Audio Mic: World So Cold

Took some time to get some music done like I said...

I'm the first verse, my crew mate is the second verse. Hook sampled from Johnny Cash - Hurt.



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LYRICS:

Black Soul-

It's gon' be hard 'coz the meaning of life has lost diction
But let me tell you a story of non-fiction
Black Soul ain't dope, he's hanging on a rope it seems
But his neck won't snap 'coz Black Soul's a freak
His life is not at all what it was supposed to be
'Coz he can't control or end it so he's just living broken dreams
He tries to hide himself away and not let the cracks show
No one can get close 'coz he'll just attack those
That do, 'coz his friends are his light but that's no
Damn good 'coz he'll pull them in like a Black Hole!
And make them dark to, there's no escape
So cold he broke away and now he's drowning in a frozen lake
He tries to speak out so he doesn't just slowly fade
But he can't breathe anymore his welcome he's overstayed
He's effectively killed his friends, ruined nice hopes
And stayed past the point of coping and screwed with time so
This beat and mic can't justify him to survive so
He's talking to himself, do or die, I choose to die...
So yeah this is my suicide note.

(HOOK)

Rohan-

Heart of a stone, im creating a spark.\
Chest caved in with the weight in my heart.\
Describing my life in a way through these bars.\
Life is a movie im just playing my part.\
Im praying to god to just meet with me please./
So sick of seeing all these people deceased.\
I don't cry so you wont be seeing me weep.\
Im so cold, even hell would freeze as i breath.\
No reason to believe the lies that Ive told.\
Talk to my mom as she cries on the phone.\
Each time that i broke, i rhymed with the flows.\
Having me addicted like lines of the coke.\
Hiding below as im stashed in a safe.\
Nowhere to go as im trapped in a maze.\
Stabbed but i don't have any pain.\
Wish I was matching my family's ways.\
Backing away from the problems in the life.\
I cant solve em if i tried with the garbage in my mind.\
But my demons have done caught me with the lies.\

I dig the Jonny Cash sample, nice touch...the hook sounds slightly off for some reason, maybe the sample could've been sped up...but Cashes raw vocals are an amazing sound to listen too, and I think the little imperfection is what makes it work.

Both verses were nice, flow for the most part was on point, I like how you keep your bars sort of continuous, and you factor in conversational pauses, but with that said... your delivery seems a bit scripted , that's cool tho... I still haven't mastered delivery, and for some, it just comes naturally. I'm more of a flow type person, so I can't really give you much advice in the delivery department , all I can say is your verse is dope, the rhyming is dope, as far as your multiples and syllable count... on point...just add a little confidence behind your words when you say them. As for flow, your homie has a pretty smooth one, it's almost too perfect...with no variations, a switch up here and there would be nice, but with shorter bars...he spits with less restrictions so he's able to put a little more character in his verse as far as sound. With longer bars, you're able to put more character in your verse as far as text.

Anyway, this was a good listen, hopefully you'll be posting more.

Appreciate the feedback guys.

I’m the second guy