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    Posted: 19 July 2017 at 4:19pm
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I ain't even spittin' I'ma just talk'em to'em like... LOOK

Indians are Asians, so these shots make you a zipper head
This bidder dead when bullets throw Ax like hipster trends
Listen friend, you don't want beef it's not what Indians eat
Force feed you 'til you die from your religious beliefs 
..Shit 'bout to get dirty as India's streets..
Not an album but this Rocker will get his shit leaked
Bitch I'ma beast, between us is nothin' but distance
This a kill watch iLL put Axe in a box like huntin' equipment
Fuckin' ridiculous, compete with me is deadly as hell 
Hit AR with an AR & leave'em both empty from shells 
Flow sketchy don't test me. You could never be a rapper
Rocker suicidal, just know "in the end, it doesn't even matter"
So end it, any hezzy & you'll get spun, lifted off the ground pump Rock
Like 'Melo arsenal with his back to the block for the jump shot
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Originally posted by iLL ScriptureZ in his callout thread iLL ScriptureZ in his callout thread wrote:

You're second on my list. 



Originally posted by iLL ScriptureZ iLL ScriptureZ wrote:

Takin' the site out from bottom to top... 

Bad Script? Check! List starring ? Check, the story is dull 
See me kill a franchise when I crack this wimpy kid's skull
Weak attack focused on country than the person you are fighting
you remind me of suarez the way you both were banned for biting
Rock rises and its a landslide, my elevation's been sick
While your only rise was for pussies, like a horny dick  
You talkin Indian streets, that was funny at first glance
I mean its still got less Duzt in it than you got in your pants
You reachin to the top is BS you're a 'dead man walkin'
We say 'The script' got good lyrics its the irish band we're talkin
Ax cuts in deep, one last punch and I put out his vitals
Leave him making monosyllabic sounds just like his AM title


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The Diary of a Wimpy kid reference, peyton 'list' starred in it
IC-1 he was banned for biting/Luis Suarez was banned for biting 
Beans and Exo saga (just in case you guys didn't know)
His AM - Oh

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Well this turned out to be a nice tussle guys..

ILL..

Yeah this was a nice piece on the whole,a little generic in parts by just typing parts of
his alias with no real connection to the punch though,I thought you had the best bar of
the battle with putting Axe in a hunting box concept,although the set up to this punch/
personal was forced i thought,and that sums up your verse overall good punches with
flashes of personals and a generic vibe thrown in,however your similes were good to
which helped i believe,and you were going at him via his nationality rather than at him
directly,so that lessen some of the impact for me also,nice verse though still..


Axy..

Although not original i did like the fact you highlighted his quotes,it gave a sense of
him getting above himself,and your the one to reel him on so to type,you opened with
some sprite here i thought,I also thought you had more of a personal angle too,plus
your punches were landing mainly jabs but still having merit,you also had little to no
generic content within this verse also,you were direct with your contents here which
added weight to this piece,and your closing bar was good,i do however you added the
element of a flip at one point,but to be fair it was only at one point,good erase i liked it..


Overall i'm going to give my the nod to Axy here's why,he piece for me was better
aimed and and less generic,it was focused via having relatable contents to the person,rather than his location,good battle though,and sorry iLL he was the better
man here today with his offering..


Vote...Axy..peace.

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This battle was hot as fuck,

Ill - I never expected you'd have some haymakers tucked away in your arsenal but some of those bars were fucking nasty. I thought you did an awesome job of keep fluidity to your verse and tieing in your set ups as well. My favorite bar had to be the chester/in the end bar. That line was relevant, clever and personal so max points for that. I felt like you dropped heavy and kept up the shots.

Axy - first off this was my first verse I ever read from you and I was impressed. That Suarez/banned for biting bar was savage as fuck, really dope personal and a nice play with it so big props on that. I felt you used the advantage of flipping very well which was a great angle. I also want to shout our that duzt in your pants bar as well, you've got a great mind for wordplay my dude id develop that if I was you. Overall you also had a hot verse and some dope wordplay.

Overall you both had some bombs and this is the hottest battle overseen in a while but I gotta go with Ill scripts on this. The only reason is I felt Axys first bar was a miss and imo that defined the entire battle.

Props to both vote Ill Scripts
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ScriptZ
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I ain't even spittin' I'ma just talk'em to'em like... LOOK

Indians are Asians, so these shots make you a zipper head
This bidder dead when bullets throw Ax like hipster trends
THIS WAS AN A'IGHT OPENER. IDK WHY BUT IT DIDN'T APPEAL TO ME TOO MUCH BUT THAT'S JUST ME AND CAN'T KNOCK YOU OFF FOR A NICE PUNCHLINE.

Listen friend, you don't want beef it's not what Indians eat
Force feed you 'til you die from your religious beliefs
THIS IS NICER IMO.. CREATIVE AND DOPE. ALL I CAN SAY.

..Shit 'bout to get dirty as India's streets..
Not an album but this Rocker will get his shit leaked
HAD TO GOOGLE THIS SINCE I WAS LIKE WTF IS INDIA'S STREETS. WASN'T FEELING THE RHYME THOUGH.

