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Posted: 11 December 2017 at 9:24pm |
...Shout out to CHAIN
I'm the 3 Eyed Raven with a lightsaber Step out of line and I might slay ya Spit rhymes so precise that they slice like lasers Plus I'm nice with a razor, pinstripe ya windpipe When we fight in the 39th Chamber, ice grill you haters Right before I shank ya, prose so cold I gave Pablo a glacier A kilo of that snow'll get you popped like a Coke That's a triple entendre -- call me Edgar Allan Dope Got the Palace on the hill wit the alligator moat What you agitators on? Bro my habitat's patrolled By a dragon wrapped in chrome! I'm so savage that my throne Was crafted from the bones of the rappers that I domed Yo those bastards stole my flow 'n choked on daggers to the throat Cos every passage that I wrote had scattered shrapnel in the quotes Sack ya castles made of stone and attack ya tabernacles Cos I practice no shalōm! Grab the ratchet go Capone Samuel Jackson wit a 'fro and a loaded fo'ty fo' Blowing Pulp right out they lobes! As I tear-a-teen-nose off an adolescent skull! Like A Natural Born Killer or a Desperado! (Let's go) the muthafuckin GOAT! Baahaaaaaaaa! |
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Well well ain't you the clever one,this piece is a concept within a concept,
serving not only as a brag/selfhype,but as the names of rapper or through references of them,and that Edgar Allen Poe bar was a killer,what the hell did you toke before you put fingers to keyboard..lol, highly creative and dare i say innovative too,your scheme poetic-ness and overall mechanics were super Ripe,honestly i salute you sir,i totally enjoyed this (*he says as he slowly claps*),whoa..peace. |
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"You need to learn how to make an exit,
before you can dare make an entrance". |
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I loved everything about this. You incorporated every aspect of your signature style, which makes it that more remarkable. I appreciate the subtle and at times rather direct references, from the 'third eyed raven' to 'Capone'. It really had a little bit of everything, and the balance you strike between all those rather different concepts and references is incredibly intriguing, to say the least. And I gotta cosign Crimson here, the Edgar Allen Poe line was another highlight. 'Shrapnel in the quotes' was also another significant one. I'd just wish it'd be a bit longer. It would also be interesting if you could record this or, again, a perhaps longer version of it. Overall, a highly entertaining read. Thanks for sharing!!
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Thanks Crim and Alice. You two our god sends. Your feed is always highly regarded and appreciated. Much love. Peace.
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imma keep it a bill fifty Mr Spirit Animal...
this was pretty nasty. I wasnt sure about your dragon wrapped in chrome.. but good grief my dude... some of these schemes my friend... are ridiculous as fuck. for a man who practices no peace you sure are at peace with the bars. the syllabol maniuplation was "ripe." the tear a teen nose/adolescent skull sequence and all that went with it. only thing missing was a pissed off Ving Rhames. anywhoom. I saw you eyeballin windpipe and wanted to know why. mystery solved. da besh mane. |
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#Bananas
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Sup, fellas. I appreciate the feed. I will definitely get around to rtf soon. I've just been super lazy lately. But I'll get to it. OAN
Ahhh bro, it was because I had an uneasy feeling that maybe I read/heard a similar line before. Maybe because pinstripe and windpipe are such an obvious fit? Idk. In any case, I wanted to double check to make sure. The last thing I want is someone accusing me of biting their shit. But, I guess I was tripping because nothing turned up. Anyway, thanks for the love people. Peace. |
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