Heat Wave: HW Topical (Rd 1) - Nomedic v Amgin

Storyteller round - This round will be aimed at "story" topics, forcing you to make the most of your 16 lines

Battle H "Storyteller Battle": Story of a Revolution: Tell a story of a revolution, it does not have to have been a real revolution.

Best of 3 votes from JUDGES

Amgin

My life is lavish.
My dining glass is lined with massive diamonds you cant quite imagine
At this time we sat and dined in the palace primed halls, it's half past 9
And I am Amgin, an ISIS captain. The face of light on this vulcan globe
I dawned my most finely knitten sultan robes, rose to give taunting toast
Patronized my conquered foes, the tale is what they want the most
Reminiscing, sent my best men to collect their president, my strongest foe
I walked in slowly, my squadron holding and pacified him, I grabbed and pried
And with his eyes snatched, he cried havoc, the blind panic passing by
His past was re-enacted in his master sight, then passed into the afterlife
And now the land is mine, the lives we sacrificed were the crafting knife
And now defilers hands get sliced, their veins run dry as an Atlantis kite
That's the final message, mailed and it's launching. Hailing upon them.
We're raising Mosques, hanging pagans from crosses, Arabian knowledge
We spawned like the Quran had prophesized, it's our nature and calling
Light prevails, chiming the final bells of violent hell, you'll grow and die in cells
Believe the signs. These desert reaches are keeping secrets only time will tell.

This is the downside of topical battles...when you get two guys who can clearly write a verse you have to start splitting hairs and it gets pretty subjective when it comes to deciding which one is better.

Nomedic - I really liked your verse, shorter line style but with some really high quality multis that didn't seem forced at all, you really set the tone in the first two lines and continued in that vein throughout. I quite liked the way you talked about the revolutionary figure & then switched to a personal story or recounting of events. I really liked that Dutch & English part, can tell you were leveraging your personal insight there, was cool. I think probably the only criticism I can lay is that the narrative was a bit basic, because you had such a slick flow and rhyme scheme that left you with no much wiggle room to give finer details and get a bit of an emotional element to the verse, which is fine, I still enjoyed it but I'd be looking for a bit more depth really. But overall, a really good verse and very much enjoyed it.

Nigs - I think most of what I said to Nomedic applies to you, I think his approach made him naturally a bit slicker than you (wasn't like you were bad just felt he was metronome) but on the flip side I think your approach gave you that wiggle room to add in a bit more colour, panache and detail that I'm looking for to separate people at this level. For me this was a really well written verse, the story itself I didn't think was sensational but that in itself shows the quality you're bringing, that you've put the spin that it's an ISIS commander and then not gone overboard, but kept it moving with the signature high rhyme approach but added the extra details and making it interesting to read without any killer plot line or twist is highly commendable. Overall, it was a really dope drop & the only thing I'd ask for is maybe a bit more of a captivating plot line to go with it.

So yeah, two really enjoyable verses to read but I think Nigs just had those added extras in terms of the details that enabled him to paint a picture which got him the win here.

Vote = Amgin