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    Posted: 27 September 2019 at 1:33am
I read scientific papers that relay what we're observin'
not some dusty Scripture that puts faith in mere assertions
like for instance, when you make a statement here bismerchin'
the name of people you ain't even heard of just for exerting
more effort in a day than you made in a year, the burden
of proof is on you, let's debate the clear aversion

you have to critical thought, you pitiful twat
you're an imbecile distraught due to your minimal cock
You dare to call me an idiot when you cringe at the pros-
-pect of intellectual debate? you must be simple as rocks
I won't skin em' and chop em'  just drop him into the pot
 cook em' with the lid of it off so I can sit and just watch
 boil him alive,  before I dip him in sauce
bit em', but didn't like the subtle taste of bitch that he's got

I read your new world order shit looking for some valid prose
but it just sounded like you been watching too much Alex Jones
you're chemically imbalanced dome is now exposed
you sounded so inarticulate, your lack of prowess shows

it sure isn't prudent to spew conservative views in my presence
surely you've heard of why the many are servin' the few
it's called class, and you're reaffirmin' it through
you're mindless regurgitating of fake shit you heard on fox news
 I read that bullshit you wrote, it was absurd as the new
world order shit, besmirchin' the true left for what neo-liberals do
they're as worthless as you
capitalist serpents that use the state to mitigate some concerns with a slew
of social programs, but never truly start reversin' the plu-
-tocracy cause' they serve it, and soon true socialism will emerge to subdue
the primitive and submerge it under the surface of truth













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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 01 October 2019 at 5:08pm
iLL been fasting, you need a prayer like its Ramadan
Basic as fuck, that why you left the pH off phenomenon
Carry on with those fairy tales with leprechauns 
Trying sound smart just a dumbass with lexicon 
Sprinting on every post not realizing it’s a marathon
What made you think you could square dance in the octagon
Only person as dope as me is in the mirror I put my product on
…Your It factor is being a clown at Comicon
In fact, sit back ‘fore my pimp hand leave you bitch smacked
The impact fold you in half like a dish rag
Been had bars, these punches got a kickback
Give this hill billy Riff Raff metal but not his tin hat
Scriptz that goon, use caution when you speak
Acting woke is just nonsense from a sheep
Use your conscience, can’t be conscious if you sleep
Since when did LA get Mose from The Office on a beat?!
You’ll get shanked right, as your golfing for the green
How does iron deficiency work if you’re coughing up ya spleen?
Are you as off-putting and as awkward as you seem?
You’re on LA, like a celebrity stalker in the street 
Mocking all these artists, you’re a bother and a freak
Making up for the time in school you were put in lockers as a geek
Can tell by the mullet, you mean business, I get it
But a part in the back is a bad business decision 
Scripturez a legend, maybe that’s more of vision than mission
But a statement that shows the difference between the finish and the finished
You're welcome.
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vote - scriptz

nuff said. 
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NOM//

I read scientific papers that relay what we're observin'

not some dusty Scripture that puts faith in mere assertions

like for instance, when you make a statement here bismerchin'

the name of people you ain't even heard of just for exerting

more effort in a day than you made in a year, the burden

of proof is on you, let's debate the clear aversion

The structure, flow and lyrics were pretty good in this to be fair and a nice bit of wordplay but there was no punchline. That's your opening three bars bro, you gotta atleast throw a punch.

you have to critical thought, you pitiful twat

you're an imbecile distraught due to your minimal cock

You dare to call me an idiot when you cringe at the pros-

-pect of intellectual debate? you must be simple as rocks

Not feeling this either. Gone in with something relevant but not really pulled out off.

I won't skin em' and chop em'  just drop him into the pot

 cook em' with the lid of it off so I can sit and just watch

 boil him alive,  before I dip him in sauce

bit em', but didn't like the subtle taste of bitch that he's got

The third third line threw this all off but the last line was aaight. Made me chuckle.

