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SELF ACTIVATE
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Posted: 24 October 2019 at 6:25pm |
...Topical Battle Verse Written To The Picture...
It’s been 200,000 years since the Fukushima disaster Accelerated evolution and produced the new masters Of a gruesome blue planet ruled by humanoid fish Known as Homo-pisces with a fetish and fix That consist of a dish made of humans and rice An ancient recipe that’s been cruelly revised With a santoku knife the tuna’s slow and precise As it slices the hide of a terrified child That was caught in the wild of a Tokyo town Full of radioactive .. ashes and clouds Ruins littered with capsules of humanity’s deeds Back when fish went to school, but didn’t get a degree And mankind was the peak of the animal kingdom Cos no other species could stand a chance or defeat us Back when “fins” couldn't breathe or even leave the marina And we had mastered the art of how to clean and then eat em Now they cleave and the feed us to every dolphin and shark And no PETA or vegans could ever soften their hearts Cos as smart as they are they still look to a time When their ancestors lives were hooked and put on the line So we could cook em and fry em with no remorse in our souls boldly wining and dining over corpses and bones But now the roles are reversed and we're the ones in the rolls Being slowly devoured by baby Flounders and old... Nemos and Dorys. Who could have pictured this story? A categorical shift between human and prey Went from an apex threat to being in the food chain Now we're sushi filleted over boat shaped plates Due to radiation exposure elevating their brains Our societies folded, their anatomies changed Started walking and talking like the ancient primates Sprang up out of the water, every ocean and lake And then they stood up straight and were colossal in size Took control of the globe right in front of our eyes See, we were weakened and sick; in no position to fight In attempts to survive we retreated to tents that were hidden inside of metropolitan jungles Overflowing with vines, toxic garbage and rubble The "fins" copied our culture and reinvented our customs From North Korea to Russia, in every country they crushed us In Chicago and London, to Nara in Japan they would terrorize Man Until we faltered and broke and had to alter our tropes Now "a salmon walks in a bar..." is not only a joke! Nooope... ~SELF ACTIVATE |
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Crimson Juice
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Sup SELF look at you here playing Darwin, and may i say your verse was a cool
take on the picture, i was pretty much hooked from as early as The Fukushima line, (which is the opening line as it happens), and it was on the surface quaint, but when deleved it begins to expand & the mechanics start to appear, & the story like the evolutional pace was brisk, it read rather pacey, this was littered with cool helpful but blatant visuals to keep it themed, like the time scale being excelirated due to contamination, its the little details that matter, (and that line where you typed, "Back when fish went to school, but didn’t get a degree", just my opinion here but if you had drop the word went, and replaced it with swam in, skools, you'd forge a metaphor out of (FIN) thin air... lol), this was an entertaining read here, i enjoyed it friend..peace. |
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Mitch.Wagwaan
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The concept of this piece was brilliant, comedy factor on point. I was entertained the whole way through and thought you executed the storyline really well. Enjoyable drop.
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I’m gonna leave some thorough feed soon when I’m not on my phone, but after a quick skim through - this is amazing!
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