Open Mic: How to Spray a Burner [Volume Tres]

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    Posted: 28 November 2017 at 7:03pm


Bump stocks attached to my vocal chords, go to war
Gun shots fired from the tongue so they can quote me more.
Loaded Four Four but it's fully automatic though
Home grown terrorists get bullied on their patio
The wolliest of mammoths on the 32nd floor
Bucking like 'what the fuck you think a murder weapon's for?'
Don't gamble with your life, that's a Vegas metaphor
You ain't really winning if the loser wants to check the score.
Metal ore hits their brain once the flow sets ashore
Since I'm not white, this is Jihad to the Western norms.
On it from jump like black squares on a checkerboard
Got the NRA flagging this as Beretta porn.
On the low like collusion...Paul Manafort
If this is not scripture I guess it's esoteric lore.
I'm out here harvesting on these children of a lesser corn
Shots that got you feeling like Iraqis during Desert Storm
Grown bull, I go full Hulk on a lone wolf
No lulz, I'm occult with it in my dome's gulf
My flow culls the rhythm and the shit is so Pulp...
Fiction, 's like the trigger of the chrome 's pulled...wicked.
Hard and deep enough to crack a mole's skull, witnessed...
Hoes sulking over CHAIN and his pole's bulge, bitches





Edited by CHAIN - 28 November 2017 at 7:08pm
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Crimson Juice Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 29 November 2017 at 10:35am
Wow your in and out rhyme scheme was solid here,as too the assonace behind it,
this scheme went past just being internals,the 3rd instalment that i've been following
from day one,is strangely getting better as it unfolds,this would be the ideal subject
matter to make an iLLaid series,you've displayed some real nice pengame thus far,
(ppl I recommend reading this trio from the start), the metaphors/similes were also
solid in this piece,(deep/moles and Vegas/gambling) just to hash out a couple of
many,shit even the wording was crisp here, the metal ore line/bar grabbed my full
attention,this verse was (dare I type) ripe in all honesty,and when you drop OM's
they come with a signature of quality,(ppl know there in for a good read),and here is
no different,i've really enjoyed this series so far,(just would of liked to seen more
feed come your way,as this trio of verses does command it)..a very enjoyable read
for me,ripe work man..peace.
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before you can dare make an entrance".
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I've been lurking in the shadows for quite some time and I've really enjoyed a lot of work I've read from varying authors, but this is the first one I've read that really made go "damn". Excellent phrasing and the word placement was top notch. I'm really interested to see more of your work. This would sound crazy on a beat.

How long did it take you to write this?
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Yo dis was tight but you left out shit like bitches money dope n blang blang my nigga, the whole thing needed more ice
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Great to come back and see you still at it (I mean, who woulda though otherwise). I have to re-read the preceding verses but I can still vaguely remember the first one, and I love how you carried the tone and the quite creative approach throughout. Your signature scheme and flow is, of course, another highlight. The way you combined grave current events/issues with a subtlety is remarkable, to say the least. 'Patio/32nd floor', 'lone wolf' and 'mole's skull' were significant/stand-out lines, just to name a few. Thanks for sharing. 
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good to see you still at it man. 


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Don't gamble with your life, that's a Vegas metaphor

^^^ Any expo inside a punchline... Me gusta!

Multies were solid and flow was smooth. Some lines I feel could have been better with some double-meanings so there'd be more effective punchlines in every bar, but the one's you did have were slick and this was an enjoyable read nonetheless.
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Quote Home grown terrorists get bullied on their patio

Quote Since I'm not white, this is Jihad to the Western norms. On it from jump like black squares on a checkerboard
Got the NRA flagging this as Beretta porn.


yup.
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