Open Mic: Institutionalized

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   From the first hieroglyphs, to the evolution of tribal dance
Culture was born from hunger, Hell was built with idle hands.
So go and get it, no love for co-dependants 
No repentant sinners rollin over on their co-defendants.
Move to the back sonny, every wolf in the packs hungry 
You could be a crash dummy if you hitch your wagon to the fast money.
Better learn to play the long game or lay a strong claim.
You'll never have a long reign if you try to play the wrong lane.
I'm tryna find peace like a Marley with the long braids.
Drawn shades shield my view from the feds when they launch raids.
I try to fight reality, but life's a bitch in its totality.
How can we emphasize morality when the bible condones brutality?
If it's nurture over nature then who's birthing this behavior?
They changed the nomenclature from 'slave labor' to 'wage labor'
Unless your a day trader they don't treat you with humane nature.
It gets more drastic, they give us guns so we start blastin.
They threw us in the ocean and told us swim through the hard plastic.
My city is trash island, we feel hopeless and half frightened.
But we find beauty in the darkness
Like the glow of a black diamond.

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Bakardi Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Groupie Joined: 13 July 2016 Status: Offline Points: 307 Audio Rank: Unranked Stats: 0-4-0 Form: LLLL	Post Options Post Reply Quote Bakardi Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Topic: Institutionalized Posted: 16 June 2018 at 10:24am
	From the first hieroglyphs, to the evolution of tribal dance Culture was born from hunger, Hell was built with idle hands. So go and get it, no love for co-dependants No repentant sinners rollin over on their co-defendants. Move to the back sonny, every wolf in the packs hungry You could be a crash dummy if you hitch your wagon to the fast money. Better learn to play the long game or lay a strong claim. You'll never have a long reign if you try to play the wrong lane. I'm tryna find peace like a Marley with the long braids. Drawn shades shield my view from the feds when they launch raids. I try to fight reality, but life's a bitch in its totality. How can we emphasize morality when the bible condones brutality? If it's nurture over nature then who's birthing this behavior? They changed the nomenclature from 'slave labor' to 'wage labor' Unless your a day trader they don't treat you with humane nature. It gets more drastic, they give us guns so we start blastin. They threw us in the ocean and told us swim through the hard plastic. My city is trash island, we feel hopeless and half frightened. But we find beauty in the darkness Like the glow of a black diamond.


alicewonder Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 09 May 2015 Location: uk Status: Offline Points: 653 Crew: Kratos Kind Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 2-1-2 Form: WWLNN	Post Options Post Reply Quote alicewonder Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 16 June 2018 at 11:39am
	I quite enjoyed the flow and I’m sure it would’ve a greater impact on audio, at least that’s how I read it. This had some highlights and I appreciate the existential-like questions and ideas you raised throughout. Some similes like the “diamond” one in the end or the Marley one seemed repetitive and cliched to me, but this was kept at a minimum. Highlights to me were the entire “If it's nurture over nature then who's birthing this behavior?” segment. You put it quite nicely in a precise way. I don’t think I ever read a verse from you, so this was a nice, refreshing read.

Neek Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Site Moderator Super Mario Slaughterer Joined: 05 October 2004 Status: Offline Points: 3862 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-1-0 Form: LWWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Neek Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 16 June 2018 at 1:21pm
	honestly bro, I really fucking loved this. this my kinda shit, as the cool kids say. its an open ended think piece that leaves the reader to digest (no pun) the food for thought. youre on the money that we've built a system that makes us earn freedom when everyone was born free to begin with. ive also questioned a million times how we learned most of our traditions. shit like this intrigues me alot more than most stuff. so thanks for putting a little pep in my step this morning. thanks for sharing. im 97% sure this is the exact feeling Jay-Z had when he heard "dumb out" by Joe Budden for the first time. it got me like whoooooo
	#Bananas

Sammy Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Site Moderator Beacon of Light Joined: 24 October 2015 Status: Offline Points: 2223 Crew: Elision Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-1-1 Form: LNW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Sammy Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 17 June 2018 at 5:29pm
	nice to see some of your work again, Bak. to echo the sentiments of the two pervious feed, this was a dope short piece. lots of cool lines i especially love that last one. for the most part, i categorize this as a social commentary piece, which in the wrong hand can come off very stagnant and preachy but this was pretty cool. good shit, cuzzin.