Open Mic: How To Catch A Body

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    Posted: 11 December 2017 at 9:24pm
...Shout out to CHAIN


I'm the 3 Eyed Raven with a lightsaber
Step out of line and I might slay ya
Spit rhymes so precise that they slice like lasers
Plus I'm nice with a razor, pinstripe ya windpipe
When we fight in the 39th Chamber, ice grill you haters
Right before I shank ya, prose so cold I gave Pablo a glacier
A kilo of that snow'll get you popped like a Coke
That's a triple entendre -- call me Edgar Allan Dope
Got the Palace on the hill wit the alligator moat
What you agitators on? Bro my habitat's patrolled
By a dragon wrapped in chrome! I'm so savage that my throne
Was crafted from the bones of the rappers that I domed
Yo those bastards stole my flow 'n choked on daggers to the throat
Cos every passage that I wrote had scattered shrapnel in the quotes
Sack ya castles made of stone and attack ya tabernacles
Cos I practice no shalōm! Grab the ratchet go Capone
Samuel Jackson wit a 'fro and a loaded fo'ty fo'
Blowing Pulp right out they lobes!
As I tear-a-teen-nose off an adolescent skull!
Like A Natural Born Killer or a Desperado!
(Let's go) the muthafuckin GOAT! Baahaaaaaaaa!



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Well well ain't you the clever one,this piece is a concept within a concept,
serving not only as a brag/selfhype,but as the names of rapper or through
references of them,and that Edgar Allen Poe bar was a killer,what the hell
did you toke before you put fingers to keyboard..lol, highly creative and dare
i say innovative too,your scheme poetic-ness and overall mechanics were
super Ripe,honestly i salute you sir,i totally enjoyed this (*he says as he
slowly claps*),whoa..peace.
"You need to learn how to make an exit,
before you can dare make an entrance".
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I loved everything about this. You incorporated every aspect of your signature style, which makes it that more remarkable. I appreciate the subtle and at times rather direct references, from the 'third eyed raven' to 'Capone'. It really had a little bit of everything, and the balance you strike between all those rather different concepts and references is incredibly intriguing, to say the least. And I gotta cosign Crimson here, the Edgar Allen Poe line was another highlight. 'Shrapnel in the quotes' was also another significant one. I'd just wish it'd be a bit longer. It would also be interesting if you could record this or, again, a perhaps longer version of it. Overall, a highly entertaining read. Thanks for sharing!! 
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Thanks Crim and Alice. You two our god sends. Your feed is always highly regarded and appreciated. Much love. Peace.
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Quote That's a triple entendre -- call me Edgar Allan Dope
That's a triple entendre -- call me Edgar Allan Dope
Got the Palace on the hill wit the alligator moat 
What you agitators on? Bro my habitat's patrolled 
By a dragon wrapped in chrome! I'm so savage that my throne
Was crafted from the bones of the rappers that I domed
Yo those bastards stole my flow 'n choked on daggers to the throat
Cos every passage that I wrote had scattered shrapnel in the quotes
Sack ya castles made of stone and attack ya tabernacles 
Cos I practice no shalōm! Grab the ratchet go Capone 
Samuel Jackson wit a 'fro and a loaded fo'ty fo' 
Blowing Pulp right out they lobes!
As I tear-a-teen-nose off an adolescent skull!

YEASSS

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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Neek Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 14 December 2017 at 10:50pm
imma keep it a bill fifty Mr Spirit Animal...


this was pretty nasty. I wasnt sure about your dragon wrapped in chrome.. but good grief my dude... some of these schemes my friend... are ridiculous as fuck. for a man who practices no peace you sure are at peace with the bars. the syllabol maniuplation was "ripe."

the tear a teen nose/adolescent skull sequence and all that went with it.
only thing missing was a pissed off Ving Rhames.


anywhoom. I saw you eyeballin windpipe and wanted to know why. mystery solved.


da besh mane.
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Sup, fellas. I appreciate the feed. I will definitely get around to rtf soon. I've just been super lazy lately. But I'll get to it. OAN

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anywhoom. I saw you eyeballin windpipe and wanted to know why. mystery solved.


Ahhh bro, it was because I had an uneasy feeling that maybe I read/heard a similar line before. Maybe because pinstripe and windpipe are such an obvious fit? Idk. In any case, I wanted to double check to make sure. The last thing I want is someone accusing me of biting their shit. But, I guess I was tripping because nothing turned up.

Anyway, thanks for the love people.


Peace.
   
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