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Crimson Juice
Site Moderator Joined: 20 December 2015 Location: U.K. Status: Offline Points: 3258 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LLWLW |
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Posted: 03 May 2020 at 12:00pm |
House Rules.
4-6 bars (8-12 lines). |
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"You need to learn how to make an exit,
before you can dare make an entrance". |
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Crimson Juice
Site Moderator Joined: 20 December 2015 Location: U.K. Status: Offline Points: 3258 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LLWLW |
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In a flex i'll beet ya like sugar with titles of ya own texts,
1 jab have ya levitatin' like a 'Paranormal Activity' or hex, 'Are You Aware', i'm sharp cut ya throat breathin' impaired, Ya can wear it like neckwear, or cover ya scar with a beard, I'm going to steal this win off you like i was some theif, Like your OM you'll then be left with 'Memoirs Of Greif' Always in other people's beef & threads on the attack, Shoutin' & chewin' the fat, like a 60's Southern diplomat, Rhymes ain't heavy cuz your dense, drop the pretence, Wagwaan's text ain't worth a coupon let alone 6 pence, Expo's he's OM's. Memoirs Of Greif. Are You Aware. Paranormal Activity. |
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"You need to learn how to make an exit,
before you can dare make an entrance". |
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Mitch.Wagwaan
Groupie Joined: 21 June 2014 Location: England Status: Offline Points: 380 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-5-1 Form: LNLWWW |
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I'm not sure Crim can read, he's simplistic like his ryhmes. So let me rack a few, paint him a picture in 15 lines! I bag G's and not just cus I'm selling white, So I'll bury this clown leave his body smelling 'ripe'. His whole OM play is clutching at straws and filling holes, Its fitting tho, Pussy sucks Like whores & unwilling hoes. I'm not gunna sugarcoat, I'm glad this battles exempt from your shitty votes. Can't bare the word Tussle again, unless it ends with me slitting throats. Always dishing out tips, sending noobs to elevate & revise. Like a divorced marriage councillor, it's time ya took ya own advice. * Picture in 15 lines was a thread Crim was running. ** No love lost Crim, thanks for the battle bro! |
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Mitch.Wagwaan
Groupie Joined: 21 June 2014 Location: England Status: Offline Points: 380 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-5-1 Form: LNLWWW |
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Upping For votes!
Crim is the King of dropping votes and Feed so be star and pay back the good deed. |
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Concrete
Standard Member Joined: 02 September 2013 Location: Oslo Status: Offline Points: 1418 Crew: Tha Syndicate Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 33-6-0 Form: WWWWWW |
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Crim you definately upped your format game since last time I read a battle verse from you, your concepts are also more defined and less vague. What remains is getting more hardhitting punches, I'm sure I've seen a guide on writing punches on here somewhere. Once you get the hang of it will be easier to come up with clever angles and all that good stuff. I may add you could go for more rhymes as well.
Your best bar here was: I'm going to steal this win off you like i was some theif, Like your OM you'll then be left with 'Memoirs Of Greif' A good idea tho could have been used more deadly, and the setup should relate to the punch. Keep at at tho. Mitch, overall more refined in every way, good structure. Tho I wont claim that there was a killer punch here it was sufficient to win. Best bar here: So I'll bury this clown leave his body smelling 'ripe'. Stay at it. Vote Mr Mitch. |
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Crimson Juice
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Ok so this has been up long enough,nice win Mitch..
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"You need to learn how to make an exit,
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