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    Posted: 23 April 2020 at 2:03pm


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I'm too hardcore to not see that she's a pawn
'cause I be getting play like an offshore streaming farm.
Seasoned don, meaning you cannot lead him on
While the sheep respond to her see-through Yves Laurent.
Gentlemen, hell hath no furry like a demon scorned
Evil monsters acting up be winning like Charlize Theron.
Blood's the only healing balm that keeps 'em calm
Be alarmed or be damned worse than a beaver pond.
He ain't want the smoke but now they're a Cheech & Chong
He can stay in that relationship or he can leave Wuhan.
Would he need the porn CD-Roms if she was Ichiban?
Running game like a streaker for any Peeping Tom.
Putting no respect on the D is a torpedo launched...
At you, but you know it hits like the Hiroshima bomb.
I'm Ceas' Milan to a bitch and quite the mind reader
All them red flags make me play it like it's Minesweeper.

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Really feeling the metaphorical content in this one, I'll be honest here, it
took me 2 reads just to catch your rhyming scheme, on the 1st read it
came off as choppy, and knowing your skill with the pen i knew that
couldn't be right, but the 2nd read was like coming out of a coma and
being bathed in light, the metaphors/plays for me came off as unique
really, i mean who else thinks of Beavers/dam/pond to hash out just
one, as i've typed before i get a kick from the left sided thinking you
display in your texts, and here is no difference, now theres only two
more things left for me to type here..Ripe Verse....peace.
"You need to learn how to make an exit,
before you can dare make an entrance".
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Always appreciate the feed Crim.

Thnx again
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