Text Battle Archive: [7/7] Ridley Squat vs Law (text) {0-3} |
Post Reply |
Author | |||
Cuba
Senior Moderator Legendary Assassin Joined: 14 June 2004 Location: England Status: Offline Points: 12327 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 47-22-0 Form: WWWWLW |
Topic: [7/7] Ridley Squat vs Law (text) {0-3} Posted: 07 July 2017 at 7:41pm |
||
Bloodlines IV prelude
Best of 5 votes Verses due midnight Sunday 8 line limit End rhymes must rhyme with this multi: Bloody pathetic
Edited by Rutter knows best - 13 July 2017 at 11:48pm |
|||
|
|||
The Law
Site Moderator God of the Minions Joined: 15 June 2013 Status: Offline Points: 5504 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 64-8-8 Form: LNWWWW |
Posted: 10 July 2017 at 12:14am | ||
Over this battle Rid Toss N Turn, Day N Night… Please give Kid Cudi the Message
That he’s failed Crusades and IC… There’s no need to study the metrics You had an Empire and Scripturez destroy you.. Now that’s Bloody Pathetic So I have to save him from ‘syn’ for the last time and send this Dummy to Heaven! Who’s gonna be Dropping? Squat? Goryo? Another account with Ugly Aesthetics? I mean we don’t know for sure, but I think this fucker has Professor Nutty’s Genetics! I’m coming to kick this street team member out, see Law’s the Druggie Detective and since he’ can’t sell any ‘dope lines’, we know theres was no money collected!! |
|||
|
|||
Cuba
Senior Moderator Legendary Assassin Joined: 14 June 2004 Location: England Status: Offline Points: 12327 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 47-22-0 Form: WWWWLW |
Posted: 10 July 2017 at 4:02pm | ||
Rids I gave you a bit of leeway because you PM'd me saying you were gonna be late but I want to see this up in the next few hours or you're getting an N
|
|||
|
|||
Ridley Squat
Street Team Joined: 20 November 2015 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 830 Crew: Tha Syndicate Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 9-6-0 Form: WWWWLW |
Posted: 10 July 2017 at 4:38pm | ||
Gotcha boss.
Thanks, and thanks Law ... dropping now. |
|||
|
|||
Ridley Squat
Street Team Joined: 20 November 2015 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 830 Crew: Tha Syndicate Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 9-6-0 Form: WWWWLW |
Posted: 10 July 2017 at 4:45pm | ||
Hey Law!
A good topic for you! I mean I struggled to pen it, cos I strive for tight multi's and the subtle phonetics But it's right up your street, you're so lucky he set it! Cos your rhyming has always been bloody pathetic! From Vis to Empire to Elision ... forget it ... you're a one-man fucking crew-jumping pandemic A busfull of medics stocked up with emetics could not make you sick ... and you've come to regret it Leaving again? GOOD! I must leave a message. "We're better off without you!", like a busted appendix Cos I read some of your battles, and you 100% bitch ... this battle ain't lost but my utter respect is! There's something inherently fucked with his head to summon the dead, when it's nothing poetic, just a polemic that's done to discredit Check the expos below though, yes this cunt is a menace, sold his soul as a troll, now I'm coming to get it!
|
|||
|
|||
Amgin
Groupie Joined: 31 January 2017 Status: Offline Points: 140 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 0-3-0 Form: LLL |
Posted: 11 July 2017 at 8:26pm | ||
This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Law Very nice opener your lines were lengthy, but they were smooth and filled with content. Nice integration of team names, and other accounts to make this personal, on top, wording and placement kept the lines flowing. You didn't sacrifice flow for an idea you wanted to work. "I’m coming to kick this street team member out, see Law’s the Druggie Detective and since he’ can’t sell any ‘dope lines’, we know theres was no money collected!!" Sick way to end it. Good job dude, your end rhymes clearly succeeded as well as the whole verse, I enjoy your submissions as they're serious/strict in their structure, yet witty and have pep in execution Ridley Squat (ehhhh, you lift bro?) Mmmm You definitely went above and beyond by rhyming within the lines as well as the end rhymes. Your openers opened up confident but I feel as though when you began with the disses it was a bit of a stretch to make coherent rhymes that punched but still stayed within the rules. "Like a busted appendix" LOLOL is this was one of the best MVGT Law Both battles well written and had similar attributes, but I found Laws verse flowed all together a bit better And was an easier read Squat if you continued inner rhymes with every line, it would of put you ontop, but I felt that having inners in some and not the others broke up the rhythm a bit for me |
|||
|
|||
Crimson Juice
Site Moderator Joined: 20 December 2015 Location: U.K. Status: Offline Points: 3258 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LLWLW |
Posted: 12 July 2017 at 11:28am | ||
This vote has been accepted by a moderator. LAW you opened up here with some sprite and to be honest carried it on through the verse also,your personals were aimed well and relatable,and your punches found their mark too,although they were no haymakers they still carried weight,your similes also contributed and added an extra layer here,and on the whole you got at him well,with the account theme (although it's been played out really),but for me your closing bars was the strongest in this drop,it read with a vibe that appeared cocky/callous,over all good work.. Ridley your multi's were good here mainly 3 syllables so it gave this verse some nice assonace,i can't say it enough I really do like it when i read this approach in verses as well as battles,you also came with a crew angle punch/personals,i like the way you implied he was some Sam Becket with his jumping,plus the fact with the line "you leaving again" for me injected some wit,so that worked well,your similes were also present and firing which added to the verse,on the whole good job.. Overall quite an even battle on the face off it,not that simple to call really,but there was a winner here,and for me that was LAW,here's why,i found his to be a bit more personal centred,Rid's unlucky this time as your verse was equally good in different ways.. Vote..LAW...peace. |
|||
"You need to learn how to make an exit,
before you can dare make an entrance". |
|||
Rutter knows best
Senior Moderator Joined: 15 March 2014 Location: Manny hood Status: Offline Points: 4529 Crew: EMPIRE Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 44-12-0 Form: WWWWLW |
Posted: 13 July 2017 at 11:48pm | ||
3-0 k.o for law
|
|||
#bananas
|
|||
Post Reply | |
Tweet
|
Forum Jump | Forum Permissions You cannot post new topics in this forum You cannot reply to topics in this forum You cannot delete your posts in this forum You cannot edit your posts in this forum You cannot create polls in this forum You cannot vote in polls in this forum |
|