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    Posted: 23 October 2017 at 8:34pm

Frustrated at the thought of you
Jumped & upgraded with what they offered you
That’s how you treat me when I did it all for you!?
In the cell & wouldn’t answer my call for you
Those texts the next day were just horrible
We were on the same device, you went an audibled
Couldn’t see if you read it, they said they owed you credit?
Just 2 years you took that leap of faith knowing it’s a debit?!
So what our energy has changed?!
Took a lil’ more time for my battery to raise
Once I was charged my efficiency was the same
Even though my cords were tangled a hundred ways
I plugged into the block for you!
Took about 20 drops for you!
Was by your side in the hospital!
It was me who made that call to your pops for you!
& I was around more than he ever was
Had ya back when you were lost with ya friends & drunk
Now you finna leave me dead & stuck
Think you got somethin’ better, wish you the best of luck..
I won’t be the first thing you see when you wake up
Nah no more that, cuz your loyalty is made up
Fake as the LinkedIn account that we shaped up
To make you look worth more then what you came from
How ironic is that?!
You jumpin’ to the next thing in the drop of a hat
After takin’ advantage of me cuz my confidence lacks
I shut down, need a restart, I won’t apologize for the facts
You put me through more than any guy has in past
& I’m still here.. on the couch acknowledgin’ I’m replaced
By that new phone you bought with the Otterbox case 
..Just forget me


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Damn wigga, switch to T-Mobile. Got that boost plan bruh. This was creative and i liked the way you put this into concept. Defo a nice piece. Mechanics and technical shit on point.
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Yeah man.. I wanted the emotional feel of a relationship but it really just be about buying a new phone lol 
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This was lit, the references were dope lol and you made the whole story have that relationship feel. I enjoyed this read 100%
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Thanks D
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Mad clever, I was hung up on this one def pressed all the right digits
Gotta appreciate this creative out the box number
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clever feedback, thanks
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Instead of leaving feed saying ripe concept (which it was) and ripe that,i'll just put
my hands together and clap loud and slow,I loved this fresh and highly original
contents here,this pieces intentions was cool,almost a rhyme within a rhyme,(now
that would be a solid challenge for you my friend),like SELF and CHAIN,you have
the skills to pull it off,a complete rhyme that contains within 2 separate verses,
anyways really enjoyed this piece it was dynamic really,RIPE WORK...peace.    
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I enjoyed this too, thanks for sharing it dude Clap 

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lolol I liked this a lot. dope job, dope concept. I like how it all connected and was about a phone lol. smooth as usual, but that's notihign new to you, nice rhyming as always. again, I enjoyed the concept. also made me remember someone battle and android being the theme
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Yeah this needs puttin on beat - good stuff

I can imagine the "plugged into the block for you, took about 20 drops for you" bit being catchy as fuck
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