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Goryo. 
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 Topic: Goryo vs Lord Puente (3-1)Posted: 21 August 2016 at 6:57pm |
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5 bars House rules Due 48 hours No flips No Ridley votes Edited by Endeavor - 23 August 2016 at 2:41pm |
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Lord Puente
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Posted: 21 August 2016 at 7:17pm |
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ridley or goryo, I don't give a fuck ho, yall both foes,/ you know theres the Law to enforce those keystones and throw stones,/ abandon all hope, shit aint close, these notes'll show/ they attack their own home, ruin Syn with lies echoed from/ with sins for their own goals, their souls? they singed both and sold those,/
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Goryo.
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Posted: 21 August 2016 at 7:50pm |
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My only expos are that he likes to cook. Alright let's go... I'm digging your grave bitch, your luck is fading He really thinks no Ridley votes is gonna fuckin save him? Take any chance you get, it won't stop you getting clowned When you dropping heat? When you turn the oven setting down? I always go for the kill, you see my shots are traumatic Like when tapes came out, I'll put 'LP in a box in my attic' Pussy ass ho, trading blows with Gor n you'll die Hit you so hard there will truly be a 'Lord in the sky' I've seen your shitty lyrics gotta say I'm not a fan bitch So stick to what you're good at... MAKE ME A FUCKIN SANDWICH |
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Posted: 21 August 2016 at 11:47pm |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. L.P your opener had some fact to it but no solid hit your second bar on the same topic still not doing much damage 3rd bar im not feeling , like your taking to long to connect 4th bar was a total miss for me closer was probly your best bar but still not the heavy kind of hit you need to do some damage and your expos almost as long as your verse ,,,,a verse should pretty much speak for itself gor,, your opener not doing ant real damage but there is agression the 2nd bar had a good concept if the punch was not a question and worded a little different would of bin nice 3rd had bar a decent name play the 4th bar was a good shot and you closed with some humour mvgt: goryo for gettin to the point quicker with some clean/clear shots and clowning him at the end nice finish |
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Posted: 23 August 2016 at 2:36am |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. ok let's get it. not sure how i feel about the no rids clause...makes me wanna boycott...but it sorta plays into the themes. LP: instead of going bar by bar, I'll just leave my impressions. i was impressed that you carried the theme all the way through. however i did find that the volume of footnotes required to lend credit to the verse a little concerning. it comes down to the question of whether the punch can stand on its own 2...it's a bit diff in an OM. so essentially you have your 5 bars plus your expos.. as i progressed through the verse i felt like there were some clever ideas strung together, but that they didn't really hit with a lot of force. the bar that included Law seemed the strongest as an attack...while the rest struck me as cumbersome. so in the end i felt as though you came with a strong concept. ..but missed a bit in the execution. Goryo: i think first of that your most obvious strength is your scheming... while you did bring verses that attacked. only 1.5 bars resonated for me...your intro bar which was a nice sorta rebuttal to the rule clause and the Lord in the sky bar. the rest seemed a bit on the immature side... so what to reward? the concept with the obvious effort into presenting their case? or the schemey economical one that is more direct? I'm going to edge it toward the concept. props to both vote to LP |
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Crimson Juice
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Posted: 23 August 2016 at 10:13am |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Decent tussle here guys.. Lord Puente I thought you had some decent punches Overal,coupled with the fact that it's pretty current affair added more weight to them really,your opening bar set the tone for what was to come concept wise, in a way your lucky really,due to having good concepts helped your drop and punches,because to be honest they were on the light side,they came off as light jabs/blows Overal,your personals were present too,but for me they were forced due to the direction you ran with,except for the bar with tittysucker,and this was aimed at Ridley not Goryo,who you are in a battle with,but with that typed