Text Battle Archive: [Text] Absolute Abomination vs D-NoS (2-0)

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First up guys I wanna say this and it's no small thing.....Well done both of you for getting a battle up and running....
You deserve some votes on this so I will kick this off and keep it one hundred with you both...

Deano...
Opener .. So it's indirect brother, see here at LA we need to see punchlines aimed specifically at an opponent wether it's personal or nameplay or something relevant to who you are battling...this was more swagger stuff

Next...it has open mic potential but falls short in the battle format due to the above reasons....

Next...Went down the Australia route here so I see this as your first attempt to get personal and say to you that is better but I have to keep it real with you....This was mad conjecture as I doubt you actually know AA is actually an ugly bum looking guy....so it's a fake personal at best not to mention it was also pretty bad my friend

Next.. Not getting at the guy just talk and making unsubstantiated statements

Next.. It's all the same as above fam, I'm sure you get my point by now homie

Closer..Yeah so as above bro you closed out indirect and weak

Take this advice and work with it my man....If you do it will give you a better chance the next time you clash..

Abs...
Opener..So it's not very direct brother but already it reads better than your opponents work and I like the wording you have used, I would call this some creative filler type shot that just about makes some light contact

Next.. Much better here you up and swinging with a crushing personal shot that was based on some recent factual shit...good hit well done

Next..So not great but again for me the wording was dope, just not really relevant or aimed, so without direction it doesn't really hit very hard

Next..This was ok, not great but mad potential shown just need to tweak to make more direct

Next.. Swagged up but not really battle worthy ..falls shot of punching

Closer...Funny stuff, I am a big fan of humour in battling, it was a decent way to close out

You got many of the requirements to be a good battler down brother and I see much potential for you to be dope in this format..Hope some of what I said was helpful

Well done guys

Vote has to go to Absolute for the more direct approach and a couple good hits that D just didn't have

OK guys,so i normally break down each verse when voting,but i feel there's no need
as AA took this battle out right,he had the stronger flow/punches/similes in fact
better everything really,so AA gets the nod here..

D Nos your still coming with an audio aspect,plus your punches are falling short too,
there not landing as punches but more like disses/swipes really,the only advice i can
give without being overwhelming,is when you writing a verse try using you first line as
a set up,and the second as the punch,and if your not happy with it or feeling it,rewrite
until you are,there's a time limit,always try using all of that limit it'll help,plus read other
ppl's battles,or hit the elevation centre for some tips,it's there for that reason..

Vote...AA..peace.