Open Mic: Back With a 16

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    Posted: 07 December 2017 at 6:51pm
Been a while... Been on other sites, gaining connections and just building something out of my craft. Making tracks (one day I'll put them here) and just making major developments. But yeah, now I've got the time to write freely, I'm back and here it goes:

Why would I start to play nice when I can stay great?
It's funny only the jealous and the fakes hate
My punchlines are food for thought now tell me the taste mate
I began to run it like my mouth now I'm in great shape
But I don't hate the critics I think envy is fine when
You take a look at me and see what a blessing my life is
Then I write a rap, never depressed by the writing
I roll my eyes just to see how impressive my mind is
But don't mess with my team, we get abusive and snap back
Trained to attack on a track, words quite intrusive so stand back
We'll even take your bitch and hit her harder than you then it's damn fact
With our numbers we'll give that pussy more users than Snapchat
And right now I'm dissing no one but the bars hit in some, ruthless ways like growing pains
Superman punches my signature, you can say I'm Roman Reigns
None of this meagre written stuff, but I truly make the boldest claims
My bars get more results than search engines, it's like Google came to throw it's weight
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (1) Likes(1)   Quote Stalin Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 09 December 2017 at 1:27am
I roll my eyes just to see how impressive my mind is

I loved that line.. that was nice as hell.



But I don't hate the critics I think envy is fine when
You take a look at me and see what a blessing my life is

I'm not a fan of that, when can be such a difficult word to match up with when used how you did, it's a big stretch to make that fit together.. life is fine when doesn't rhyme to me.

Overall it was a decent drop, I have seen better from you, it's hood for a free type of verse.

Keep at it.
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Absolute Abomination Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 09 December 2017 at 8:26am
yeha that roll my eyes back line was killer. some lines felt too long before the 'wow' got to me so i was a bit bored (for lack of a better word) at times, not a bad piece at all.
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