Open Mic: Moment of Motivation

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    Posted: 09 February 2019 at 9:22am
If you make a mess of things, don't try forsake it
Take a breather, await your time, then jump the hurdles
Second chances round up half the time, but take 'em
Because when they do, they always come full circle
Life is temporary, but giving up's eternal
You can only catch a break if you're alive to make it
Death doesn't end the pain, it immortalises it
And takes it to your loved ones so more lives can face it
Don't trade a spoiled egg, that doesn't normalise things
Fortify the mortal eyes that look at life through that spoiled lens
Clean it up, and show that what's demoralising
Can be rid of to normalise things, organise things
You thought were messed up to the point no thought could wipe it
Don't let pain give you a hostile mind and scornful eyes since
It's not the hurt you end up hating, just all your life, kid
Don't dwell on the things that bring you down but don't ostracise 'em
Fight for your life, and the upside can be born for rising
Just look, worry about your life, don't give the end of it importance
'Coz only when you prioritise life over its hardships
Can you glorify it, and march on strong regardless.
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TRD this is pretty cottdamn good! I think the first line is missing a "to", unless im reading it wrong lol. Lots of great lines here bro

Second chances round up half the time, but take 'em
Because when they do, they always come full circle

if i was to compare the quality of bars to culture food, this would be mexican because its caliente

You can only catch a break if you're alive to make it

hmm...i'd say this is like dominos pizza or something. it has flavor but tastes off somehow, feel me? wordup

"Death doesn't end the pain, it immortalises it"

and then you brought it right back with the ill indian curry, son! but is imortalises the correct spelling?

overall dope verse. really enjoyed it. On a serious note, u have a very organic conversational style that works for you. the rhyming and flow were very good imo. keep on, D




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