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The Rap Daemon
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Posted: 09 February 2019 at 9:22am |
If you make a mess of things, don't try forsake it
Take a breather, await your time, then jump the hurdles Second chances round up half the time, but take 'em Because when they do, they always come full circle Life is temporary, but giving up's eternal You can only catch a break if you're alive to make it Death doesn't end the pain, it immortalises it And takes it to your loved ones so more lives can face it Don't trade a spoiled egg, that doesn't normalise things Fortify the mortal eyes that look at life through that spoiled lens Clean it up, and show that what's demoralising Can be rid of to normalise things, organise things You thought were messed up to the point no thought could wipe it Don't let pain give you a hostile mind and scornful eyes since It's not the hurt you end up hating, just all your life, kid Don't dwell on the things that bring you down but don't ostracise 'em Fight for your life, and the upside can be born for rising Just look, worry about your life, don't give the end of it importance 'Coz only when you prioritise life over its hardships Can you glorify it, and march on strong regardless. |
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Sammy
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TRD this is pretty cottdamn good! I think the first line is missing a "to", unless im reading it wrong lol. Lots of great lines here bro
Second chances round up half the time, but take 'em Because when they do, they always come full circle if i was to compare the quality of bars to culture food, this would be mexican because its caliente You can only catch a break if you're alive to make it hmm...i'd say this is like dominos pizza or something. it has flavor but tastes off somehow, feel me? wordup "Death doesn't end the pain, it immortalises it" and then you brought it right back with the ill indian curry, son! but is imortalises the correct spelling? overall dope verse. really enjoyed it. On a serious note, u have a very organic conversational style that works for you. the rhyming and flow were very good imo. keep on, D |
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