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Scotty32 
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 Topic: Round 1 - Group 3 - VotingPosted: 27 September 2005 at 7:07am |
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Select the best two verses from Round 1, Group 3
Topic: Write a story of betrayal Edited by Scotty_32 |
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frank white
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Posted: 27 September 2005 at 11:13am |
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For me it has to be verse 3 it had the most original idea it also had a dope twist at the end with the job or love dilema. verse 1 i was feeling had nice flow and content but not the wow factor that verse 3 had or the nice and thought provoking twost at the end. Verse 2 i have to admit i was not feeling dint feel it stayed on topic and could not catch what you were trying to do with the flow. so my votes verse 3
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the punching machine
bad boy 4 life biggie smalls was the illest |
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frank white
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Posted: 27 September 2005 at 11:17am |
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oh and verse 1 as well dint mean to vote verse 2 scrap that
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the punching machine
bad boy 4 life biggie smalls was the illest |
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Kaos
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Posted: 27 September 2005 at 3:17pm |
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my vote vote 3 it had the best shit the best concept an was best in that bunch i felt best origginality
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20theTruth
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Posted: 27 September 2005 at 3:37pm |
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my vote goes to one |
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no more
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Scotty32
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Posted: 04 October 2005 at 5:24am |
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uppin for votes
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I-kontinue
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Posted: 04 October 2005 at 4:00pm |
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Verse 1- I liked this verse, brought something very new to the table...it flowed decently to me...altho i disagree with your closer, it was still straight. at first, it seemed like ya verse wasnt talkin about betrayal at all, n then i read the last stanza, and all the pieces came together...i liked that...u could have focused MORE on the betrayal aspect thru out the whole verse tho which would have made u have a deeper standing on the finisher...
Verse 2- The flow was great to me...the story had gaps in it tho...description were missing...the storyline was ok at best. ya concentrated on the flow more than anything n it should b the otha way around in a topical...story THEN flow, decent endin wit a twist Verse 3- All 3 verses had a twist at the end, but this verse had the most interesting twist...it goes thru the whole verse touching on the betrayal aspect,and then ended it witha bang...ma favorite of the 3 verses votes: 1) Verse 3 2) Verse 1 |
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Unforgiven
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Posted: 04 October 2005 at 4:19pm |
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for me it had to be 1 & 3...
first 3, it was smoothed flow, had more originality, kept my interested, really speaked to me, and then at the end it twisted a way i didnt think it was goin to go- i thought the chick was gonna betray the guy- but OH no.. it wasnt that way at all!! 1, well out of the two left this one i guess was better, neither of 1 or 2 really spoke to me but if i had to pick one it was 1 because it had some complexity to it and it had an alright theme!! |
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Itz Simple....I'm Better Then You!!
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NuSense
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Posted: 05 October 2005 at 5:54pm |
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Ok, I'll be honest, I'm a lazy motherfucker. On the other hand, everything I would/could have said, has been said by someone else. I read all 3 verses' and my vote is going to 1 & 3 ..!
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.. NuSense/Primitive Thought .. .. Usual Suspects™ .. |
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Scotty32
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Posted: 05 October 2005 at 6:10pm |
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even if ya lazy - and even if everyone said wot ya wanna say..
you could still give a few lines to back up your votes |
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NuSense
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Posted: 05 October 2005 at 9:35pm |
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Fine. I'll be back later to give the smallest of explanations as to why I choose the two I did *sighs* ..! |
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.. NuSense/Primitive Thought .. .. Usual Suspects™ .. |
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Scotty32
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Posted: 10 October 2005 at 4:14pm |
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