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Alone2Rome
Newbie Joined: 23 May 2019 Location: Lonon Status: Offline Points: 5 |
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Posted: 25 May 2019 at 10:13pm |
Im known to ignite and explode a hole through this open mic,
If only i could find a lonely guy to blind and torture all night, That just might put peace in my mind causing grief of this kind, Its done with ease i sleep shit breathe a piss crime, Would you ever grab a blade and stick it in someones face, Then openly debate with your hand whether you should leave or decapitate, I mus say theres only one way to finish off a body and thats to masterbate, You let your toes curl you lean your head back let urself cum then leave it as that! Ha lol |
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Crimson Juice
Site Moderator Joined: 20 December 2015 Location: U.K. Status: Offline Points: 3258 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LLWLW |
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Again here the quick fire rhyme scheme is kicking it, in many ways your drops remind me of a
member here called Day Dizzle, via the shock value they contain, which i'll state right now isn't everybody's Cup of tea, and although short, you still manage to pump out some sort of a verse with content, you've also added here some internals rhymes which helped this flow real nice, although basic via the mostly one syllable route, it still lifted this verse up on reading, & keeping a piece basic isn't a minus, like here it's can be made to be a plus too, drops of this nature become tough going if made to be complex with a forced flow, anyways enjoyable if in parts graphic read still....peace. |
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