it's still relevant,and to be fair I do think you did well in parts with the scheme on the whole.. Goryo,I thought you also did well Overal,you were more direct and to the point,I also liked some of your plays here,the Lord in the sky/LP's in the attic,your personals were also on display here,I do feel your verse had some decent creativity to it too,you also showed some decent aggression here,i also thought you had some humour to your verse,which counts for alot for me,plus your tempo and your schemes were good in this piece, your opening bar was OK nothing to hard more of a statement feel,your closing bar was decent due to the directness of it and the humour that was coupled with it,all in all decent verse.. Overal,this was pretty even really,both had their moments here,and if i could i would call draw,seens I can't,i'm gonna go with Goryo,here's why, he did have the better creative verse,and the fact humour was present too, Lords verse was based on assumption,and we know what assumption is.. Vote..Goryo..peace. |
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Posted: 27 August 2016 at 9:39am |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Lets do this First of all, I don't mean to offend either of ya, I am just too messed up to sugercoat stuff and something tells me that you guys are gonna respect honest opinions, so I am gonna be straight with it. ridley or goryo, I don't give a fuck ho, yall both foes,/ we goin to war so, ill point out facts, both broads post close,/ How can you do this? You guys need to learn stuff, heck I got a lot of learning to do but this was just blunt by all standards! You simply stated the stuff, I mean where's the wordplay, metaphor or just anything? I really wanna know!!! Heck I wanna know how is this a diss?? I mean man come on you gotta degrade your opponent, you gotta make him feel the burn and this is not how you do it. you know theres the Law to enforce those keystones and throw stones,/ like him you lack growth, any bars thrown, assume rid wrote those,/ With all honesty, I read the bar, I read the expo (thrice) and this still ain't clear to me, I see what you tried with the ridley concept but it came out real plain, spice it up a bit abandon all hope, shit aint close, these notes'll show/ youll catch mo' negative votes than polls for best photos,/ I am sorry but are we supposed to decrypt the bars after reading them? Stop playing Da-Vinci code man ! Make it clear with your bar for what you're tryna convey! You can absolutely do better, focus on hitting your opponent. they attack their own home, ruin Syn with lies echoed from/ one of two top tiered guys, that mother fuckin tittysucker,/ For the love of god, this doesn't even rhyme! Make it rhyme with sins for their own goals, their souls? they singed both and sold those,/ capital punishment, they'll pay fair tolls then Lord'll atone ghosts./ Come on! This was a really cool concept and you kinda wasted it Overall - Man, read some old battles and try experimenting with stuff like wordplay and metaphors also try to be a bit more on the aggressive side. Gor I'm digging your grave bitch, your luck is fading He really thinks no Ridley votes is gonna fuckin save him? Concept was okayish, landed as a weak jab, could've been used better if it didn't end in a question! Try to refrain from ending your bars in a question if the concept isn't actually a master-class haymaker Take any chance you get, it won't stop you getting clowned When you dropping heat? When you turn the oven setting down? Generic, make it personal relate it to current events, maybe a nameplay or a play on his OMs and shit! I always go for the kill, you see my shots are traumatic Like when tapes came out, I'll put 'LP in a box in my attic' Concept was cool, setup was okay but it kinda ended weak! The punch with LP could've been tonnes better Pussy ass ho, trading blows with Gor n you'll die Hit you so hard there will truly be a 'Lord in the sky' This was cool, the first bar in the entire battle that felt like - now he's talkin bussiness I've seen your shitty lyrics gotta say I'm not a fan bitch So stick to what you're good at... MAKE ME A FUCKIN SANDWICH Could've been better, could've been worse - though it stood okayish! I really like the swag in the punchline , set up could've been better. Overall - Last two bars were more like what people expect in a battle, though on a overall your verse needs some improvement, syn is a cool crew ask those guys to help you out! Try to go for more personal attack and rest is all cool Verdict - LP had trouble with rhymes (literally) most of his attack didn't actually connect on a personal level, Gor's last two bars were the best of this battle so that took it for him. MVGT - Gor |
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Posted: 27 August 2016 at 2:36pm |
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gor wins.
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