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CJ_
Newbie Joined: 27 December 2020 Status: Offline Points: 4 |
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Posted: 28 December 2020 at 9:14pm |
Dissed a comedian by surprise, maybe I'm the comedian.
Saw the beef then I put my Title down and said "what's this dIsh?". I'm the doctor, I Off these catfish. You a pet like a Goldfish, swimming in your little Bowl. You think you Dope but your skill is like watered drugs, no Dope. Playing Whac-A-Mole, and it seems like this wackness rigid. This is troubling, your spine is on the floor and the odds have shifted. I'm bad news, like a million views, and there's no clues. I drew the blueprint, ill from the beginning, Multi-Storey building. Clear visuals like graffiti, I didn't Script this Clearly. I'm the villain in the story and I don't Play fairly. Worldplay had multiple OD's, it's a Rare Condition. Dangerous Territory, Planted land mines, Twisted tale and By The Way, the plot Thickens. I'm on the frontline. I fly like airlines. NASA can't keep Up, lets give them Space. Strike like black ops, leaving no traces. |
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Beans
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This fire
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1-2 Season 1 Final Champ
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CJ_
Newbie Joined: 27 December 2020 Status: Offline Points: 4 |
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Thanks Beans
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Alien365
Newbie Joined: 31 December 2020 Status: Offline Points: 11 |
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Cool little freestyle. I liked the wordplay and the wording was definitely smooth so made for an easy read to follow the flow. Structurally I think you could improve the flow by using more multies and inner rhyming, but I guess this kind of depends. Nice rap style.
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CJ_
Newbie Joined: 27 December 2020 Status: Offline Points: 4 |
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Yeah didn't put non of that. Thanks for the feedback Alien
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