I read your new world order shit looking for some valid prose

but it just sounded like you been watching too much Alex Jones

you're chemically imbalanced dome is now exposed

you sounded so inarticulate, your lack of prowess shows

This was better, it was relevant and had a punch. Multies in the third line rolled of the tounge smoothly.

it sure isn't prudent to spew conservative views in my presence

surely you've heard of why the many are servin' the few

it's called class, and you're reaffirmin' it through

you're mindless regurgitating of fake shit you heard on fox news

 I read that bullshit you wrote, it was absurd as the new

world order shit, besmirchin' the true left for what neo-liberals do

they're as worthless as you

It was alright, flowed okay but was a bit stretched in places. I didn't really see any punches though, just debating his political views.

capitalist serpents that use the state to mitigate some concerns with a slew

of social programs, but never truly start reversin' the plu-

-tocracy cause' they serve it, and soon true socialism will emerge to subdue

the primitive and submerge it under the surface of truth


Again these ain't bars for a battle bro. Your just lecturing him about your own political views. It was hella stretched again too.

Overall//

You didn't attack your opponent enough, it felt like more of a lesson on capitalism. You have a good vocabulary and an idea of how to structure your verses but this isn't how you battle an opponent. If you stop being such a bitch you have the basis to become a really good writer. Rather than keep spamming the site with shite take some time to read the rules and learn the etiquette. Read through some past battles and see how to construct a punchline to effect. No one is hating on you for no reason, show other members you can behave in a civil way and they will treat you accordingly.


ILL//

iLL been fasting, you need a prayer like its Ramadan

Basic as fuck, that why you left the pH off phenomenon

Carry on with those fairy tales with leprechauns 

Trying sound smart just a dumbass with lexicon 

Opener was pretty dope and the wordplay worked nicely with the punchline. Second bar was average.

Sprinting on every post not realizing it’s a marathon

What made you think you could square dance in the octagon

Only person as dope as me is in the mirror I put my product on

…Your It factor is being a clown at Comicon

Third bar was nice, good comedy factor.
Fourth was stretched and threw me off.


In fact, sit back ‘fore my pimp hand leave you bitch smacked

The impact fold you in half like a dish rag

Been had bars, these punches got a kickback

Give this hill billy Riff Raff metal but not his tin hat

Fith bar was average. Sixth was golden, best of the battle by a mile.

Scriptz that goon, use caution when you speak

Acting woke is just nonsense from a sheep

Use your conscience, can’t be conscious if you sleep

Since when did LA get Mose from The Office on a beat?!

Seventh bar wasnt great, the set up wasnt the eighth wasnt the best but punchline was decent enough.

You’ll get shanked right, as your golfing for the green

How does iron deficiency work if you’re coughing up ya spleen?

Are you as off-putting and as awkward as you seem?

You’re on LA, like a celebrity stalker in the street 

Mocking all these artists, you’re a bother and a freak

Making up for the time in school you were put in lockers as a geek

This was all pretty dope and I loved the way it flowed.

Can tell by the mullet, you mean business, I get it

But a part in the back is a bad business decision 

Scripturez a legend, maybe that’s more of vision than mission

But a statement that shows the difference between the finish and the finished

I felt you could of come harder with the closer but it wasnt terrible.

Overall//

With the amount of ammo this kids given you it's hard not to take shots, some of your bars were on point and it had a good comedy factor to it. You didn't come as hard as you could but you knew you had the job done.

Verdict//

ILL walked this by a country mile, a more polished and experienced battler.

Vote// ILL
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OK i'm going to let Dizzle abysmal vote stand, because this battle was really a one way street here, i
feel Noumenon dropped the ball, he had a wealth of ammo to use if only he dug around a little, alw-
ays try to research the person you battle here, because on top of punches, personals matter too,
plus Nou's verse seemed a mixer of half decent angles but poorly fleshed out concepts..

Vote... iLL....(and i'm not being bias)..peace.
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 07 October 2019 at 11:53pm
And with that closed..


3-0 ko awarded to iLL....
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