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Cuba
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Posted: 17 December 2016 at 8:22pm |
My writtens are a mirage of sanguine depravity
That detonate on you like onomatopoeia. Veracity. That boom bap, rat-a-tat-tat, that rips fast to puncture you Old school fronting dude, like a placard reading "pulchritude" This shit's so advanced it's like a relic of the future Tryna stem this flow'll need more than a tourniquet or a suture This bitch somewhere between Bernadette n Medusa More a big bang theory than a threat to the legend of Cuba Yeah, it's all click bait, takes more than a hammer to sway me That shit ain't a fair fight like when the Japs get a hanker for whaling |
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Crimson Juice
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Whoa,this was nice in a few ways,one for answering JH diss towards you,and two because you've kicked off the WD7,this was a nice comeback I thought,creative too
as not only does it serve as a reply,it also serves this challenge well aswell,(2 with 1 stone springs to mind here),this was nicely done on the whole,I thought you used the key words really well and coherent too,using his own claims against him was a ripe touch,the plays in this drop are also solid,I'll hash out some of the highlights soon,i definitely like the angles and concept within this piece,and the title is befitting with the matter at hand,all whilst keeping a constant vibe and rock steady flow classic.. " That boom bap, rat-a-tat-tat, that rips fast to puncture you Old school fronting dude, like a placard reading "pulchritude" This shit's so advanced it's like a relic of the future" "Tryna stem this flow'll need more than a tourniquet or a suture This bitch somewhere between Bernadette n Medusa More a big bang theory than a threat to the legend of Cuba" Them short lines were a welcome boost too,made for an effortless read and only aided this piece further,"when the Japs get a hanker for whaling" that added a cool emotion that fits this drop,because of his desire to get at you,well answer there,this was a nice read overall,more so for its duel purpose as I stated at the start,enjoyed the read here Cuba considering the creative edge you brought along..ripe,real ripe. peace. |
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"You need to learn how to make an exit,
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HI-Z
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Damn Jack well done this in my opinion is your best work as of yet all the I need to battle to be good stuff is bs bro just keep doing you.
Your use of the provided words was great and props for being the first to tackle the challenge(to my knowledge). I have the feeling that you might not be quite as new to the site as you originally lead on. What with you referring to Scotty's servers in your raint and the ease at wich you navigate the site. But more power to ya, catch ya later |
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Sammy
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^^this was written by Cuba, bro, lol!
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HI-Z
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Lmao well that makes more sense, I gotta chill out on the bud before I post reply's sorry Cuba for the mishap lol well done bro. I was thinking Damn jacks got some skills lmfao but na its just Cuba doing his thing.
Edited by HI-Z - 18 December 2016 at 8:27am |
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Cuba
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Trizzy Tre
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HI-Z....Lol bro....Smh Anyways...Cuba it was dope. This quick verse displayed your strong wording and vocab usage. The first two bars were tough kept it with some clever plays. Good shit |
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SELF ACTIVATE
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^Flow+Aggression+Humor+Pop Cultur=Fire! Also, I like how you threw in "suture" from a previous WD challenge. And that relic/future line was sick. Good shit Cubes. Peace... |
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daydizzle89
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This was nice Cubez. Flow was on point, use of vocab giving is well used and your delivery is always cocky on a higher level. This was dope. Enjoyed....
This shit's so advanced it's like a relic of the future ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ This shit was advanced lmfao |
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-Que-
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My writtens are a mirage of sanguine depravity Ha!!! You fucker! When I first approached this WD I already knew you had the opener of openers. Using Mirage before the actual description? Totally in and out of existence shit. DOOOPE! That detonate on you like onomatopoeia. Veracity. That boom bap, rat-a-tat-tat, that rips fast to puncture you Old school fronting dude, like a placard reading "pulchritude" Again! Using the positive as a negative....dope. That's ^^^outside the box shit. This shit's so advanced it's like a relic of the future I want everyone to ponder this phrase "Relic of the Future". Do you realize how futuristic you have to be to be a relic of the future? At least that's how it struck me. Yup Tryna stem this flow'll need more than a tourniquet or a suture<---All in ya Doc resident Bag ha ha! Dope This bitch somewhere between Bernadette n Medusa More a big bang theory than a threat to the legend of Cuba Yeah, it's all click bait, takes more than a hammer to sway me That shit ain't a fair fight like when the Japs get a hanker for whaling You know you goin to stereotype hell for that lol. But it was clean. I can see you had a lot of fun with this set of WD words that's what made it so nice.
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Cuba
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Haha...I'm like, 3 words first line, take that shit you mfers!!
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KrisKartel718
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Nice Work Cuba great display of word play and intelligence This Piece wasn't simple at all. I would love to hear you actually spit that one day.
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Cuba
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Appreciate the feedback...just in case you were wondering, this relates to this challenge:
http://www.lyricalassault.co.uk/forum/word-drop-7_topic44146.html There are others that are 'stickied' at the top of the Open Mic board. This one was just a fun little entry in kind of semi-reply to a guy called Jack Hammer who did a random diss at me. |
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