Open Mic: Keying Truth into your Buick

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    Posted: 07 October 2015 at 4:40pm

Im a beast ready to fight
Im steady with rights, breaking down levies with might
the devil n white, on a whole deafening level with rhymes
ill kick the treble with lines n dishevel ya spine
Im the full metal jacket shining ya eyes n ripping vessels in tissue
when im done with you, people will pay tribute with "we wont miss you"
im lethal like a ginsu, slicing into more skin than a phillips screw
my angle of view is more dangerous than a new strain of the avian flue
i would hate to be you, a toxic waste making me puke
a flaming blume radiating more pain than a nuke
ill take a bunch of shrooms n lay waste to you dudes
Ill castrate you fools n have red paint spray from ya wombs 
i rage on you noobs, you aint got the same strain of DNA to take part of this music
you abusing text n losing the most fluid of styles with typing lame ass half truths n'
you fools be dubious with others shit with each others dicks n your mouth, spuming lips
you too stupid n clueless to take hold of a mic and fucking use it to spit

 

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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Senor Perfecto Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 29 October 2015 at 5:40pm
Daydizzle... good flow and rhymes...  Some lines were good... others were lyrical-filler...  Lines were stretched towards the end as you forced rhymes and tried to fit in too many internal rhymes...

Adios...
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote nomedic Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 01 November 2015 at 5:52pm
Yeah i think you tried too much towards the end but most of this was okay flow wise and the content couldve been better but over all this entertainin stay up
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