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    Posted: 25 July 2022 at 2:15am

Man of Tomorrow

By: Sammy

 

 

Metropolis 3011 A.D.

 

Its been years since violence was vanquished

a time where truth and justice constitute a pious position

now a recluse...i drifted in quiet conviction

hoping and praying somewhere...

somehow...crime still exist. Then...

 

I suit up, not for power prestige...but in hours of needs

as others cower and bend...to the power and plead

a thousand defeats. in past they would shout for the League

as eyes of profuse cries drew a sigh of relief

smiles would cease. father time working his splendor

friends, apprehended; blessing? well, now they’re in peace

i’m showered in grief; the world is empty and vacant

image parade in makeshifts lace with sentiments. maybe..

i was made to rule this baby blue orb through the ages

arctic wind whispers silent cries, harboring hatred

walking aimlessly...gone...all is gone or is taken

i would ponder the days when Bruce and Robin were chasing

lunatics through the roof then split; Gotham was crazy

Flash was a character, lol, king of quips; that little shit!

sure his foot-speed was fast...but not as quick as his wits

 

...a sudden twitch in the distance

my attention was fixed

super sense detecting movement

through a blanket of mist..

 

"Miss" was an understatement, she was a product of legend

neither Gogs nor Guardians would dare this Goddess descendant

And its hard to imagine - in all her fiery Wonder

Diana long for all the simple charms that life had to offer

To call her “Wife”...i am honored...”Despite my iron facade...

i solemnly swear to hold you....in highest regards..”

 

A surge of energy cleared the cob,

complacency spun

as i peered into the dark,

prospect of chase has begun...

 

We were more than just Avengers, but a League of our own!

breathing adversity and even as a team we would grow!

Adrenaline pumping! cause we’re fighting for something!!

IGNITING....collective fire as we fight the injustice!!

Don’t give a fuck if its Darkseid or some pyro-kinetic!!

we would rise against the vilest type, applying our gifts, but..

 

….BUT

i knew it was nothing; its all just pretend

as loneliness grabs a hold of us

enthralled by the “when”

appalled in the least

moonwalking to past glories

for some solace and sense

of self-worth...

cause i’m honestly spent

but throughout the

contemplation

i would find

myself

whis

per

in

g

 

“faster than speeding bullets

leaping the tallest buildings...”

 

...now its leap of faith; a strand of hope i’d foolishly tugged..

heavy hearts are burden; hmm...so much for super strength, huh?

tonight i rest my cape in peace and though my part isn’t certain

just understand even a Superman needs to walk with a purpose





Edited by Sammy - 25 July 2022 at 2:27am


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so bored today and a lot of time on my hand so i decided to stroll through the old site and boiiii im glad i did... 

First off, how ya been fam? I hope life is treating kind my brother 

I really forgot how much i loved coming on here and reading my fams work. It sucks that there is so much talent on display here and so few eyes to see it. I love the switchups in your schemes and the complexity to it all. you dont conform to the normal style of writing you see on most sites and this is what really sets you apart. more enjoyable is simply the content. a super heros place in the world must be a lonely one. the inner turmoil just boils over and every word is felt. i really love reading these dark superhero/anti hero pieces. someone with all that strength and special gift simply pulled down to a human level ya know. . .  im really glad i snuck in here to catch a new piece from you bro. thanks for sharing and again, hope all is well 

later bro 
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Really enjoyable read. Load of high class touches gave it a real tactile feel. I really liked the the "blanket of mist", as an example. You were quite cute at the start how you kind of framed it as a time that wasn't too dissimilar from the political time we sit in today, post truth world.

The only real thing I would say against it, which is just my personal preference really, is I like to see a narrative progress and story unfold. This felt like a reflection piece, i.e. superman standing at a point in time and looking back. I would've liked a greater balance between story and characterisation. Though I have no idea how you would've done it in this type of piece !!!

Great drop man, love that you posted it here for those of us who check in now and again
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Enoch thanks bro. Always appreciate ur feedback. Now it’s ur turn to drop some fire!!! Need a new rhetoric piece in my life

Cuba, and a heartfelt thanks to u too bro!! I will get to feeding ur verses very soon.


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