Open Mic: I detest love

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    Posted: 20 December 2019 at 9:07am

I detest love,

When we met, his aura….amazing, his charm….abrased me
And all the people who told me not to talk to him, didn’t fase me
“He’s known to beat women” they verbally expressed, but I can change him
Make him, rearrange him,...but the strange thing?
He didn’t even indite my number down when we’re exchanging
Two years later, “all your friends are just haters”
I know he’s right, I just love that he’s greater
He does everything I desire, he’s a deity, the creator
Now I understand why he now calls me an traitor
My aunt sees me about town “Why are you bruised, head to toe?”
I’m staggered in my speech, “I fell down the stairs, not long ago”
“I’m worried about you, I can see that you’re hurt, the tears are authentic, don’t just go with the flow”
THIS is what he taught me about, that the people just don’t know
I replied, “He’s my love and he’s alone, he’s my King & I must go”
When I get home again, I learn another lesson in love
I haven’t done my homework and this lesson is tough
I apologise “I’m sorry, I don’t mean to look rough”
......
Then I ricochet off the floor and I can see the heavens above

He’s looking down at me, wondering where to hide me
I hope he gets away with this and this feeling no longer divides me
Cause the love that I gave didn’t match what he provides me
As he rolls up a rug and it’s closing besides me
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Yep nice verse, domestic violence and blind love has got to be the worst combination for
any relationship, (and pardon the pun), i got a kick from this due to its subtle references to
that fact here, the imagery within was cool, as too was the flow and pace of this drop, in
parts i could sense the turmoil from the victim and her family's despair at her situation and
well being, all nicely caught here, I do hope that this isn't written from a real place/experience,
real nice verse....peace.
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damn this gave me chills.

really well done. very visual. very authentic.
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