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    Posted: 23 March 2018 at 5:37am
Ayo ...

I'm a hazard to their health cos I'm so savage when I belch
They can smell sulfuric acid in the gases I exhale
Bet them bastards better bail before I crack em at the bell
With a jab that's so propelled it smacks the black off Dave Chapelle
Go-go-gadget catch these 'L's cos you trash and lame as hell
Bitch my bank'll break the scale, cos my cake so overweight
It's like I baked and ate Adele, bitch I'll blaze you wit these shells
And spray ya brains on ya lapels with a janky twelve guage
And granades I made myself then leave you fatally impaled
Or stank 'n hangin from a rail in the Chainsaw basement or an East Malaysian cell
With a belt around ya neck for tryna plagiarize and sell my amazing rhymes & tales
To a basehead clientele, cos the flow so fuckin dope Ronald Reagan's sullen ghost'll
Prolly raise up out of Hell and tell em take me off the shelf ... welp.

I'm done.
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BRUH.... from dave chappelle to malaysian cell was pureeeee heat. Just writin' some shit that was flow. THIS I was able to grab the flow so effortlessly. The way it swayed back and forth reminds me of a Dre drum pattern. Loved that delivery.
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Some stuff I like reading
Some stuff I don’t like reading

But everything you put down here
I loved reading
Just a personal preference thing fam
But when you bring it this way. I sit up and indulge
God only knows how lethal you could be if you put the full potential in
Respect for the
Propers drop right here main
@LA NOT DEAD YET

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Originally posted by SELF ACTIVATE SELF ACTIVATE wrote:

Ayo ...

I'm a hazard to their health cos I'm so savage when I belch
They can smell sulfuric acid in the gases I exhale

this intro is just fucking nasty bro. . . 

Quote Bet them bastards better bail before I crack em at the bell
With a jab that's so propelled it smacks the black off Dave Chapelle

Then you follow it up with this. . . . . . got damn lol . . im like 4 lines in and already going back to restart my read. . .

Quote Go-go-gadget catch these 'L's cos you trash and lame as hell
Bitch my bank'll break the scale, cos my cake so overweight
It's like I baked and ate Adele,

ughh..... so just when i thought we was losing a bit of tone you sneak this little bit in here hahaha. . . 

Quote bitch I'll blaze you wit these shells
And spray ya brains on ya lapels with a janky twelve guage
And granades I made myself then leave you fatally impaled
Or stank 'n hangin from a rail in the Chainsaw basement or an East Malaysian cell


Quote With a belt around ya neck for tryna plagiarize and sell my amazing rhymes & tales
To a basehead clientele, cos the flow so fuckin dope Ronald Reagan's sullen ghost'll
Prolly raise up out of Hell and tell em take me off the shelf ... welp.

I'm done.

lol and i love how you just end it like. . . 'yea bitch, that just happened' 

man, i wish this was longer tbh, but i mean this is one of the dopest short flex pieces ive read in a long ass time. 
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