Bitch I'ma beast, between us is nothin' but distance
This a kill watch iLL put Axe in a box like huntin' equipment
I WAS EXPECTING A PUNCH ON MEASUREMENTS AND A PLAY/META ABOUT DISTANCE, SO THE SETUP KINDA MISLEAD ME, BUT DAMN THE METABAR YOU DID HAVE WAS FIRE! THE WAY THIS A KILL TIES IN WITH HUNTING EQUIPMENT AS WELL TO SAY LITERALLY GOING OUT TO KILL IS CLEVER IF AT ALL INTENTIONAL AND WELL YOU DON'T NEED AN EXPLANATION ON THE MAIN PUNCH. IT WAS DOPE AND EFFECTIVE AS YOU PLANNED AND KNEW IT WAS.

Fuckin' ridiculous, compete with me is deadly as hell
Hit AR with an AR & leave'em both empty from shells
AR NAMEFLIPS ARE A BIT PLAYED OUT BUT THIS IS STILL NICE.

Flow sketchy don't test me. You could never be a rapper
Rocker suicidal, just know "in the end, it doesn't even matter"
THIS NAMEFLIP IS A LOT BETTER. HOT AF!!

So end it, any hezzy & you'll get spun, lifted off the ground pump Rock
Like 'Melo arsenal with his back to the block for the jump shot
THIS KINDA WENT OVER MY HEAD, BUT THEN PROBABLY BECAUSE IT'S TOO MUCH DOPENESS FOR ONE TO COMPREHEND.

This isn't exactly battle verse of the year, but never expected that much considering it's not exactly a prestigious battle in a big event yada yada, however despite a couple light hits, everything hit home and hard for that matter. Props on those dope nameflips.

AXY
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Bad Script? Check! List starring ? Check, the story is dull
See me kill a franchise when I crack this wimpy kid's skull
THIS IS A BIT TOO BASIC. NOT JUST FOR MY LIKING BUT CONSIDERING WHO YOU'RE GOING UP AGAINST, YOU NEED PROPER SHOTS FIRING FROM ALL CYLINDERS.

Weak attack focused on country than the person you are fighting
you remind me of suarez the way you both were banned for biting
AND OUT OF NOWHERE YOU PROVIDE!!! ONLY ISSUE I HAVE IS THAT THE SETUP HAD NOTHING TO DO WITH THE PUNCH, WHICH WAS FIRE THIS COULD HAVE BEEN ALL-ROUND BOMB OF A BAR IF IT WAS SET PROPERLY.

Rock rises and its a landslide, my elevation's been sick
While your only rise was for pussies, like a horny dick
IT'S A SOLID BAR, BUT NOTICE HOW ILL BRINGS HEAT SPECIFIC TO HIS OPPONENT. THE PERSONALS BRING THAT EDGE TO A PUNCHLINE TO LAND WITH MORE IMPACT THAN A GENERIC BAR CAN.

You talkin Indian streets, that was funny at first glance
I mean its still got less Duzt in it than you got in your pants
BETTER. YOU HAD A SETUP AND A PUNCH TO CONNECT WITH IT. DO THIS ALL THE TIME AND YOU'LL SEE RESULTS.

You reachin to the top is BS you're a 'dead man walkin'
We say 'The script' got good lyrics its the irish band we're talkin
THIS IS DECENT. I GUESS AFTER SEEING SO MUCH FIRE THIS DIDN'T IMPRESS ME TOO MUCH, BUT IT'S NOT A BAD BAR.

Ax cuts in deep, one last punch and I put out his vitals
Leave him making monosyllabic sounds just like his AM title
THIS IS YOUR BEST BAR BY FAR. GREAT SETUP AND PUNCH. IDK WHY PEOPLE KNOCK YOU SO MUCH. IF EVERY BAR YOU MADE WAS EXACTLY LIKE THIS ONE, YOU'D BE BEATING THE GUYS THAT SHIT ON YOU MAN.

Verdict: Well, I was expecting quite a one-sided affair here, but we got the exact opposite. Gotta give props to Axy as the underdog for not disappointing, and making this a very close and enjoyable battle. If ScriptZ's stacked even slightly, you would have won this battle but I still see one winner, and that is iLL ScriptureZ, because what set him above here was more coherency in the verse a whole and more consistent punchlines that rocked his opponent. But Axy, keep it up. Only critique I can give is to make EVERY SINGLE BAR count, each with a great setup and a punch to connect along with it, a personal one if you want the firepower to have more impact to your specific opponent. More of that which you showed promising glimpses of here and your future battles will definitely see more results going your way as you rock your opponents too hard for wear.

VERY DOPE BATTLE GUYS SO MAD PROPS TO THE BOTH OF YOU AND RESPECT FOR BOTH BRINGING THAT FIRE. ScriptZ for not slacking and producing another wonderful bomb of a drop, and Rocker for exceeding expectations by quite a considerable amount.   
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ILL....

