked up fade Suck a dick y'all dudes are gay And you getting fucked ain't even getting laid I rap harsh like ain't got a conscience And a lot of y'all been rapping nonsense I know I didn't have to rap here but if I didn't I would have no option But to throw out lyrical hip tosses I rap fatter than Rick Ross is Blunts the same cause I got more ounces than LAs worst rapper got losses Go ahead, I'm looking at you, comment who the boss is. Thanks for reading. These are actually the first lyrics I've posted online for anybody to read. I guarantee you they're not my best, but I'm here to grow as it is. Get at me. |
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Crimson Juice
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Liked the intro here,i can see you'll be up to speed in no time if you take feedback on
board,LA has some real class text/topical/audio heads here that are willing to help no matter which area you want to strengthen yourself in,this was decent for a selfhype piece,your rhyme scheme was basic but that's no biggie,a few inner rhyming words/ multi rhyming words would boost this piece no ends,anyways Welcome aboard read the rules,post and have fun..peace. |
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Jimmy2Dope
Newbie Joined: 17 May 2017 Status: Offline Points: 4 |
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[EDIT: WRONG PLACE]
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Jimmy2Dope
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Hey man, I really appreciate the feedback. Selfhype isn't my strong suit and I was testing myself as it is. I have so many more better lyrics and I really believe myself to have massive potential, so keep up with me, and I'll return all of the love once I figure out how to navigate LA and start to learn more about the community.
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Crimson Juice
Site Moderator Joined: 20 December 2015 Location: U.K. Status: Offline Points: 3258 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LLWLW |
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Cool i look forward to reading your work in the OM section,there i will leave detailed
feed,and as you are new here,remember this,if you want to be fed,feed other in the process regardless your knowledge in poetry/raps..peace. |
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"You need to learn how to make an exit,
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