Open Mic: I detest love

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I detest love,

When we met, his aura….amazing, his charm….abrased me
And all the people who told me not to talk to him, didn’t fase me
“He’s known to beat women” they verbally expressed, but I can change him
Make him, rearrange him,...but the strange thing?
He didn’t even indite my number down when we’re exchanging
Two years later, “all your friends are just haters”
I know he’s right, I just love that he’s greater
He does everything I desire, he’s a deity, the creator
Now I understand why he now calls me an traitor
My aunt sees me about town “Why are you bruised, head to toe?”
I’m staggered in my speech, “I fell down the stairs, not long ago”
“I’m worried about you, I can see that you’re hurt, the tears are authentic, don’t just go with the flow”
THIS is what he taught me about, that the people just don’t know
I replied, “He’s my love and he’s alone, he’s my King & I must go” 
When I get home again, I learn another lesson in love
I haven’t done my homework and this lesson is tough
I apologise “I’m sorry, I don’t mean to look rough”
......
Then I ricochet off the floor and I can see the heavens above

He’s looking down at me, wondering where to hide me
I hope he gets away with this and this feeling no longer divides me
Cause the love that I gave didn’t match what he provides me
As he rolls up a rug and it’s closing besides me

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Raplex-Dan Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Newbie Joined: 20 December 2019 Location: South-Africa Status: Offline Points: 5	Post Options Post Reply Quote Raplex-Dan Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Topic: I detest love Posted: 20 December 2019 at 9:07am
	I detest love, When we met, his aura….amazing, his charm….abrased me And all the people who told me not to talk to him, didn’t fase me “He’s known to beat women” they verbally expressed, but I can change him Make him, rearrange him,...but the strange thing? He didn’t even indite my number down when we’re exchanging Two years later, “all your friends are just haters” I know he’s right, I just love that he’s greater He does everything I desire, he’s a deity, the creator Now I understand why he now calls me an traitor My aunt sees me about town “Why are you bruised, head to toe?” I’m staggered in my speech, “I fell down the stairs, not long ago” “I’m worried about you, I can see that you’re hurt, the tears are authentic, don’t just go with the flow” THIS is what he taught me about, that the people just don’t know I replied, “He’s my love and he’s alone, he’s my King & I must go” When I get home again, I learn another lesson in love I haven’t done my homework and this lesson is tough I apologise “I’m sorry, I don’t mean to look rough” ...... Then I ricochet off the floor and I can see the heavens above He’s looking down at me, wondering where to hide me I hope he gets away with this and this feeling no longer divides me Cause the love that I gave didn’t match what he provides me As he rolls up a rug and it’s closing besides me

Crimson Juice Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Site Moderator Joined: 20 December 2015 Location: U.K. Status: Offline Points: 3258 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LLWLW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Crimson Juice Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 06 January 2020 at 10:52am
	Yep nice verse, domestic violence and blind love has got to be the worst combination for any relationship, (and pardon the pun), i got a kick from this due to its subtle references to that fact here, the imagery within was cool, as too was the flow and pace of this drop, in parts i could sense the turmoil from the victim and her family's despair at her situation and well being, all nicely caught here, I do hope that this isn't written from a real place/experience, real nice verse....peace.
	"You need to learn how to make an exit, before you can dare make an entrance".

Absolute Abomination Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 15 May 2015 Location: Australia Status: Offline Points: 556 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-3-0 Form: LLWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Absolute Abomination Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 15 January 2020 at 11:00am
	damn this gave me chills. really well done. very visual. very authentic.
	Show me a fortress and I'll show you a ruin.