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    Posted: 27 April 2008 at 4:19pm
Figure I'll go ahead an' let you rank this piece.
 
To be perfectly honest, I know I never deserved to/
Have an angel like you, both so precious an' perfect/
But now that I got you, I honestly can't imagine/
How I coulda lived my life, if you had never happened/
I'm addicted to you, you could call it necessity/
'Cause I've become dependant, you bring out the best in me/
An' make me better than I thought I could ever be/
I was walkin' blindly, til God finally let me see/
That the child in my hands was really a second chance/
To take a look at my life, an' to make some better plans/
That's about the time realization come along/
An' I finally realized how often that I'd did your mother wrong/
Not how SHE thinks, but thank GOD she was so fuckin' strong/
An' that's why I apologize in every other song/
This is my lullaby to let you know that I'm missin' ya/
I love you babygirl, an' babyboy just listen an'/
 
 
Hush babyboy, now don't you cry/
Daddy dreams of you every night/
I'm comin' home soon to hold you/
An' make everything be alright/
(x2)
 
 
I wanna be there with you, but life is cruel an' vicious/
That's why when I asked if I could be with you for Christmas/
The judge said no, an' then he called me "a bad influence"/
But if there was a way to be there, I promise Daddy'd do it/
See, Daddy wants to be there, but no matter how he pleads/
They won't let him go, baby.  I'm sorry that Daddy had to leave/
But as sad as that may be, it's not as tragic as it seems/
'Cause when I go to sleep, I see you laugh in Daddy's dreams/
But I always end up cryin' at all the happy parts/
Like missin' your first Christmas.  That thought breaks Daddy's heart/
An' I can barely take it, 'cause these walls are closin' in/
Suddenly I'm awake, an' your gone an' all alone again/
An' Mommy tries to comfort me an' tell me you won't remember it/
But a hundred years o' comfort can't erase what November did/
An' she don't understand it.  She don't get why my tears are fallin'/
I left you completely helpless.  Now you're nearly crawlin'/
An' in dreams, I can hear you callin', sayin, "Daddy, why'd you leave me?"/
It's okay.  Mommy keeps your picture beside the T.V."/
In another one it, "Daddy, I hate my fuckin' self"/
But the worst part of all is how you say it to someone else/
An' now Mama wants to accuse me of some stuff I didn't do/
'Cause some other girl's at home sayin' stuff that isn't true/
Now I'm scared as hell of what your mother might do/
The life...  The family...  And the son I might lose/
So I can't keep from sayin, no matter how much I try to/
It's okay if you grow up to hate me as much as I do.../  (Until then)
 
 
Hush babyboy, now don't you cry/
Daddy dreams of you every night/
I'm comin' home soon to hold you/
An' make everything be alright/
(x2)
 
Hush babyboy, now don't you cry/
Daddy's comin' back home tonight/
I'ma sing this song to an' hold you/
An' everything will be alright/....
Spent six months hurtin' who I shoulda been supportin'/
But I was nervous, I was stupid, I was pushin' for abortion/
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote G-Pfeif Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 27 April 2008 at 9:11pm
ima say ama... this is a pretty straight foward piece... meaning there isnt much complexity to it... just lyrics... that isnt a bad thing... but vocab was kinda simple, had multies but the were all one syllable words for the most part...

flow was ok but nothin special IMO...

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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Fatal Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 27 April 2008 at 9:27pm

^Agree...

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