Open Mic: [KOTM] The Handjob...

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the nightly jog
that free moment just right before dawn
wildly calm, each plodding plop
keeps me trudging along

it starts with a ringing alarm
followed by a shower so hot
my bathroom turns to a forest in fog
a deep breath ensures no moment is lost

soon time - the day'll be lost. 

a mixture of bitching boss, 
six reports that need retorts 
I give my temples an extensive massage
exhale 'whoosah', as my inner peace nods.

the sound of my jogging suit is a zipping mirage. 
zoop, zoop, zoop, zoop starts pissing me off.

I think of all the anger ive built
why im not caking, making a mil
taking regular vacations in Brasil
im slaving, so I can basically graciously pay bills. 
nay I say, as my trainers get killed
I hasten my pace, racing myself, uphill. 

what a metaphor. 

the anxiety drills. climbs from the depths of hell
relentless in its quest to silently kill. 
as I question myself like "why am I here?"
im tired of this tireless tale, the diatribe ive failed.

thats how I start my day.. and I finish it well. 

this is supposed to be my serenity of chill
but the stress grasps me like an enemy ive helped
a familiar face, with a propensity to steal
everything ive worked for, the energy is real. 

everyday mundane routine, strangling, surreal. 

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Neek Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Site Moderator Super Mario Slaughterer Joined: 05 October 2004 Status: Offline Points: 3862 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-1-0 Form: LWWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Neek Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Topic: [KOTM] The Handjob... Posted: 04 February 2017 at 1:52pm
	the nightly jog that free moment just right before dawn wildly calm, each plodding plop keeps me trudging along it starts with a ringing alarm followed by a shower so hot my bathroom turns to a forest in fog a deep breath ensures no moment is lost soon time - the day'll be lost. a mixture of bitching boss, six reports that need retorts I give my temples an extensive massage exhale 'whoosah', as my inner peace nods. the sound of my jogging suit is a zipping mirage. zoop, zoop, zoop, zoop starts pissing me off. I think of all the anger ive built why im not caking, making a mil taking regular vacations in Brasil im slaving, so I can basically graciously pay bills. nay I say, as my trainers get killed I hasten my pace, racing myself, uphill. what a metaphor. the anxiety drills. climbs from the depths of hell relentless in its quest to silently kill. as I question myself like "why am I here?" im tired of this tireless tale, the diatribe ive failed. thats how I start my day.. and I finish it well. this is supposed to be my serenity of chill but the stress grasps me like an enemy ive helped a familiar face, with a propensity to steal everything ive worked for, the energy is real. everyday mundane routine, strangling, surreal.
	#Bananas

Crimson Juice Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Site Moderator Joined: 20 December 2015 Location: U.K. Status: Offline Points: 3258 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LLWLW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Crimson Juice Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 04 February 2017 at 3:29pm
	Well fuck me running (pun intended),hello Neek good to see you about friend.. First off liking the inner schemes here,and the imagery was ripe,I could actually see the theme you was creating here,it was quite vivid and it was expressed well, even the inclusion of onomatopoeie was a real nice touch,(with the tracksuit lines),this piece was deep really,due to its subtle wording and what I like to call a two tone verse,it appeals to all from the lower ppl understanding of rhymes to the highest,at a glance it had a simplistic vibe,but it also conained options to go as deep as you can comprehend,it's a real handy tool to have in the locker to be truthful,as it guarantees readability,I was also feeling the metaphorical content here,this verse is littered with real life question,and at times I guess we all run to stand still,a highly enjoyable read,plus thought line lengths were easy on the eye,also made for a pacey read and enhanced the flow too, good work,and good to see you participating here..peace.
	"You need to learn how to make an exit, before you can dare make an entrance".

Sammy Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Site Moderator Beacon of Light Joined: 24 October 2015 Status: Offline Points: 2223 Crew: Elision Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-1-1 Form: LNW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Sammy Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 04 February 2017 at 11:46pm
	Oh shit! The homie Neek in the building!


Sky Scrapur Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 21 October 2014 Status: Offline Points: 1133 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Audio Rank: Unranked Stats: 0-1-0 Form: L	Post Options Post Reply Quote Sky Scrapur Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 05 February 2017 at 4:51am
	Damn the dude has returned in style. The return alone deserves 5stars


Amgin Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Groupie Joined: 31 January 2017 Status: Offline Points: 140 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 0-3-0 Form: LLL	Post Options Post Reply Quote Amgin Report Post Likes(1) Quote Reply Posted: 09 February 2017 at 11:52pm
	loved the opening! Very relatable as I exercise in the evening aswell. The personification of "stress" was awesome and very true