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Absolute Abomination
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Posted: 06 December 2018 at 5:27am |
A fractured mind, disguised by a night sky
The owl can barely rhyme It twists and turns, an intelligent curse 'til he murmurs words that barely resemble a verse Die tonight or stay and fight Tell the therapist he's always right Sorry; meant to say I'm alright Reminds himself there's more than her in this life But he's heard the voices for so long he doubts their lies Disconnects and falls free from gravity Can't tell fiction from reality Lacks conviction and morality He loves her brains and anatomy They're in different lanes, sadly His persistence is maddening Always worried she's mad at me Says she'll join when he's happy Tragedy Can't keep his perspectives straight Missed his chance, left it 'til too late Even in the beginning Adam had Eve, So why THE FUCK is this my destiny? Where's my forbidden tree and a friendly snake talkin' to me? break Where's God? Why THE FUCK'S He someplace I can't see? Somewhere I feel like I can never be Is this really his plan for me? A life I don't understand, don't even know if I hate it All I know is that if it were up to me, this is NOT how I would have made it I woulda taught him something else OTHER than hatred OTHER than having him thinking he's better than layman's OTHER than having him struggling making payments OTHER than thinking he's deranged whenever he opens pages From a book he wish he never wrote Memories he had hoped to erase with the end of a rope His life's like a punchline at the end of a bad joke But he's seen that outcome and knows peace begets pain So he struggles for others joy, and at best he stays sane Remains the same, his brain ingrained With the belief he can never be trained Never grow, never fill in the frame He's a shell of his former self The ten year old who didn't know hell Didn't know about his mental health Just enjoyed his lower middle wealth and wellbeing It's obscene that at thirteen he thought he'd see His pops ghost, thoughts of loss shed a single tear at most Childhood reversed A man's like a plant, needs the son to grow Went from good to worse He's right to think so, just short of a schizo Used to keep the sleeves on his wrists low Will he be missed? I believe so Deaths sweet kiss; please no I hope that .. break It doesn't matter what he tries Failure after failure his whole life Maybe later he'll thrive But please tell me, in who's eyes? If you say yours I'll know it's lies I can see right through the disguise A creative with no fruit Not an MC and he lacks the Juice Rarely has a good idea, and when he does it gets missed Savours his hidden victories, and he's left alone to reminisce |
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Sammy
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why would an owl rhyme (or be expected to rhyme?).
that aside, i actually read this a few times over the course of the day and its not too bad, man. Haven't seen u in an ill minute but nice come-back piece. Wording were pretty good most the way through. some nice imagery too (like the sleeves line). overall, good to see u back, AA.
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Absolute Abomination
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thanks for the comment Sammy
Honestly I wrote it months before posting it, found it as an unfinished piece on my phone notebook and went back over it to finish it. Don't remember why I was so focused on using an 'owl' when i originally wrote it, but i felt like keeping it. Looking back at it and analysing, I don't think it's too far fetched of a concept. In the simplest form, I'm just a night owl who likes to write but doesn't have much confidence in my writing ability. anyway, thanks again.
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Endeavor
Senior Moderator Wiggle wiggle said the bun that jiggle Joined: 03 April 2009 Location: Your kitchen Status: Offline Points: 10000102 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 5-4-0 Form: WWLWLW |
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Owls are dope, the fuck ya'll talm bout?!?!
Did you know a group of owls is called a parliament? This is because owls are considered to be wise and shit. It's also legal to keep owls as pets. There was especially a heavy influx after the Harry Potter movies cuz people thought they was dope. While they are, they don't really make great pets. Sort of like Ravens. They're demanding, need a lot of space and attention. Especially snow owls, arguably the dopest ones take special care. They're not suited for temperate climates. As for the piece? Was dope fam. Unfortunately by now my break is over so I won't be able to go in depth but I'm with Sammy here. |
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