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CHAIN
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Posted: 23 April 2020 at 2:03pm |
... I'm too hardcore to not see that she's a pawn 'cause I be getting play like an offshore streaming farm. Seasoned don, meaning you cannot lead him on While the sheep respond to her see-through Yves Laurent. Gentlemen, hell hath no furry like a demon scorned Evil monsters acting up be winning like Charlize Theron. Blood's the only healing balm that keeps 'em calm Be alarmed or be damned worse than a beaver pond. He ain't want the smoke but now they're a Cheech & Chong He can stay in that relationship or he can leave Wuhan. Would he need the porn CD-Roms if she was Ichiban? Running game like a streaker for any Peeping Tom. Putting no respect on the D is a torpedo launched... At you, but you know it hits like the Hiroshima bomb. I'm Ceas' Milan to a bitch and quite the mind reader All them red flags make me play it like it's Minesweeper. ... |
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Crimson Juice
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Really feeling the metaphorical content in this one, I'll be honest here, it
took me 2 reads just to catch your rhyming scheme, on the 1st read it came off as choppy, and knowing your skill with the pen i knew that couldn't be right, but the 2nd read was like coming out of a coma and being bathed in light, the metaphors/plays for me came off as unique really, i mean who else thinks of Beavers/dam/pond to hash out just one, as i've typed before i get a kick from the left sided thinking you display in your texts, and here is no difference, now theres only two more things left for me to type here..Ripe Verse....peace. |
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"You need to learn how to make an exit,
before you can dare make an entrance". |
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CHAIN
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Always appreciate the feed Crim.
Thnx again |
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