Open Mic: [WD] Crimson Fruit [WD]

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   rappers like the Triad, baddest by a mile
these faggots arent a fraction of the climate
when the boredom set, the chess board begins
rigor mortis, is my foliage - my source of bliss
controlled within, I redeem what im 'posed to win
its the essence, of why they don't contend
ive unraveled trauma, while it shackles them
they worship til the end like Mary Magdalene
no temptation would cause a change in them. 
like traffic - its frustratin' they cant erase the mess.

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Neek Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Site Moderator Super Mario Slaughterer Joined: 05 October 2004 Status: Offline Points: 3862 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-1-0 Form: LWWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Neek Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Topic: [WD] Crimson Fruit [WD] Posted: 08 December 2017 at 2:38pm
	rappers like the Triad, baddest by a mile these faggots arent a fraction of the climate when the boredom set, the chess board begins rigor mortis, is my foliage - my source of bliss controlled within, I redeem what im 'posed to win its the essence, of why they don't contend ive unraveled trauma, while it shackles them they worship til the end like Mary Magdalene no temptation would cause a change in them. like traffic - its frustratin' they cant erase the mess.
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alicewonder Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 09 May 2015 Location: uk Status: Offline Points: 653 Crew: Kratos Kind Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 2-1-2 Form: WWLNN	Post Options Post Reply Quote alicewonder Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 11 December 2017 at 9:25pm
	Great to see you participating. 'Source of bliss', 'controlled within' and 'unraveled trauma' were the highlights here for me. A quite creative, direct approach with a somewhat light-hearted, yet 'introspective' tale/undertone, which I can definitely appreciate. Scheme and flow were very smooth, per usual.