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Cuba 
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 Topic: LA times [WD5]Posted: 21 July 2016 at 11:05pm |
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Give my antagonist's respite? I'm jest like, that's bogus
Make em feel hopeless with misanthropic osmosis Till they double up...like J5 to Kosmosis! Foes were "oh he's so vogue-ish", "it's a transient phase" Now they're all impish like "maannn we was playyyyyy'n" But that's just scep-tism.. tryna get less derision.. Kinda like when Scorpia King switched to Nepotism Softened up the Dynasty, ossify when it gets to writtens Bombing past iconoclast's with abominable physics So they're fucked behind bars...no conjugal visits Sorry if some of the old school references go over the head
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levy420
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Posted: 21 July 2016 at 11:19pm |
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This was dope Cuba nice play on the words given love the la theme you brought to it an it all flowed cohesively it's gonna be hard to one up this I predict u taking the word drop for this month that nepotism line was raw as fuck good shit stay up
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Crimson Juice
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Posted: 24 July 2016 at 11:22pm |
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Well done here dude,not only did you use all the key words,but
they were used well,not just thrown in there and then rhymed with,you actually made them mean something within this piece, the flow was also good,and your own contents backed up the the keys words like a hand in hand couple,I feel it's going to take something real special to top this,and to be fair,the key words here are quite hard to go on,so all that left for me to type is good work Cuba,real good..peace. |
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alicewonder
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Posted: 24 July 2016 at 11:27pm |
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I'm indeed not really familiar with some of the references you incorporated here, but I really enjoyed the word placements and the scheme of this. The associations and thought process behind some of the lines, such as the "osmosis" or the "Scorpia King" are very creative. You maintained a natural tone throughout, and I think everything was put together quite well, which is definitely not that easy with regard to some of the required words. I think I've actually only read a few of your verses, so it's nice to see you participating.
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CSKiLLz
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Posted: 24 July 2016 at 11:38pm |
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Some of this did go over my head z little bit but dope shit all around. Flow was nice and everything was put together well. Good shit
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The Law
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Posted: 25 July 2016 at 2:00pm |
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Dope shit cube's... Easy top contender for the word drop this month. You need to come out of retirement and start writing though.
As far as the verse, the whole thing worked for me. Played off of each word nicely and had some good references in there. Favorite bars were the closing 2, even if dynasty was before my time :P. Enough word drops now. Get back into the game.
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Rutter knows best
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Posted: 26 July 2016 at 4:19pm |
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Opening couplet was a real nice start 3rd line was the cherry on top , slick punch there. You carried on pretty solid with some nice rhyme schemes and I thought you closed off nice with your use of conjugal. Another really solid entry here another contender.
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#bananas
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-Que-
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Posted: 28 July 2016 at 5:27pm |
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When I seen your drop Cube I was like dammm. The way you effortlessly go top scholar on muthafukkahs. The O.C.D like precision when gathering facts and combing then into a solid Topic. I wasn't around for the Scorpia era but the J5/Kos bar was clean."Oh he's so vogue ish" lmaoo. Nice. Top tier bro
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Neek
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Posted: 29 July 2016 at 3:02am |
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this was real dope. I was *not at all* a fan of rhyming kosmosis with osmosis but hey.. it fucking worked and the people love it.
bombing past iconoclast segment tho? sweet mother of jesus that was very dope. the conjugal was a dope grab. just dennis rodman in the paint on deez hoes.. waka flaka would be proud. tossing in derision (a previous WD word if im not mistaken) earns twelve yolo's. dope drop cubes. told you in private..I had THOUGHT I dropped feed but alas im a lousy human being. tally ho then. |
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#Bananas
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Posted: 29 July 2016 at 3:07am |
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Granted our private conversation earlier, I can still say I like this the best out of all of them.
Reading it I kinda felt like an Eminem vibe. Nothing seemed forced and essentially, everything seemed to come together naturally. Almost like the lines were puzzle pieces scattered about and you put the puzzle together. Impressive piece and even better that I know the references. |
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Posted: 29 July 2016 at 3:09am |
^be sarcastic..joking, right? |
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Trizzy Tre
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Posted: 29 July 2016 at 3:37am |
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Yo Cuba this was dope. Interesting word usage and overall concepts. I liked the theme of the piece too.
That opener was killer. Sickness. |
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Posted: 29 July 2016 at 5:13am |
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seriously that first line tho...fire...i was surprised that you were able to keep the momentum leading off of that. nice work.
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Posted: 29 July 2016 at 7:37pm |
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First up bro, I gotta say that supportive attitude a few months ago was much appreciated.just to be clear massive improvement.
And to the drop. All that skill is evident you are a talented writer no doubt Just thinking though if I didn't know j5 an kos like I don't know scorpia what would I know? Many won't know either Jus thinking Respect |
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Posted: 29 July 2016 at 7:42pm |
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Great use of the words here Cubes, Very coherent with the restrictions. This was dope. Liking how you made this peace relevant. Kudos brothaman
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