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Mitch.Wagwaan
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Posted: 11 October 2019 at 5:31pm |
The worst part of having a mental illness is people expect you to act as if you dont. No courtesy, I refuse to front, I wont. I just dont want to feel so bad anymore, All I have is negative thoughts. Short fuse, minds ill, emotions out of sorts. Me versus me has been my biggest fight, On a tight rope between darkness and light, I try and be alright, Mother tells me to smile and put on a happy face. Purpose is to bring laughter and joy to this world, but Fuck this place. They laugh at me because I'm different, I laugh at them because their all the same. I'm not ashamed, I feel estranged from people living out life as a fucked up game. Why so serious? You dont listen, do you? Fuck You. Lifes a Joke, I'm Through.... I used to think my life was a tragedy, now I realise it's a fucking comedy! I hold a colossal animosity embedded deep inside, reaching its capacity. I think I felt better when I was in the hospital, people there dont pretend to be sane. Out here, all I see is people causing one another unnecessary pain, What do they gain? No connection, then again trust is a dangerous game. I dont even trust my reflection, that's the manner of my mind frame. Madness is like gravity, all it takes is a little push and your drowning. Swimming in thoughts I'm going round in, Im closed off so I cant let the sound in. Smile. Because it confuses people. Most of all me. *Bold indicates quotes from various Jokers Edited by Mitch.Wagwaan - 11 October 2019 at 6:16pm |
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Juggaluggaloony
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Damn mother fucker, this shit hits home. I love the joker, for ibvious reasons. As an insane clown, I can truly relate to this here shit, and whether you identify as Juggalo or not you sound like one right now.
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Mitch.Wagwaan
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I had no idea what a Juggalo was until I just googled it man. I'm not but I'm glad you can relate to this piece.
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Juggaluggaloony
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You never heard of Juggalos? Well let's see if you can feel some wicked clown shit. |
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Point Blank
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This was nice Mitch, the first line was powerful and really set the tone for the rest of the verse. To take a load of quotes from the joker and build a verse around it is a really cool idea, don't think I've seen anything like that before. He is such a fucked up character that it would have been nice to see this drawn out a bit more and perhaps made a little bit more sadistic, but I still liked it. Keep it up.
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Crimson Juice
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Very creative here dude, writing a verse around Joker quotes/sayings must
of took some thinking out, as it read real smooth too, you nailed the filling in scenario, and gave it an edgy/dark vibe in the process, similar to a question and answer slant it had this layered effect on reading which was done solidly, cool inclusion that, in fact with Joker being insane and unpridctable made it a tighter rope to walk so to type in the way of subject matter, as it had to stay cruel and callous with a twisted logic to keep in character, i have no gripes or faults with this drop, as i feel you fleshed it out real well, ripe work and ripe read...peace. |
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"You need to learn how to make an exit,
before you can dare make an entrance". |
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Mitch.Wagwaan
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Thanks PB & CJ, appreciate the feed lads.
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