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Rapper T
Suspended Joined: 25 November 2013 Location: NZ Status: Offline Points: 1423 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 22-27-0 Form: LLLWLW |
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Posted: 01 November 2020 at 11:35am |
There's some shade in brothers scene I seen it swayin' up in leaves But see I ain't succumb to beast I mean I came to sun the thieves Through blame or blundered treason G. Don't fuckin' preach to me I ain't no cousin leechin' peachy. Rather eat a peach Don't start, I'm after secret keys I'm huntin' catchin' unawares Blunt 'n' snatch in underwear in hatches up the stairs Ain't fuckin' laxin' up in here we come to tax this upper chair This motherfackin', cuck-infested, pack of unprepared Go suck a fat one Uncle Fester if you ain't about the remedy Say or shout an anything while you're layin' down on every dream Prayin' out to heavenly all like "hey I found out everything" Your face is gout like very green, you're just makin' out all scary g What you say is nowt to merry me, I been raxxxin' from 'em riches I been smackin' up temp'ratures, feedin' smack to hotter bitches Readin' MAD since I was britches, I seen man 'n' op get diff'rent Matter fact it's what you listen to that matters not the written
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Red-B
Groupie Joined: 09 January 2014 Location: FL Status: Offline Points: 408 Crew: eNtiTy Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 2-0-1 Form: NWW |
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Sheesh... bro the rhyme schemes are absolutely insane! Super dope drop i would love to hear you on some audio tracks brotha! Also the multi-syllabic rhymes are on point. Keep dropping!
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Alien365
Newbie Joined: 31 December 2020 Status: Offline Points: 11 |
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This was a dope little freestyle. The flow is great and seems like it would be pretty good on audio. It has a good structure of multisyllabic rhyming and doesn't err on that point. Overall good piece
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emcee squared
Groupie Joined: 08 August 2015 Location: usa Status: Offline Points: 43 |
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dope flow and rhyme scheme
3rd stanza was the hardest when i tried audio, but all the stanzas are butter |
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Crimson Juice
Site Moderator Joined: 20 December 2015 Location: U.K. Status: Offline Points: 3258 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LLWLW |
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Ok, so this verse came off to me as an inward looking piece, it seems to ask questions
to those who read it, it highlights commons struggles that most at some point see or feel within themselves, and because of that fact, it also had this kind of participation aspect about it, where the reader finds its depths at their pace, which then heightens flow because the minimal wording effect kicks in, i thought that to be a clever inclusion, nice piece which to be real truthful i enjoyed reading alot..peace. |
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