Text Battle Archive: Stalin vs Okie [3-0]

Edited by Rutter knows best - 26 May 2017 at 1:29pm

My bad man, I'll drop tomorrow.

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Good tussle here guys..

Okie first off your verse is more than 10 lines,(if you include the little intro,which i have
as it was aimed at Stal still),you had some good similes within your verse here,i also liked the aggression you've displayed also,from the off there was some sprite in this
area,you even had some humour thrown in this piece too which helped overall,your
tempo/flow was decent and the punches were present and landing as well,your personals although present were kind of forced really,your best personal was the Renegades bar,you had a wealth of ammo on Stal if you would of delved deeper in-
to his background here,still a good verse on the whole..


Stal you too had humour within your piece,you also had the right amount of lines/bars too i'll just add now,your similes were good here and your punches were hitting their mark also,your tempo/vibe was simple but it worked well,(no need for advanced rhyme
schemes in battle bars),your personals were also present to which i'll take my cap off
too,because you didn't have the option of trawling through posts to pool from and
create them really,and on the subject of creativity your angles/concepts via w/plays
was good and witty i thought,plus you seemed to retaliate well considering these factors,good work..


Overall both verse were quite evenly matched really,and in truth it's not easy calling a
winner here,Okie had aggression in his corner whilst Stal a direct approach,Okie had
humour and similes cracking plus a good vibe,but then Stal had that too,I do feel
however Okie dropped the ball in the personal department,he had that options at his
disposal where Stal didn't have that luxury here,so after reading both verses a couple of times i'm going to go with Stal,here's why,not only because as i've already stated up there ^^,but for me Stal had the better humour and similes,and them lines about
staggering/drunk bars were the best in the battle,they had creative thought within..


Vote...Stal..peace.

Thanks for voting guys. Any More votes appreciated

Stalin wins via 3-0 KO