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The Rap Daemon
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Posted: 09 December 2017 at 1:39pm |
It's like I'm a 'drug abuser' the way I'm always 'throwing the dope hits' While I'm over here, yelling greater lines You're too busy 'word dropping' 'coz you can't 'elevate ya lines' I 'went, left' so I could become the best, now I don't have t' fight So now I'm 'back in driver's seat' only direction's 'bragging rights' This 'key is major' on this site, 'lock-on' y'all but my name ain't 'Chain', like When it comes to substance in all your pieces I've got more in 8 lines. #5_MINUTES |
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CHAIN
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Today I got time cuzzzz
Lets disect that last bar. Where is the substance at? Where are the jewels at? Re-read my last Open Mic. I spoke on current political issues and made the reader (woke ones) think about gun control. I got time cuzzzzz. I'm here for it. I showed up early too. I got love for you though, young man. Im just upping your thread in a major way. Ive got more substance in my feedback than your whole drop. Fight me bro |
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DressToKill
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Okay let's be straight for a second,
This piece wasn't anything but below par, why would you drop a quick freestyle and diss one of the best technical writers on the site? Anyways to get a little into detail the flow of this was choppy, I guess you can blame it on the uneven line lengths. I'd try to bring a little bit more of a creative approach next time around if I were you. Anyways let's work
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The original comeback kid
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The Rap Daemon
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This is wasn't a diss to a specific member. I wrote this because I was bored and spark some more creative writing beyond a word drop challenge. A quantity of activity should not be sparked through a challenge but a self-made desire to write and make an imaginative piece, unrestricted and all. So it was just a little dig at that after I noticed the only activity being from 1 or 2 random members flooding the open mic with pieces and magazines 'comically complaining' about substance, and a lack of quality action on the site. I come back and share a couple pieces I created and all of a sudden a word drop challenge brings people in, and it shouldn't take that to bring activity. Quality over quantity. And that shouldn't die or be forced. Shizall I'm saying. This was not a special piece and I was only delivering that little message instead of focusing on lyrical ability because I wasn't about to make a rant. No dissing involved but seems it has offended people I put a few minor thoughts to word.
Anyhow, the rest of the feedback I'll happily take into account because I did rush something here I should have took a lot longer to develop something more out of. I still write for fun anyway and when writing something I want seen for the lyrical aspect rather than a little message that was only intended for light viewing I'll take it far more seriously. Cool days L.A.. |
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Crimson Juice
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For creative writing to take place as you put it,you first have to have members here
participating,and although to extent i see your point,I think your forgetting one little factor,besides the word drop there is a little topical league that's being ran by an alias called Ridley Squat,where creative juice are free to flow,for you to revive this present dip,you'd have to have the skill of Byron and the luck of the combined Irish nation,1 or 2 ppl alone can't do that i'm afraid,but provoking a challenge can,see in essence a challenge stirs the fire for the vets and newbies alike,some ppl here have been here 8yrs plus,damn Stalin been here since the site just started so to speak, battling and OM's they've done that and have the t-shirt too,the site has to be user friendly to all,and as a mod if ppl see a call for certain activities,i will provide them simple as that,it's about the members at large,not individuals i'm afraid,anyways on with the feed,why would you rush to throw something out when you have time to put down a polished piece #5 minutes,where this quality you speak of there?,but in truth i still enjoyed it,wasn't a fan of using the same word to rhyme with without using the same word in a different contexts,still it had merit..peace. |
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