Open Mic: If I Never Come Home

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    Posted: 12 January 2006 at 5:02pm
If I never come home
I want you to forget I was here
Knowing me is something you might just regret in a year
(if I never come home)Maybe I was meant to be gone
maybe I shouldn't pretend to be strong
If I never come home
Maybe i'll be happy one day
maybe I'll be better off someday
I'll never come home
You could tell I felt alone from my face
Cause I never felt at home in this place


If I never come home, please don't pick up the phone
I need a change of scenery, i'm so sick of this zone
This job sucks... I won't stay though some are willing
I feel unforgiven, this whole life in unfulfulling
My girl wants to give me the world, I won't let her
What good is to have the world if you're feeling no better
Damn, why do I take it there that much
I's so unnatural for somebody to care that much
... it's not like me to bare that much
I'm a man, I'm not supposed to share that much!
Yeah, that sucks, I wanna be alone for a while
I don't belong here, and I'm not the one prone to denial
There's no success here, only death and disorder
I need to take a boat, catch a plane, get to the border
If I snap, I'll be making a scene
If I stay, that's what'll happen, cause I have no way of breaking ruitine


If I never come home
I want you to forget I was here
Knowing me is something you might just regret in a year
(if I never come home)Maybe I was meant to be gone
maybe I shouldn't pretend to be strong
If I never come home
Maybe i'll be happy one day
maybe I'll be better off someday
I'll never come home
You could tell I felt alone from my face
Cause I never felt at home in this place


If I never come home, tell my mother not to cry tears
Cause i know pretty soon, I was gonna die here
And I know you'll understand this later
Everyone gets rescued except for the savior
I know you tried to help, but I'm beyond it
Only time I don't feel sick is when I'm unconscious
My girl sees there's something wrong when she sees my face
But doesn't know that I just need my space
Yesterday was Ok, today's all bad
And tomorrow will swing around like a baseball bat
And I feel stuck in between...
If I don't come home, you can wish me luck with my dreams
You might ask what the fuck do I mean
I might succeed by myself, i have failed enough with a team
If I never come home... please go on with your life
I'll go off to try to make mine right



If I never come home
I want you to forget I was here
Knowing me is something you might just regret in a year
(if I never come home)Maybe I was meant to be gone
maybe I shouldn't pretend to be strong
If I never come home
Maybe i'll be happy one day
maybe I'll be better off someday
I'll never come home
You could tell I felt alone from my face
Cause I never felt at home in this place



I'll I never come home, If you remember me, remember the prophet
When I saw injustice, I fought to stop it
If I never come home, don't be sad, smile to yourself
Know that only I could save myself
If I never come home, It's cause I was meant to go
Whether you were a friend or foe...

I won't come home, so you will never see me again
A long, draw-out goodbye and it ends....

If I never come home
I want you to forget I was here
Knowing me is something you might just regret in a year
(if I never come home)Maybe I was meant to be gone
maybe I shouldn't pretend to be strong
If I never come home
Maybe i'll be happy one day
maybe I'll be better off someday
I'll never come home
You could tell I felt alone from my face
Cause I never felt at home in this place






Hope you enjoyed it.
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote frank white Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 12 January 2006 at 5:06pm
Ok i really enjoyed this some of this was made creative i was really impressed by the saviour line. It had a message behind it and you could feel as if you were in the blokes feet. The give them the world was also deep and reflective. This is a classic so mods put it fucking in there.
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There are a lot of classics still not in classics... this was a lot to read and I'm kinda tired but I read most, skimmed other parts... hot shit... Kinda Budden-esque at times, the idea is the sorta thing he might flip, which is a good thing, I'm feelin' that... so yeah... nice

peace

. . . Now who said they fuckin' with me?
They just said that FUCKIN' with me
They didn't mean it
Nah . . .
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This is a good read, You have some nice ideas and just about everything was on point, I would like to he this in audio, personally i think it would be quality. anyway nice drop man, keep it up

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ey, shit sounded like Kanye to me. A good ass, entertaining read. flow was on point and u got the story thru great.
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote 20theTruth Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 13 January 2006 at 3:33pm
hey. you should sell lyrics.

it's a good hustle.

and i know you'd make stacks.
cuz that was like i said before
"D to the O to the P to the E - tastic"
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^ Clearly hasn't read G. Writer yet
. . . Now who said they fuckin' with me?
They just said that FUCKIN' with me
They didn't mean it
Nah . . .
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^ ? huh ?
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Jehu's other new piece in here
. . . Now who said they fuckin' with me?
They just said that FUCKIN' with me
They didn't mean it
Nah . . .
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Just cause someone drops something dope doesnt mean its a classic...seriously, back on the site me and Law came from we were like "this shit is classic!!!!!" when he wrote it, now we like....well, its good shit but maybe not...suppose if its OUTSTANDING for the time u were writin it in then you could make a case, but it seems like every time Jehu writes something people like "classic!!!"...classic shud be something special

Not that I read this, HAHAHAHA
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Budden-esque, sounds slick outloud when you rap it...indeed Winston

Old but vintage slickness
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