Very impressive the way you switched onto regular battles instead of topicals. The drop was polished. I liked the opener focusing on the indian/background religion theme. However the rest was pretty dated in comparison such as the "put in a box" stuff ehh. That box line was still nice tho.I'm not great at goin all micro thru the bars cuz I look at the overall sting and entertainment factor. I think you done well.

Axy....
My Fellow L.l. alumni. Your wording kinda threw me off here and there. Kinda like I had no real idea where you were going with the punches. When you did land it just jabbed. I feel you wasted lines rebutting ILL. However the rest was kinda humorous and I'm all in for humor.Nothin like a good roasting.

Overall.... Going with ILL...I felt he had the upper hand in punches. Axy took the risk of rebuttal but didn't quite make the hit sting. This could actually go either way depending on preference cuz Axy did much better in fresher content. We'll see. Good show guys. And good luck with the BL

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Oops srry for the BL4 mistake lmaooo. Mod please delete that part

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ndians are Asians, so these shots make you a zipper head
This bidder dead when bullets throw Ax like hipster trends

I guess this went over my head because although I understand the 
main punch (thanks to the link) I don't understand why or how "bullets"
is associated with this bar. Please excuse me if I'm just missing something here.
 Nevertheless, the rhyme scheme was nice.

Listen friend, you don't want beef it's not what Indians eat
Force feed you 'til you die from your religious beliefs 

Nice transitional rhyme from bar to bar. It makes for a much more polished verse.
As for this bar, the set up here is strong, clever and humorous.
The punch is strong also as is the overall bar.
The analogy is there throughout and clever for the most part. Nice job.

..Shit 'bout to get dirty as India's streets..
Not an album but this Rocker will get his shit leaked

Again, nice transitional rhyme. very notable. 
The set up is strong again. Very direct, humorous and pestering. 
Lol I use that term because at this point, you are bullying him with the Indian thing but just moderately enough. The punch is a knockout. Great nameplay. very idestructive.
Well written and polished. The bar over all is a knockout bar. Nice job.

Bitch I'ma beast, between us is nothin' but distance
This a kill watch iLL put Axe in a box like huntin' equipment

Decent set up and killer punch. Great nameplay. Nice internal rhyming and it was properly placed. The endrhyming I think is off on syllables but you worked something out there to make it work. Nice job, Knockout hit. 

Fuckin' ridiculous, compete with me is deadly as hell 
Hit AR with an AR & leave'em both empty from shells 

Lol great transitional. I enjoyed how it transitions here. 
Very nice bar. May be the strongest of the verse. But that makes none any less better than they ar individually because this was a very strong verse throughout and made for an enjoyable read.

Flow sketchy don't test me. You could never be a rapper
Rocker suicidal, just know "in the end, it doesn't even matter"

Damn. Geez!. Great nameplay and bravo to the way you used a famous recent event to associate his name and career. Great bar. #Hardhitter

So end it, any hezzy & you'll get spun, lifted off the ground pump Rock
Like 'Melo arsenal with his back to the block for the jump shot

I'm not really feeling this for a closer but it might be also over my head. 
Overall a great battle verse.
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Bad Script? Check! List starring ? Check, the story is dull 
See me kill a franchise when I crack this wimpy kid's skull

Nicely wrote but I'm not feeling the punch. It doesn't seem direct enough

Weak attack focused on country than the person you are fighting
you remind me of suarez the way you both were banned for biting

More statemental here. Didn't really take your dirt and formulate it into a clever punch. Instead you just basically said your dirt. The set up I've read over and over and I just don't understand what you are trying to say

Rock rises and its a landslide, my elevation's been sick
While your only rise was for pussies, like a horny dick  

This bar was to awkward for me. The whole horny dick thing was weird. 
And please tell me you were not associating Rock rises/elevation with horny dick!! 

You talkin Indian streets, that was funny at first glance
I mean its still got less Duzt in it than you got in your pants

Decent personal. Probably the best thus far, 
As for the set up, I'm not sure if flipping is allowed but decent set up.

You reachin to the top is BS you're a 'dead man walkin'
We say 'The script' got good lyrics its the irish band we're talkin

Decent nameplay. Maybe could have made it a tad bit stronger with a couple of tweaks. But it was good execution. 

Ax cuts in deep, one last punch and I put out his vitals
Leave him making monosyllabic sounds just like his AM title

Nice personal. Great set up. Well played bar all together,
Props.
The verse was better in the last 3 bars but it had some dull and weird moments as mentioned.

I think this was a decent battle but ILL obviously planned to come out swinging and not stop until his opponent was out cold and that's exactly what he did. 
Ax had some nice bars which arrived too late and low in numbers.
Nice effort for both contenders but my vote will go to
ILL

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Was gonna vote for this, but I see it is already done n dusted.
3-1 to ILL before the last vote.
Just putting that out there to save anyone else the time.
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4-1 iLL Scripturez..
"You need to learn how to make an exit,before you can make an entrance".
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