Open Mic: LA Aint Tough

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    Posted: 09 October 2017 at 12:23am
Heard this site's full of "sick writers" ..
but before believin it, I wanna see the shit, 
and be content thinkin it wasn't "dickriders" ... misconstrued.
So where ... ??Confused
cos believe me, I swear, I'm being as fair, 
as can be .. from what I can see, 
this damned ol freak .. show of LA don't even compare ...
Ironically, it's like you're failing geometry.
The way y'all honestly confuse writers-block with ya being a square Wink
Come here y'all got rules like the law, what an odd coincidence.
cos it's like gettin jumped by the pOlice, with all these bars I hit you with.
Some you lames rappin bout spraying magazines. Why wouldn't I wanna diss you??
matter fact, be like a disgruntled Times customer, cos you don't really want an issue.
Don't mean to reference a recent tragic event cos it's so shitty
But you don't wanna take the gamble, keep your gold penny
cos you'll bet your happy ass, in the aftermath 
they'll wonder how one man simply killed so many .. Shocked
I come thru like them storms. Texas, Florida. Y'all couldn't scatter any faster.
Have LA looking like the next place that got hit with a natural disaster ...






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Mad potential
You wouldn't be able to do this if you didn't have a well developed skill set
I reckon you could go in hard on a diss if you really tried
Maybe a little on the cheese factor around about the Law part but I can overlook that....
Welcome to LA man
keep hitting on us and no doubt you will wake up a giant before too long,
This legendary place could use some more people like yourself to help revive it
Keep up player

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Thanks bro
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Seems like your strength is wordplay and maintaining an end-of-the-line rhyme structure. Don't see many internals which really hinders the flow.

Keep at it.
Show me a fortress and I'll show you a ruin.
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@who-is-you? Idealizt???
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